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Two Riding On A Single

Two riding on a single Man! How fast that bike will go Down the hill around the curve Blow wind blow At the very bottom piled up In a culvert drain In great agony and pain Totally distained Crumpled metal, torn clothes Bleeding and blood stains Harsh words from parents Tears as soap and water cleaned All the cuts and bruises And clothes that had to be changed What an ending to Christmas The joy of Santa's gift Lying dented and scuffed bent Beside the porch needing to be fixed

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 1/14/2010 8:49:00 AM
Dear Sara, Contratulations on your win in Constance's "Anything Goes" Contest! Great job! Thank you for reading and commenting on my poem! Peace and love, Audrey
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Date: 1/13/2010 11:41:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. This was fun to read and easy to visualize with your great imagery. Connie
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Date: 1/10/2010 11:00:00 PM
It was sure cute and congrats on your win! andrea
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Date: 1/10/2010 9:26:00 AM
This is great fun to read, Sara. Congratulations on your success in the contest! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 1/10/2010 4:49:00 AM
Dear Sara, I know I commented on this before and glad you entered it in Constance's contest. I enjoyed it just as much reading it again. Congratulations! on your win, and thank you for sharing. Love, lainie
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Date: 1/6/2010 6:14:00 PM
I can almost picture the bike gaining speed and the wind whipping in their hair as they ride. The sheer joy before the fall.
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Date: 1/5/2010 8:59:00 AM
Its enchanting in everyway.. heartwarming.. bringing back memories.. please check your soup mail..
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Date: 1/4/2010 3:44:00 PM
Now you made into a child again. Good write
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Date: 12/30/2009 7:05:00 AM
More great poerty from another great Souper! HAPPY 2010! Hugs Always, Robin
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Date: 12/29/2009 4:07:00 PM
I've had wild rids on horses before. Never rode a bike much, The young ones will have there wild rides occasionally. Smile! I think this old dog will stay on the porch.Lol! HAPPY NEW YEAR. Sincerely, Love, Moses
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Date: 12/29/2009 3:04:00 PM
Sara, i also can relate to this poem, i have fallen of a bike in the past three times, i am amazed that i am still here >> James
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Date: 12/29/2009 10:06:00 AM
I thank you for writing and sharing your poetry with us here at PoetrySoup Sara. I offer you warm greeting for the New Year with best wishes to you on your writing endeavors in 2010 whatever they may be. Love, Carol
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Date: 12/29/2009 7:18:00 AM
I can really identify with this one. With me it was Figure Skates. Me lying on the ice seeing stars in the daytime. Thank you for sharing. I really enjoyed it. Love, Lainie
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Date: 12/29/2009 2:51:00 AM
Great work, I could almost interact with the verses...Raul
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Date: 12/28/2009 9:18:00 PM
A delightful read in this light poem for today!! andrea
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Date: 12/28/2009 6:45:00 PM
A delightful light piece, Sara! Brings back memories from our Christmases past! Happy New Year and thank you for your kind comments on my poems! Peace and love, Audrey
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Date: 12/28/2009 3:52:00 PM
oh my. this is brilliantly worded. very well penned...love and peace: james
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Date: 12/28/2009 2:29:00 PM
Two riding double on a single can not add up to good...but skin will grow back, good write..thanks on Living in The Street, can my book be bought..no as they have threaten to kill the publisher if printed who Devil worshipers and Mexican Mafia...I have been at this for 30 years, but still going, they have my daughter, God has me..thanks Danny
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Date: 12/28/2009 11:46:00 AM
Clever, very clever! I'm cracking my sides over your comments on my lastest write. You have a lot of talent. (Even your comments are funny!) Hope you had a Merry Christmas. Happy 2010 to you and yours! Milt
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Date: 12/28/2009 11:39:00 AM
Wonderful write here Sara...great vivid imagery captures the scene ...thanks so much for sharing and for your taking the time to read my writes. Many thanks too for your always kind comments..all is much appreciated! Have a blessed day~Mary
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Date: 12/28/2009 10:28:00 AM
good one mom!! hope no one was really hurt!! caleb is watching TV, he says it is too cold for hime to go any where. >LOL
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Date: 12/28/2009 8:18:00 AM
Lots of pace here Sara.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome comments today.
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Date: 12/28/2009 6:11:00 AM
Good thing the riders were okay.. great poetry this morning Sara and I do need something to warm me up again... NO HEAT again.. its about 40 degrees in the house and 20 outside... what a test from God today .. trying to maintain smiles and your poetry always helps me... blessings... luv... Linda-Marie..
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