Thunder Rolls

Thunder rolls on the rails of morning
frightening the cat, curdling the cow’s milk
sudden, sullen rip roaring.
Released from its governor, it rattles man,
shaking the frail panes of his existence.
Jagged skyward shards spark, as the storm
wheels over the harrowed rye field,
splitting the magnolia tree from crown to root.
Gutters flute, asphalt steams, and within 
the tumult the lawn of morn is cleansed
to a silver sheen of green.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Macmillan Avatar
June 18, 2015 at 5:30 PM
rolls on the rails... mmmmm.... NICE. I want you in here, though, I don't care about "man" the general. It rattles ME. Still, so very lovely... the gutters flute, that sticks in me... I'm enjoying reading, hon.
Brown Avatar
July 26, 2012 at 9:47 AM
Congratulations on your placement in Yasmin's "The Unread Poems"contest Debbie. Love, Carol
Williams Avatar
July 25, 2012 at 3:20 AM
Debbie, super congrats on your win, excellent write...aliteration just glides along..David
Hunter Avatar
July 24, 2012 at 11:28 AM
Some awesome lines here, Debbie! I really like the very first line...it's gonna be in my head all day...haha
M V Avatar
July 24, 2012 at 9:41 AM
Thunder effect is done well,Debbie.Thank you for your comments on my poem,A Money-order to Tamil Nadu.I will try to modify it a little later.Lovingly,Fabiyas
Kostman Avatar
July 23, 2012 at 5:07 PM
Wow....very nice poem ! Congrate on your win... Jane XoXo
Richards Avatar
July 23, 2012 at 12:46 PM
The storm becomes a living thing, and you bring to life words in every poem you pen, Debbie, you know by now, how much I admire your ability to write. Never needing the mundane use of expression. I can always depend on your unique style. Thanks always for encouraging me and I'm honored to come home last night and find my poem at the top of your list. Thank you very much...I continue to learn from your example!:)
Sweetheart Avatar
July 23, 2012 at 6:36 AM
congrats Debbie on a remarkable write and win well deserved luv.. very imaginative piece .. nice imagery too..
Song Avatar
July 23, 2012 at 4:06 AM
Images are superb, Debbie, and the cause and effect is awesome as well..interesting lines--the rails of morning, and I also really liked the sullen rip roaring..it was like butter off your pen! Congrats in this competitive contest. The Dark Dungeon contest was very creative and produced some strong poetic images..mine was a true story...autobiographical too. Could u clarify what HEAT and verse meant in your comment? Always wanting to learn from the master (even tho u don't like me referring to u as such...hahah) Thanks for appreciating my work too, Debbie! gwendolen
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