Ties

It takes off-rhyme to heighten rhyme -- like background in a painting, should not obliterate the fore... leaving little to view, less to excite and visually explore -- (my wife, a fashion plate...and I, the mutt of a date~ somehow, it works....) I guess, if not for man's fall, there would be no theme of God to venerate -- in a dark sense~ evil is the light of good reflection a night that makes bright the stars a canvas of the greater heavens yet to lasso and draw-in or pull one's self up for loftier expansion -- earth experience, perhaps a mere dust-mite on the surface of creation -- With poetry, Free Verse is far from free: a rush pounding as the poet's heart~ bursting a dam of pent-up, drumming passion -- overflowing banks insane to absorb, to further-in deepen pools of whatever for drink. Everything is attached...a-thirst, with seen and unseen flowing tethers --

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/18/2024 12:59:00 PM

So interesting the different ways you discuss ties and then tie it in that beautifiul bow at the end. I have been experimenting sometimes with not having every single line rhyme. I kind of get what you mean at the beginning here.

Joe Dimino
Date: 12/19/2024 8:46:00 AM

Hi Andrea, Merry Christmas my friend! (Just my opinion: when it comes to poetry, right is write what your heart tells you; if the theme suggests formless, like most of mine, then the form reflects one's norm-less...and if more tradition would better work, then, with rhyme and meter, by all means, please go berserk:))

Valsa George

Date: 12/17/2024 3:26:00 AM

You are a poet who likes to tread through untrodden paths. So your thoughts are a little different and it needs more than one reading to understand your poems. Just as a real scene painted gets obstructed by a very ornate background, poetry's beauty and spontaneity gets obscured with embellishments like rhyme, meter, form and many other similar regulations. If what I understood is correct, I agree with your notions, dear Joe. Wish you and your family a Merry Christmas.

Joe Dimino
Date: 12/17/2024 6:22:00 AM

"Just as a real scene painted gets obstructed by a very ornate background, poetry's beauty and spontaneity gets obscured with embellishments like rhyme, meter, form and many other similar regulations." -- Wow! Amazing, wonderful comment. Pure beauty. And I realize that you are not criticizing our pool of fine, traditional poetry, but just adding a few, original, unfiltered bubbles, that they may pop and splatter with literary effervescence. You made my day! Blessings.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 12/15/2024 6:49:00 PM

Everything is attached, it sure is Joe, love this , good night

Joe Dimino
Date: 12/16/2024 9:19:00 AM

Like all our shoe laces are tied together..yet we persist to step in different spiritual directions.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 12/15/2024 5:41:00 PM

It all ties in! LOL… my wife, a fashion plate...and I, the mutt of a date… evil is the light of good reflection…a night that makes bright the stars. One “star” in the night can be very bright, and yet there are more, always more.

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 12/13/2024 4:56:00 PM

A painting in a poem, or a poem in a painting, your poem has visual impact. The last line 'ties' it together.

Joe Dimino
Date: 12/15/2024 8:05:00 AM

Thank you, Hilda; I always try for a different twist of thinking. Pleased this one seems to have garnered some good favor. Blessings.

Joe Maverick

Date: 12/11/2024 3:17:00 PM

Well you certainly ' plant ? A compexity of Appreciation of the art of life and litrature Joe-Dimino this is just the 'right thyme' for the potatoes so to put it.' Also good for a spring lamb, or an older ram.' As I am lol)) you give great depth to poetrys scent, with this unique Bent..' smooth vents; too suits.' finished off with Kick through by virtue of some quality, too Its boots.' All the best may God bless.'

Joe Dimino
Date: 12/15/2024 8:06:00 AM

Thank you, Joe; always pleased with your delightful, witty comments. As one old ram to another, blessings my friend.

Ink Empress

Date: 12/11/2024 8:17:00 AM

Dear joe, what an intriguing and engaging write, so well delivered too, i love how youv started and how your words just flow as always and how powerful they are, i especially love how youv said “ With poetry, Free Verse is far from free: a rush pounding as the poet's heart~ bursting a dam of pent-up, drumming passion -- overflowing banks insane to absorb” soul hitting really! As always one that would get readers to ponder and think about ! Pleasure reading you always. Sending you light

Joe Dimino
Date: 12/15/2024 8:08:00 AM

One can never free anything from its author...perhaps in form or style, but content we own...like the pen is attached to the hand...and the hand to the heart. Blessings my friend.