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the sun was late this morning

The sun was late this morning Or was I early At any rate I waited Tapping my fingers Impatiently. The appointment Requested I show up 20 minutes early To register My shadow. The receptionist Told me “the sun is running A bit behind schedule” Please be patient. My shadow grumbles It hates these appointments.

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Aysha Nuwas

Date: 2/25/2024 11:22:00 PM

Made me giggle, lovely poem.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 2/25/2024 6:14:00 PM

Ha, ha, ha. Love the creativity and the humor, John. Touche!

Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 2/25/2024 5:01:00 PM

John, This is a clever and humorous poem with a surprising twist! The opening lines create a sense of anticipation and then subvert expectations with the revelation of your "shadow" being the one waiting. The imagery of the receptionist explaining the sun's delay adds to the humor, and the final line perfectly captures the grumpiness of shadows who dislike appointments. This really made me smile! - Blessings, Daniel

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 2/25/2024 8:11:00 AM

This poem hits home. I have anxiety about being late. There are better places to be than in a waiting room. I liked how your shadow was substituted for yourself. It said to me that there is little recognition on arrival. Thank you for a timely poem that realizes the importance of time.

Lin Lane

Date: 2/25/2024 5:51:00 AM

I’m digesting…what are you registering for? A grumbling shadow~that’s a very conceptual image.