Threshold

Take a step in or a step out How I linger, subtlety my game Ready to change the whole frame Each time you step in or step out So much is different over the line Hold your breath, are you ready this time? Only a step in or a step out Lives can intermingle and separate too Don't underestimate passing through

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/27/2023 7:08:00 PM

Excellent!

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/27/2023 10:56:00 PM

Thank you Kim x

Speaks Volumes

Date: 8/27/2023 6:46:00 PM

I could be facetious and say it reminds me of the Hokey Pokey. But it doesn't, Its really good D. Well written and be careful you don't underestimate passing through. Enjoyed.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/27/2023 10:56:00 PM

Thanks SV - I hadn't thought of that - that poor threshold could be having a much better time haha! Instead it's trapped on the edge of an existential crisis :) thank you for your supportive words x

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 8/27/2023 3:13:00 PM

I really like your repeated 'step in or step out' lines to create the feeling of anticipation, also your closing lines resonate as a chance encounter can leave a long impression~

Di11y Da11y
Date: 8/27/2023 10:53:00 PM

Thanks Michelle - I appreciate the feedback. I like playing with acrostics for contests and seeing if they produce something unexpected with a word x