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Underwater

Come and see, beneath the sea
A world unbound by gravity

Seaweed forests which float and sway
Where schools of fishes dart and play

Castles of misty coral sands
Glimmer in pastel rainbow strands

Boldly disguised, the octopus blends
Like an eight-legged chameleon

A turquoise tail of a maiden fair
Breathing bubbles instead of air

Fantastic yellows and blues divine
Dazzle with aquamarine shine

Sun dappled coins spill liquid light
As waves crest towards lilac night

This magic lies, so close below
So take my hand, hold your breath -
Here we go!

11/06/22

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Paige Hind

Date: 8/16/2023 5:32:00 PM

Hey, this was very creative and sing-songy! I felt like I was on a ride- or underwater!

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 12/30/2022 4:50:00 AM

What a magic trip you are inviting us all on Michelle - who couldn't but see the wonders of plant life and all the different species of fish, mermaids and others sea life creatures you describe - how breath-taking are your couplets. I hope you had a awesome Christmas and that 2023 is a whopper year for you and yours. Blessings and hugs, Jennifer.

John Watt

Date: 12/22/2022 12:46:00 PM

I remember riding the submarine ride at Disneyland as a young kid and being in awe of the magic and color and otherworldly spectacle of it all, like visiting another planet's ecosystem where everything is strange, awe-inspiring, and full of wonder. That was the sense I got reading your couplets... a little bit of poetic magic that made me feel 8 again for just a moment. I particularly enjoyed the line "Sun dappled coins spill liquid light As waves crest towards lilac night" and the steady rhythm that felt like the gentle push and pull of the ocean. Beautiful ~ John

Michelle Faulkner
Date: 12/23/2022 10:22:00 AM

So glad this brought back happy memories for you, I don't think I've done that ride but haven't been to disneyland in a long time, hope you're having a merry holiday season~

Valsa George

Date: 12/4/2022 9:03:00 PM

"Seaweed forests which float and sway/ Where schools of fishes dart and play/ Castles of misty coral sands/ Glimmer in pastel rainbow strands".... Lovely couplets. What mysterious delights and wonders the underwater caverns hide. Lovely penning, Michelle !

Ann Peck

Date: 12/1/2022 8:51:00 AM

This is so beautiful, Michelle...a trip to places beneath the tides..."sun-dappled coins spill liquid light..." So gorgeous.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 11/30/2022 10:17:00 AM

Michelle, this is pure, seaborne enchantment! Love the last line. It is filled with playful joy! Got my snorkel and swim fins ready! Every line and every rhyme flow with the fluidity of the tides! Congratulations! Blessings.

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 11/27/2022 3:28:00 AM

Beautiful. So close and yet sometimes so deep under the surface. Kind wishes, Kai

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/17/2022 1:11:00 AM

Creative lines in this winner. Congratulations on placing in Constance's contest. Way to go. Sara

Constance La France

Date: 11/14/2022 6:41:00 AM

Michelle, a lovely poem. Congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge - Unburden- A ''U'' Word, well done! I hope you will enter my new contest, Writing Challenge "V" Forms with quote inspirations and themes.