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My mind perceives a wall so high to scale is just a dream. A barrier beyond the sky transcending wanted themes. What material is used to build such a structure to detour? How strong a mortar keeps passion stilled and secrets held secure? I've tried in vain so many times to climb this lofty height. What is due from me for crimes held sway from freedoms light? Perhaps my will has dried this brick and hardened plastered clay to build this wall so tall and thick that stands in my own way. Revised 10/24/2016 For The Wall Contest Sponsored By Anthony Slausen

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John Lawless

Date: 10/31/2016 11:16:00 AM

...too keep them out....I kept me in... Nicely done Charlie...I think we've all done a little masonry work in our lives.

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/31/2016 11:26:00 AM

Thank you John...

Carrie Richards

Date: 10/29/2016 1:20:00 PM

We all form our own walls, whatever they may be. I love this poem , it is subtle enough for us to make our own conclusion ! Well done, Charlie!!

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/29/2016 10:17:00 PM

Thank you Carrie...

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/29/2016 10:11:00 PM

Thank you Carrie...

Janis Thompson

Date: 10/29/2016 12:16:00 PM

Charlie, I love the last verse, to admit that you were the builder. Well done work. Congratulations on this winning write.

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/29/2016 10:11:00 PM

Thank you Janis...

Balveen Cheema

Date: 10/29/2016 11:02:00 AM

Charlie, Love your attitude of detouring and trying, even if it was in vain! Congrats for an analytical write!

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/29/2016 10:10:00 PM

Thank you Balveen...

Sandra Haight

Date: 10/29/2016 11:00:00 AM

Excellent metaphors in your deep, well-written poem, Charlie. Congratulations on your fine placement in the contest. Sandra

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/29/2016 10:10:00 PM

Thank you Sandra...

Wendy Rycroft

Date: 10/29/2016 8:57:00 AM

Congrats well-done great words x

Charlie Smith
Date: 10/29/2016 10:09:00 PM

Thank you Wendy...

Bl Devnath

Date: 5/13/2016 2:55:00 PM

Excellently done. A 7 for strong hope. Loved always my lovely friend, bl

Charlie Smith
Date: 5/13/2016 3:02:00 PM

Thank You BL...

Funom Makama

Date: 5/9/2016 12:45:00 PM

Absolutely brilliant and beautiful. A great 7 for me friend.

Charlie Smith
Date: 5/9/2016 2:05:00 PM

You are too kind Funom, Thank you so much...

Eileen Manassian

Date: 5/2/2016 1:01:00 PM

:) So glad that there is a way through this wall. So symbolic of the barriers that we erect ourselves. Thanks for the visit to my POTW, Charlie. All the best.

Charlie Smith
Date: 5/2/2016 2:07:00 PM

Thank you Eileen...

Probir Gupta

Date: 4/30/2016 10:27:00 PM

This figurative poem with with crystals of suggestions I like tremendously Charlie.....

Charlie Smith
Date: 5/1/2016 7:47:00 AM

Many thanks Probir...

Arthur Vaso

Date: 4/30/2016 9:42:00 PM

Wow, what a poem, I have read this a few times and already taken a few messages from it, I love when one can take a subject, or a simple object and turn it into such depth of thought! :) A7

Charlie Smith
Date: 5/1/2016 7:48:00 AM

You are very kind Arthur, thank you...

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 4/30/2016 9:36:00 PM

An insightful journey within Charlie. I love how you have ended it honoring hope. #7 ; )

Charlie Smith
Date: 4/30/2016 9:39:00 PM

Thank you Connie...

Sandra Haight

Date: 4/30/2016 7:01:00 PM

Yes, I agree with SO, Charlie. Thought-provoking and I believe deep metaphors within. A haunting write, and I enjoyed very much. Sandra

Charlie Smith
Date: 4/30/2016 8:22:00 PM

Thank you so much Sandra...