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Beside the surf she lay, a heap Of broken hope, like bones, now crushed And burning lips, forever hushed. From eyes to sea, her briny weep Gave solemn witness to her fears The love now draining with her tears. Thus bled her heart into the deep With love that spoiled in other arms Abiding not its throbbing harms. To there, perhaps, imbue it sleep For pain was all that coursed within Yet fathoms, black, would drown its sin Or dark and still, its secrets, keep A passion's crime that stained her red Her love, his lover ... cold and dead. Beside the surf she lay, a heap From eye to sea, her briny weep Thus bled her heart into the deep To there, perhaps, imbue it sleep Or dark and still, its secrets, keep. * SECOND PLACE in the "Premiere Contest Number 370" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Sponsor. * * SECOND PLACE in the "Constanza" Poetry Contest, Craig Cornish, Sponsor. *

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Date: 12/26/2017 8:43:00 AM
A fantastic pen Greg! How I missed this one I don't know. Congratulations on win, win, and top spot! Muchos hugs my friend <3
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/30/2017 8:48:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Mo - I'm pleased you enjoyed this one, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 12/10/2017 10:48:00 PM
Congrats on your placement, Greg. It is well deserved. You captured the pain here so well. Very gripping. Thanks for your visit to my entry.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/10/2017 11:21:00 PM
That's very kind of you, Eileen, I'm pleased you enjoyed it - thank you so very much! Blessings and best wishes! :-) <3
Date: 12/10/2017 4:28:00 PM
Greg, excellent job on this Constanza. I like how you appropriately match the dark, edgy imagery to the tragic nature of the story. Way to step up to a newer form of poetry. Very nicely done! All my best. :) Bartholomew
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/10/2017 11:20:00 PM
Thank you very much, Bartholomew, it was fun to take on a new form, and a very lovely form that Connie has created. A very enjoyable experience - blessings, friend! :-)
Date: 12/9/2017 6:37:00 PM
Your Constanza is simply outstanding Greg! You have made my form shine brilliantly! Congratulations on your well deserved Second placement! This goes into my Faves! : )
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/9/2017 10:17:00 PM
I am honored that you enjoyed my poem, Connie, and that you appreciated my take on your wonderful form - I really enjoyed writing in this style, and I thank you so much for the kind comment and for saying that I have done it justice. This put a smile on my face, my friend! Blessings! :-) <3
Date: 12/9/2017 4:17:00 PM
Congratulations, Gregory, on your well-deserved win for this lovely, outstanding poem in the Constanza form. Sandra
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/9/2017 10:15:00 PM
Thank you so kindly, Sandra, I'm so pleased you liked it! :-)
Date: 12/8/2017 10:07:00 AM
A double-winner! Nicely done! Congrats!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/9/2017 12:15:00 AM
Thank you so much, Kim - very much appreciated! :-) <3
Date: 12/7/2017 3:35:00 PM
Just recently back on the soup and discovering your poetry; I am enjoying reading it very much. This is so well written. Well deserved win. Thank for your kind comments on my poems.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/7/2017 7:28:00 PM
I am very glad to meet you, and I hope you'll consider me a friend. Welcome back! Blessings to you and yours! :-) <3
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/7/2017 7:27:00 PM
That's so sweet of you, Faye, and I so appreciate your kind comments! I joined the Soup exactly a year ago (today) when I decided to take this poetry thing seriously. I wrote short stories in high school and won the Payson-Bird Prize as a Freshman, but never took writing, especially poetry, seriously until a little over a year ago. It (and PS) has become a refuge for me, and I have found so much healing in it, and so many amazing friends here as well.
Date: 12/7/2017 1:41:00 PM
Well deserved place, Gregory, with this sad Constanza. // Barry
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/7/2017 7:29:00 PM
Thank you so much, Barry - I so appreciate it, friend! :-)
Date: 12/6/2017 10:07:00 PM
Hey Greg, nice to see this one flying high and getting all the accolades it/you deserve. Craig does have a good eye for quality!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/6/2017 10:32:00 PM
Many thanks to you, John, I greatly appreciate the kind comments, Bro! :-)
Date: 12/6/2017 9:49:00 PM
terrific Gregory...nicely written!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/6/2017 10:31:00 PM
Very kind of you, David, thank you so much, friend! :-)
Date: 12/6/2017 9:26:00 PM
Wow! Magnificent, Gregory, congratulations on your awesome win!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/6/2017 10:30:00 PM
Thank you very much, Eve, I'm glad you liked it! :-) <3
Date: 12/6/2017 8:33:00 PM
Congrats again, Gregory. Well deserved win!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/6/2017 9:21:00 PM
Very sweet of you, Line - thank you so much! You are a gem in every way! :-) <3
Date: 12/6/2017 3:46:00 PM
Greg, you are amazing and I'm in awe of your abilities to adapt to both form and message----few have your talent.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/6/2017 9:18:00 PM
Oh, that's very kind of you to say so, Craig, and I am so honored and blessed to be on a list with such great poets ... so pleased you found it worthy, my friend. Blessings and thanks to you, Sir! :-)
Date: 12/6/2017 3:18:00 PM
A beautiful and smooth flowing Constanza, Gregory. Congratulations on your podium finish. Regards // paul
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/6/2017 9:17:00 PM
Very kind of you, Paul, and thanks so much! Blessings! :-)
Date: 12/6/2017 3:05:00 PM
Congrats on your win !
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 12/6/2017 9:16:00 PM
Thank you, Mike!
Date: 11/29/2017 12:48:00 PM
Enjoyed. A beautiful read, Gregory.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/29/2017 2:27:00 PM
Thanks so kindly, Line!

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