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Unrequited Attraction

I caught your eye as it flashed across my line of sight, My first thought was that you were completely--out of sight. A beautiful blonde would not give me a second thought, I might as well have been a million miles--from your sight. I sent a note to you along with a nice glass of sweet Bordeaux You accepted it and quickly took it from the bar--and my sight. But I could not see you in the smoky dust rising distant there With a handsome man embracing, the dancing--from my sight. So, I left my drink upon the bar and left the smokey bar alone Once home, I dreamed of the blonde who stole my heart--on sight. I have returned to the bar several times since I saw you there But you have not returned to dance the night away--in my sight. [Theme chosen: Love] FIRST PLACE WINNER Rewritten and reposted February 25, 2022 submitted to "G - Poetry Form" Poetry Contest sponsored by Constance La France

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/14/2022 3:39:00 AM

I have read your winning entry and was delighted to see it on the winners' list. Congratulations on your place of honor. Way to go. Sara

L Milton Hankins
Date: 3/14/2022 8:20:00 AM

Thank you so much, Sara. I appreciate the read and your thoughtful comment.

Constance La France

Date: 3/4/2022 1:02:00 AM

Milt, congratulations on your win in my Give Me A New Poem Contest with your beautiful poem ~Constance

L Milton Hankins
Date: 3/4/2022 8:11:00 AM

Thank you so much, Constance. The Ghazal is certainly a challenging poetry format.

Eve Roper

Date: 3/2/2022 8:39:00 AM

Back with congratulations.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 3/2/2022 9:00:00 AM

Thanks so much, Eve.

Terry Miller

Date: 3/2/2022 12:02:00 AM

Congratulations Milt on another winner

L Milton Hankins
Date: 3/2/2022 8:30:00 AM

Thanks so much, Terry. It was a rework of one I wrote a long time ago when I was trying to work my way through Poetry Soup's poetry forms.

Eve Roper

Date: 3/1/2022 9:45:00 PM

Awesome Ghazal, Milton, congratulations on your win. I've only written one.. I was a little nervous to write one.

L Milton Hankins
Date: 3/2/2022 8:31:00 AM

Frankly, they are kind of weird, in my humble opinion. It's difficult to have a rhyming word or phrase you can repeat over and over that fits each couplet. I'm sure you could write a good one, Eve. It's not rocket science.

Jeff Kyser

Date: 2/26/2022 9:13:00 AM

You should have ghazal'd your drink before you left the bar! I wondered if anyone would go with that form, but it worked out nicely!

L Milton Hankins
Date: 2/26/2022 9:45:00 AM

I did, Jeff. I couldn't bring myself to write a brand new one, so I re-did the only one I had ever written, polished it up, and submitted it. It's kind of sappy, if you ask me!

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 2/26/2022 5:15:00 AM

Somehow I cannot relate to Ghazals written in English since I’m accustomed to the Hindi or Urdu versions we listen to here in India. Pankaj Udhas, Ghulam Ali, Jagjit Singh and such legends. However, I must say that you’ve conjured some magic with your words here, Milt! Good luck for the contest

L Milton Hankins
Date: 2/26/2022 9:47:00 AM

Thank you so much, Unseeking Seeker. I really appreciate your thoughts on this one.