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Tidal Pull

small trumpeter waves wash ashore the sea grins with ease children scamper on the beach like search lights that never rest in one place buoyant surf beckons, gravitational pull to choppy splashes skin bronzed children rush the waves, an explosion of liberation their squeals to rival passing gulls theatrics to run in and out of cold as hot rays of sun melt reserve instant sheen of glee till frozen toes dig into warming sand childhood innocence pristine like polished shells on a shelf in pink-white shades spiraled secrets of the surf spilling ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ safe ashore soothing presence adults watching the fresh faced playfulness aged side-step from currents' undertow to sense risk from surf surges that toss one to the beach lives in a rising swell wounds of immersion the burden of seasons July's brooding heat of sentiment to recall untroubled times a tide into memory when memory resists waves like castles fortified in sand till gulped by the sea Poem composed: June 9/2022 Revised December 19th/2022

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Date: 1/11/2023 10:06:00 PM
I like the way you gave the same scene two different perspectives-- one of the playful children and the other of the adults watching. The waves and sand make me think of change and not being able to undo or relive the past.
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 1/13/2023 9:15:00 PM
Greetings Juliet, Your comments are spot on. I hoped to achieve contrast + variations on the sea through childhood + adult eyes. Perspective is often a matter of time, experience, circumstance. Thank you for your fine insights. Cheers, Brian
Date: 8/27/2022 8:28:00 PM
"skin bronzed children rush the waves, an explosion of liberation/ their squeals to rival passing gulls" Such lively and vibrant images of children frolicking with the waves on the beach. The poem is full of such animated word pictures. Enjoyed your poem much, dear Brian....
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/28/2022 4:25:00 AM
My appreciation, Valsa, for your stop by + affirmative take on my poem that veers between child + adult perspectives. The concluding view of sand castles swept into the sea conveys loss - not a popular subject. Best wishes always. Brian
Date: 7/18/2022 12:17:00 AM
I like the descriptive lines in this one. Reads like a fun day at the beach enjoying little ones having fun. Sara
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 7/18/2022 5:39:00 AM
Thank you, Sara. Two different perspectives presented here from innocence to experience when a tidal pull impacts children + adults in different ways. Thank you for your stop by. Cheers Brian

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