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The Swallows

There is beauty I take in as essential as breath a hundred more blue black and white angels sublime moving with the chaos of one these little birds taking my soul with them as they fly about me through me with my own chaos one

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Mahtab Bangalee

Date: 2/23/2019 7:26:00 AM

The Swallows fly through your chaotic feelings!/// penned beautifully

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/23/2019 8:46:00 AM

Thank you so much Mahtab, this one dear to me :) xomo!

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 2/18/2019 6:33:00 AM

Your imagery and metaphorical write is making me smile this morning, Maureen. Beautiful.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/18/2019 8:30:00 AM

Thank you Caren! I love this one. It's based on a real event, the swallows & swifts were feeding right over the long grass section in the dog park, passing us within inches at times, it was otherworldly! xomo

Charlie Knowlton

Date: 2/17/2019 9:37:00 AM

I just love this poem Maureen.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 2/17/2019 9:55:00 AM

Oh thank you Charlie, this one is close to my heart. I can close my eyes and I'm there again. A wonderful day to you! xomo

Michael Vacek

Date: 9/12/2017 5:12:00 PM

Maureen, I used your swallows in one of my poems, "Two Breaths Away From Love" Your poem brings the grace of these birds into full focus. In rereading your poem, I didn't realize you used the word sublime as well. What a powerful word...Sublime

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 9/12/2017 8:42:00 PM

Sweet! :) Sublime... potent word, love it, the shape of the word produces a smile when mouthed as the second syllable likes to linger.

Patricia Cresswell

Date: 9/2/2017 8:37:00 AM

Oh to be a swallow. Beautiful work.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 9/2/2017 10:20:00 AM

Indeed! Thank you :)

Michael Vacek

Date: 8/28/2017 2:23:00 PM

I enjoy your insights into nature. Swallows are whimsical flyers that seem to never make grave mistakes...I wish my spirit could fly the same.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 8/28/2017 5:30:00 PM

:) me too

Gayle Rodd

Date: 3/12/2017 1:02:00 PM

You captured these creatures beautifully as I see them fly in chaos as well. They're clumsy little things sometimes aren't they! This piece is spot on!

Anne-Marie Coreggia

Date: 3/12/2017 7:43:00 AM

A beautiful poem that lifts you up as it flies by:)

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/12/2017 8:30:00 AM

Thank you Anne-Marie, I'm so glad it lifts you too; when I close my eyes and remember I'm carried away all over again ;) xomo!

Roy Pett

Date: 3/12/2017 6:52:00 AM

Beautiful poem Maureen, images of those wonderful birds glorious, a joy to read, Roy.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/12/2017 8:28:00 AM

Yay! You make this humble poet grin with glee ;) thank you Roy xomo!

Arthur Vaso

Date: 3/11/2017 6:10:00 PM

Its this simple pleasures that surround us each day that make life worth living! Beautiful poem!

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/12/2017 8:26:00 AM

Amen to that Arthur! I'm so glad you liked it so. :) xomo!

Running Wolves

Date: 3/11/2017 1:24:00 PM

To be at one with nature well done

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/12/2017 8:24:00 AM

I do believe it is a natural state sadly most of us homosapiens have forgotten; I've found it here out in overgrown left field ;) xomo!

Lisa Ricci

Date: 3/11/2017 11:01:00 AM

Hello Maureen. Such essence you have captured. I understood your words of incorporating chaos into the mixture and expression and how it flies away with these creatures. Just beautiful in thought and reality. Well done and expressed as this is calming.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 3/11/2017 11:15:00 AM

I am so happy I managed to translate; the penning of a moment I shall never forget. The swallows and swifts feeding just above the long grass mere inches from me they would pass. Some in the park were freaked out, not me, for me it was absolute bliss. Thank you Lisa xomo