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Tonight

Tonight while watching candles glow
I hear faint sounds of cricket's tune
Where near the Mississippi's flow
Reflects the dawning of the moon.

My mind is wrapped in reverie
Of summer nights I shared with you.
Of lazy evening's cool iced tea
Those peaceful nights when love was new.

Do you remember when we met?
Crystal raindrops began to fall.
You sheltered me, I can't forget.
'Twas near the ivy covered wall.

But now the bloom of love is gone
And you have moved so far away.
You broke my heart, then you moved on
One day a love will make you pay.

Yet when I dream, I dream of you
And wish that I could rewind time.
When we were young and love was new
And summer nights were so sublime.

Tonight while watching candles glow
I hear faint sounds of cricket's tune
Where near the Mississippi's flow
Reflects the dawning of the moon.

4-26-17
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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U.D Palawon  Avatar
August 7, 2017 at 11:12 AM
The pain of being left raw and the emotions it evokes is so vivid in your write. Congrats! :) Sunita
Marcum Wong Avatar
August 7, 2017 at 1:20 PM
Thank you very much Sunita. The fellow in question has now been married four times. : )
Barden Avatar
August 5, 2017 at 11:12 PM
This is WONDERFUL, Connie - I adore it! If only we could wind the clocks back - I would give anything to do so, and this poem just strengthens that desire in my soul ... so exquisitely! I'm faving this, Dear Friend, and I am SO honored to be on this amazing list of winners - such company to be in! Blessings! <3
Marcum Wong Avatar
August 6, 2017 at 3:42 AM
I appreciate your lovely comment Greg. Thank you so much for Faving my poem too. That means a lot to me. Your poem was very deserving of First Place. : )
Barden Avatar
August 5, 2017 at 11:15 PM
And I'm fav-ing this!! :-D
Dietrich Avatar
August 5, 2017 at 8:28 PM
so happy for you. You are getting some great wins this week, my friend. BIG congrats!!!
Marcum Wong Avatar
August 6, 2017 at 8:31 AM
I love that I have been able to use poems already written in so mamy contests Andrea. I have gotten some N/As from the usual, but am very pleased and grateful with getting on some lists too. Thank you my dear friend. : )
Allison Avatar
August 5, 2017 at 4:05 PM
Absolutely beautiful Connie I can see why John loved this poem and my congratulations on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
Marcum Wong Avatar
August 5, 2017 at 7:36 PM
Thank you Jan. Hope you are having a nice weekend? It is afternoon Sat. here in Hawaii and we are getting ready to go to my husband's 55th H.S. reunion. How time flies! : )
Ashley Avatar
August 5, 2017 at 3:59 PM
Hi Connie, a lovely poem. Congrats on your placement!
Marcum Wong Avatar
August 5, 2017 at 7:36 PM
Thank you very much Susan. : )
Hamilton Avatar
August 4, 2017 at 12:21 PM
This is just beautiful Connie, congrats on a fine placement in a very difficult contest to judge!
Marcum Wong Avatar
August 4, 2017 at 2:40 PM
I agree John, I have been reading all the winning poems and I'm sure it was very difficult to judge this contest! Thank you so much for my placement! : )
Schiavina Avatar
July 24, 2017 at 8:18 AM
Beautiful!
Richards Avatar
May 16, 2017 at 2:53 PM
You make me long for a summer's night, sitting on the window sill, hearing the crickets chirp, feeling the breeze as it ruffles the curtain, and eases the end of a warm summer's day. Thank you for the peace of mind :)
Marcum Wong Avatar
May 16, 2017 at 3:27 PM
You are quite welcome Carrie. We all need more peace in our busy lives. A lovely comment. Thank you very much. : )
Duet Avatar
May 16, 2017 at 1:31 PM
Lovely poem, Connie, and so relatable. I too remember love by the "muddy Mississippi". Congrats on your placement in the contest.
Raven Avatar
May 16, 2017 at 11:33 AM
Hi Connie, well i have found my peace for the day. Your lovely words just lull me into beautiful dreams, they carry me to the Mississippi and back i go in time. Everything seems so gentle and love just has to be in the air when all is serene. Somehow the call of an old riverboat does add to the serenity. There is so much can be taken from this write, this afternoon i do take the peace. Your words sing Connie. This has to be a seven and a fave. Hugs....Mike. XX
Lane Avatar
May 14, 2017 at 9:35 PM
I read this twice, Connie, and each time I found something wonderful to appreciate. I lived along the Mississippi ...born and raised there. I'm faving it.
Marcum Wong Avatar
May 14, 2017 at 9:54 PM
Oh thank you Lin. I found it so peaceful there. A river boat passed by and blew its whistle and my heart swooned. There is no place quite like it. Happy Mother's Day Lin. Hugs, Connie ; )
Warrior Avatar
May 13, 2017 at 6:47 PM
Congrats!!! on win Connie...very well executed my friend...all the best...^WW^
Marcum Wong Avatar
May 13, 2017 at 7:24 PM
You very much WW. I'm having a bit of trouble keeping up. Cheers : )
Hamilton Avatar
May 13, 2017 at 6:34 PM
Really well written Connie, congrats on a fine placement!
Marcum Wong Avatar
May 13, 2017 at 7:27 PM
I was very pleased with my placement in your contest John. Thank you very much. ; )
Callus Avatar
May 13, 2017 at 3:54 PM
Beautiful and nostalgic, Connie. This poem reminds me of a couple of older ones of yours when I tasted traces of Leopardi...love gone and the pain that goes with it. That repeated opening/closing stanza lingers on in my mind. #7+ Regards // paul
Marcum Wong Avatar
May 13, 2017 at 5:38 PM
Thank you for such a lovely compliment Paul. I wish the rest of the poem was as memorable as the first and last stanza....the reason I ended it that way. : )
Dietrich Avatar
May 7, 2017 at 4:03 PM
finally saw your note here to me. Yes, I grew up in the midwest and it does have a wonderful peacefulness to it.
Marcum Wong Avatar
May 7, 2017 at 11:51 PM
I took poetic license to change the place, but most of this is true. Thanks Andrea.: )
Ricci Avatar
May 7, 2017 at 3:08 PM
Good Afternoon Connie. This entry is so solid and smooth. I found this to be poetry in the truest sense and fashion. Your imagery and poetic expressions are all marvelous including the rhyme which never read forced. All flowed. In short Connie this is beautiful poetry. Honestly. Well done in its entirety.
Marcum Wong Avatar
May 7, 2017 at 11:43 PM
I really appreciate your insightful comments Lisa. I am inspired by all the wonderful poets here at Soup, which of course includes you! Thank you so much. : )
Nance Avatar
May 6, 2017 at 10:08 PM
this is such a calm beautiful write, I just rocked in the beauty of every image.
Marcum Wong Avatar
May 7, 2017 at 3:30 AM
Oh thank you Casarah. I appreciate your nice comment. ; )
Williams Avatar
May 2, 2017 at 3:53 AM
This is such a beautiful nostalgic picture you have painted of your memory Connie - Love how you brought the poem back to the beginning with the repetition of the first verse, living back the former memory. A big 7 Connie.
Marcum Wong Avatar
May 7, 2017 at 11:49 PM
Thank you Maria. I kind of wanted to end this on a romantic note. : )
Manassian Avatar
May 1, 2017 at 11:32 PM
Hauntingly beautiful, Connie. Why is it that some memories will never leave us...sometime those who cause us the most pain are the ones who are most remembered. There is an enchanting tone to your poem...thanks for your comforting words about the loss of my uncle. bless you
Marcum Wong Avatar
May 6, 2017 at 5:23 AM
Thank you very much Eileen. I appreciate such a nice comment. : )
Ricci Avatar
May 1, 2017 at 11:24 AM
Hello Connie. This is beautiful and very much poetry. I loved the repetition of your opening and closing. That was a wonderful poetic touch. It was well executed and utilized. Your rhyming was never forced. Wonderful work in its entirety. Honestly
Lawless Avatar
April 30, 2017 at 4:13 PM
"One day a love will make you pay." Great double clutch-downshift spin the tires line. Really enjoyed this one Connie. The repetition of the first and last stanza ...a great set of bookends to a love story
Marcum Wong Avatar
May 1, 2017 at 1:39 PM
Thank you John. I guess I wanted to leave it with an upbeat tone. ; )
Lamoureux Avatar
April 30, 2017 at 9:01 AM
Yes, I agree, it is an excellent pairing, it's almost a pretty as your words.
Marie Avatar
April 29, 2017 at 2:31 PM
This is fantastic Connie:) I have never been to the Mississippi, it has always held a certain haunting mystique that you have captured magnificently while weaving in a story of a young broken heart. The line: "One day a love will make you pay" is expressive and very well penned. Beautiful writing with strong emotions and vivid imagery that is just awesome:) lynnxxx
Marcum Wong Avatar
April 29, 2017 at 2:42 PM
Thank you very much Maria. Like I just told Darren....The sounds of the river boat whistles and the river bank tavern's music flavoring the evening breeze is quite enchanting Darren. I wrote another poem called 'Mississippi Moments' that elaborates more about it. Thank you very much. : ) Connie
Michaels Avatar
April 29, 2017 at 8:23 AM
Powerful, emotional, evocative and sad all at the same time. Lovely piece, Connie. Regards, John.
Marcum Wong Avatar
April 29, 2017 at 2:48 PM
Thank you for such a lovely comment John. I appreciate the encouragement. ; )
Daniel Avatar
April 29, 2017 at 8:22 AM
This is a moving poem, Connie, haunting indeed. A fave and a 7:)
Marcum Wong Avatar
April 29, 2017 at 2:45 PM
Oh Jo, thank you very much. I really appreciate the fave. : )
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