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Van Gogh Night Cafe First Draft

Oh lamps, you subdue as much as you emblazon This room - here - to contain vulgarity Until new light cleanses of offence The hour late for light, but early for darkness Emitted from these walls and floors is a foulness that is both pleasure and pain to be part of We ~ occupy ~ this space Mostly with closed eyes Waiting for dawn, waiting for tomorrow or change that might occur without active involvement Quiet chaos plays out as we slither from or to the floor Overcome, by the most part, with a sense of belonging Belonging bought for, what seems to be, a small price To keep company to make it through the night

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Date: 2/11/2024 2:39:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in my First Draft contest with this free verse ekphrastic poem, Di11y Da11y. You have met the brief with these philosophical musings, to a T. Right from the onset, you made me sit up with the introduction: ‘Oh lamps, you subdue as much as you emblazon’, the ‘Oh lamps’ a bit out of place with the pace set by the rest of the poem. Your poem may be summed up in your own words: ‘Quiet chaos’. Intentional or otherwise, it was a feast for the eyes. ~Suzette
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Suzette Richards
Date: 2/11/2024 6:14:00 AM
Your poetry always has many levels, as Van Gogh's paintings with sometimes insightful interpretations. Have a good Sunday afternoon. Hope you are not snowed in.
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 2/11/2024 6:05:00 AM
Haha I did aim for the overall effect. The 'oh lamps' was resignation and acceptance for what is only palatable due to subdued lighting and numbed senses. Pure vulgarity but better than spending time alone. I've never been to such a place I hasten to add and this was just from the painting. Thank you for your placement. Glad you enjoyed it, it was a shame I'd never gone back to this draft x
Date: 2/10/2024 1:37:00 PM
Love Van Gogh. Congratulations Di11y! :)
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Di11y Da11y
Date: 2/11/2024 6:09:00 AM
Thanks Linda x

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