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I recently posted a poem called 'Dressed by Nature' Arthur Vaso then challenged me to write one with this title

Trapped for so long in walls that cocooned her She struggles to break free All she desires is escape from the darkness of her prison And the walls that bind her To feel the sun on her face, the cool breeze on her body She pushes and pushes with all her might … Eventually she sees a pinprick of daylight She struggles and struggles, fighting with all her strength Finally emerging into the world Fluid pumps around her body She twists and turns and her wings start to unfurl Hanging upside-down she remains motionless for several hours Slowly, sensuously, she reveals her beautiful body I gasp at her breathtaking beauty – she is simply stunning There before my very eyes – a beautiful butterfly 13th April 2015

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Noman Hamza

Date: 7/18/2015 11:51:00 PM

'simply stunning' can also describe your poem.It is as balanced,as brilliant ,light and small as a butterfly.i like the phrase 'a pinprick of daylight'.Noman

Jan Allison
Date: 7/19/2015 4:07:00 AM

oh thanks you for such a delightful comment Norman:-) hugs jan xx

William Gray

Date: 5/9/2015 3:36:00 AM

Hi Jan, A beautiful piece of writing, superb images adding great feelings and emotion!. The picture as always compliments this great poem!. Loved this Jan.xx

Jan Allison
Date: 7/19/2015 4:04:00 AM

I'm so sorry I missed this comment before - many thanks for dropping by:-) hugs Jan xx

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 4/30/2015 4:55:00 AM

Hi Jan. A very beautifully, well-penned piece it is!! *^_^*

Jan Allison
Date: 4/30/2015 5:00:00 AM

Thanks Teddy - Arthur challenged me to write a poem with this title after I posted a poem called dress by nature - not quite sure it was what he was expecting lol but I was really pleased with the final result and the lovely comments:-) hugs jan xx

Wilfred Aniagyei

Date: 4/17/2015 6:48:00 AM

Nicely penned....very encouraging.... I wonder if you were challenged more lol

Jan Allison
Date: 4/17/2015 6:51:00 AM

Oh Arthur has challenged me on several occasions - I am so glad he liked what i came up with for this one! :-) Hugs Jan xx

Darlene Gifford

Date: 4/16/2015 8:38:00 PM

Labor is long. But the end result is worth the struggle as she emerges and shares her beauty with the world. Well written, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/16/2015 8:43:00 PM

Thanks so much Darlene:-) Hugs Jan xx

Matt Forshay

Date: 4/14/2015 10:07:00 PM

This is a beautiful and deceptive tale of one of natures great transformations. At least I wasn't thinking about a butterfly until it emerged at the very end.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/15/2015 3:29:00 AM

Thanks Matt I like to write with a twist at the end of my poems if I can:-) Hugs jan xx

James Fraser

Date: 4/14/2015 2:57:00 PM

Beautifully constructed poetry Jan for each line takes the reader on a wonderful journey with the delightful ending of a butterfly. Love it, to my fav's, hugs//James xx

Jan Allison
Date: 4/14/2015 3:02:00 PM

Oh thank you so much for your continued support James I do appreciate you taking the time to comment:-) Hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 4/14/2015 8:18:00 AM

You rose to the challange, I believe this to be one of your best Jan.7!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/14/2015 11:22:00 AM

Thanks Richard - I relate this write to my poetry journey over the last 14 months - wow I am flying high and spreading my wings like a butterfly:-) hugs Jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 4/14/2015 7:09:00 AM

WOW! I love how you did this JAn.. :) the ending is a good twist.. the other lines is simply the skin of the caterpillar.. very clever.. :)!hugsxx!~olive eloisa

Jan Allison
Date: 4/14/2015 11:21:00 AM

Thanks Olive I love to write with a twist - I can only thank Arthur for the title:-) Hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 4/14/2015 2:16:00 AM

Wonderful expressions Jan! What a lovely tribute !

Jan Allison
Date: 4/14/2015 6:43:00 AM

Thanks Dr Sharma:-) Hugs Jan xx

Thomas Martin

Date: 4/13/2015 6:46:00 PM

Love the subject matter, Beautifully expressed!.

Jan Allison
Date: 4/14/2015 1:07:00 AM

Thanks Thomas:-) Hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/13/2015 6:33:00 PM

haha, at first I thought it was a baby in th e womb and my second guess was BAT, and then I guessed butterfly!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/14/2015 1:07:00 AM

I do like to have a twist at the end - guess you could say I'm a bit twisted lol:-) Hugs jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 4/13/2015 5:28:00 PM

I loved the twist Jan...you had me...lovely hugs Tim

Jan Allison
Date: 4/14/2015 1:06:00 AM

Thanks Tim - you know me well my friend:-) Hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 4/13/2015 3:44:00 PM

WOW!!!! :) will you had me stumped here I thought it was a woman, Duh,,, a butterfly. I love it, wonderful write, you out did yourself. a 7 and a fav. Blessings eve

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2015 3:50:00 PM

Thanks Eve the image i posted was deliberately misleading... but I do like to write poems with a twist if I can:-) Hugs jan x

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 4/13/2015 1:51:00 PM

- A fantastic writing, you are amazing dear friend Jan !!!!! - Topp rating !!! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2015 1:53:00 PM

Aww thanks Anne Lise - Arthur challenged me to write a poem with this title and I am really pleased with the comments I've received:-) Hugs Jan xx

Lotte Lo

Date: 4/13/2015 12:49:00 PM

Birth is a fascinating process and covered in your words it is magical! Thanks a lot :)

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2015 12:58:00 PM

Thanks for that delightful comment Lotte:-) Hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 4/13/2015 11:52:00 AM

Honestly the line "she pushes and pushes with all her might" I thought we were talking constipation and hemorrhoids. Luckily if was a stunning poem about a butterfly! Stunning!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2015 11:58:00 AM

LOL you do make me smile my friend:-) love and hugs Jan xx

Emile Pinet

Date: 4/13/2015 11:33:00 AM

A heart warming story that carries a message of hope and rebirth within nature as a caterpillar's transformed into a butterfly. Emile. #7

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2015 11:45:00 AM

Thanks for the lovely comment Emile I am delighted by the comments I have received for the challenge set down by Arthur:-) Hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 4/13/2015 11:06:00 AM

Beautiful write Jan...best wishes

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2015 11:20:00 AM

Thanks Joseph - just a fun write as a result of a challenge set down by Arthur:-) Hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 4/13/2015 10:31:00 AM

Wow, simply beautiful!!!! Loved this!!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2015 10:33:00 AM

Oh Arthur thank you - I did hope you were not disappointed with my interpretation of the title:-) hugs jan xx

Sharon Gulley

Date: 4/13/2015 8:54:00 AM

Wow ! Jan, I love this exceptional write here and I love butterflies so this write made my day to read with it's excellent imagery, and sweetness of words as well as thought put into this one. Awesome write and a 7 for me, off to my favs....Sharon G. Hugs : )

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2015 9:02:00 AM

Thanks Sharon thanks so much for your lovely comment - reading about how the butterfly HAS to struggle to get out of the cocoon or its wings won't unfold makes you appreciate the intricacies of our natural world :-) Hugs Jan xx

Anna Hopper

Date: 4/13/2015 8:53:00 AM

This is amazing! I adore your descriptive words. Simply exquisite! A 7 from me!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2015 8:59:00 AM

Thanks so much for the lovely comment Anna:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/13/2015 8:51:00 AM

Enjoyed reading your work..You brought the butterfly's metamorphis alive..Thanks for stopping by..Sara..I have finished my work Fiery Horse..

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2015 8:58:00 AM

Thanks Sara I was a tale reading about a child trying to help a butterfly emerge from a cocoon and the butterfly was unable to fly - they need the struggle to get out of the cocoon to get the fluid moving to get their wings to unfold - isn't nature amazing:-) Hugs jan xx

Casarah Nance

Date: 4/13/2015 7:49:00 AM

AWESOME!! Wow, you are a woman of many great styles and forms, you can write anything and make it work! you rock!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2015 7:56:00 AM

I had to give Arthur's challenge a go - think he will be a bit disappointed with the ending lol:-) Hugs

Grace Mutindi

Date: 4/13/2015 7:45:00 AM

This is beautiful Jan...love it!

Jan Allison
Date: 4/13/2015 7:56:00 AM

Thanks Grace:-) Hugs jan xx