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The Worst Betrayal, Suicide

It may sound selfish that I felt betrayal when you died, but you vowed to never act upon those urges once more. You lied time and time again, and o, how I vastly cried- that last time I knew was different than before. You deceived me the moment you said goodbye in vain, now only heartbreaking memories of duplicity remain. I try to move on without anxiety, try not to complain, but a tragic breach of faith of was tragically conveyed. O, how I wish you would have felt the love and stayed- you knew how to find happiness, you were just so afraid. So now I’m girdled in woe since you committed suicide, left despondent and grief-stricken from this severe abhor. You shadowed me like midnight cascading in disdain- I feel utterly abandoned…FOR IT WAS ME WHO YOU BETRAYED. ___________________________ Date written: November 29, 2018 Contest: Fragmented Rhyme- November 2018 Writing Challenge Sponsor: Dear Heart

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Date: 12/4/2018 7:36:00 PM
I enjoyed reading this beautiful poem, Laura, very well written. It stirs a reader's imagination and the very sad emotions . Congratulations on your win!
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Date: 12/3/2018 4:32:00 PM
Lu, congratulations on your win in my contest with this emotional write, it broke my heart~
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Date: 11/30/2018 5:37:00 PM
I like the cadence of this as well as the meaning. It could very well be a rap song. I hope you didn't write this from personal experience though. So sad to think so.
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Date: 12/3/2018 5:58:00 AM
yes it is about my sister who took her life 12/31/10. It still haunts me. thank you :)-luloo

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