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Constance's Gate Contest ~ June 29, 2025

"With each wave of anguish that crashes over me, I find myself drowning in my own tears." ~ by poet I walked through the rusted gates and entered a godforsaken plot of land. A family cemetery on top of the hill near the River Strand. A chilled mist was beginning to blanket the grave of the only man I'd ever loved... the one whose arms around me, I still crave. Grief-stricken, I rest my head on his tombstone, mournful tears spill from my eyes as I agonize with heartbreak. Life for me has lost its spark. I live each day in a twilight haze that melds into the dark. through the rusted gates death's breath clings upon the mist~ woe begotten hill Ancient oaks are draped with moss. Their branches resemble arms hanging low over the graveyard as if they are ghostly specters. I think of them as my love's protectors, silently watching over him. The sky is darkening, and I hear myself groaning in sorrow. It's time to walk back through the rusted gates, but first I'll wipe away the spider's gossamer silk across his name as my heart grieves. beneath oaken limbs bodies rest in hallowed ground~ silence is daunting

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Date: 6/29/2025 12:42:00 PM
WOW!!! What a wonderful write/story and quote. Great Gate Picture... "Good Luck" We both did this one. Have a lovely day writing away............
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Lin Lane
Date: 6/29/2025 4:05:00 PM
Thank you lots, Paula. Good luck to you. It’s the first contest I’ve entered in a while.
Date: 6/29/2025 11:35:00 AM
Lin, you have a way of describing things with passion that feels intense and real. That is why you are a fantastic poet! You also have a means to make your point in a way that most of us can relate to. I would expect you would easily qualify for poet laureate of the USA. You have just the right balance of symbolism and honest description. Smiles, of course--this response was not written by AI!!!
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Lin Lane
Date: 6/29/2025 11:43:00 AM
;-) Duke. AI cannot smile... or can it? I'll gladly settle for just being recognized as a poet. Thank you for your ever gracious compliments of my verses.
Date: 6/29/2025 9:37:00 AM
This is one of the best most moving haibun's I have read for a long time Lin i especially love " death's breath clung upon the mist~" Hugs Jan xx
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Lin Lane
Date: 6/29/2025 10:00:00 AM
meh... I agree, Jan, but if they don't care, then I won't care. We're here to write our own poetry... I believe that's what the site is for, not posting by any other means.
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Jan Allison
Date: 6/29/2025 9:52:00 AM
I too enter few contests Lin - it's pointless trying when you are up against folk using AI I wish all sponsors would check for it but it is a time consuming exercise. hugs Jan xx
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Lin Lane
Date: 6/29/2025 9:43:00 AM
Good afternoon, sweet friend and thank you. I wrote it last night while Fran was asleep. I decided to enter contests that I know are being guarded by diligent sponsors and/or those that interest me. I'm home for a few days before taking my sister home.

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