Richard Lamoureux Poet Pantoum

The Suitor Charles Wood

He came to her home with one goal in mind.
Today he would ask for his true loves hand.
He wore his best to make an impression.
Carrying himself with a certain pride.

Today he would ask for his true loves hand.
Her father, a stern and powerful man.
Carrying himself with a certain pride.
The young man so nervous began to shake.

Her father a stern and powerful man.
He listened as his daughter's suitor spoke.
The young man so nervous began to shake.
His heart felt like it was about to burst.

He listened as his daughter's suitor spoke.
A great anger brewed from down deep inside.
His heart felt like it was about to burst.
His body tensed he wanted to attack!

A great anger brewed from down deep inside.
His lovely wife stepped in and held him back.
His body tensed he wanted to attack!
The young man stood firm, he held his resolve.

His lovely wife stepped in and held him back.
While his daughter looked the other way.
The young man stood firm he held his resolve.
In the end true love and courage prevailed.

He wore his best to make an impression.
Yet it was his spirit that won the day. 
In the end true love and courage prevailed.
He came to her home with one goal in mind.

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Isaiah Zerbst October 5, 2013 at 8:47 PM Excellent ending! Almost a moral poem really. I am rather fond of stories and poems with morals. Thank you for writing this poem and entering my contest.

Charlotte Puddifoot October 2, 2013 at 3:20 PM congrats on your win in the contest with this very plausible story behind the painting...and thanks for your very kind comments on mine :)

Kelly Deschler October 2, 2013 at 2:51 PM A wonderful poem, Richard! Congratulations on your win, as well!...Thank you for the kind comments!

Voahanitriniaina Rabary-Andriamanday October 1, 2013 at 8:37 PM Wow! Master of Words, I bow my head and spirit... Great work, Rick! Love, Hanitra

Sandra Adams October 1, 2013 at 6:50 PM you did a fine job with the painting Richard...I think this one is a great write! Congrats on your win :) Richard Lamoureux October 1, 2013 at 7:00 PM Thanks Sandra.:0)

Andrea Dietrich October 1, 2013 at 5:07 PM Awesome way to do the challenge, using that style that suits you so well, the pantoum form. BIG congrats for your win. Richard Lamoureux October 1, 2013 at 6:31 PM Thanks Andrea

Gerald Kithinji September 13, 2013 at 11:50 AM Sir, I want your daughter's hand in marriage. Have you seen her mother? No, sir, but if you don't mind I still prefer your daughter. Thanks for reminding me of the mother-in-law joke.

Kelly Deschler September 11, 2013 at 1:51 PM I think this suits the theme of the painting very nicely. Wonderful work, Richard!...I have also entered this contest with my poem titled, "Love Will Triumph"...Thank you for the nice comments. I really appreciate it!

Poet Tacito September 8, 2013 at 8:20 AM A spectacular piece to start my morning with. A plan, a goal, a reason...love's achievement. Awesome. Richard Lamoureux September 8, 2013 at 1:57 PM Thanks Drake

Shadow Hamilton September 8, 2013 at 5:44 AM funny we both chose and saw the same things in this Richard I enjoyed your portrayal Shadow x smile gl Richard Lamoureux September 8, 2013 at 6:48 AM Thanks Shadow, I will check out yours.

Ravi Sathasivam September 7, 2013 at 11:48 PM Excellent. Beautifully written. Enjoyed reading it. Tfs

Poet Destroyer A September 7, 2013 at 2:07 PM A lovely and charming write.. I loved it especially the ending, and the first line ~:-) He came to her home with one goal in mind(-:~ it conquers all imagination. Richard! that really caught my attention. The title-- I love how you added every line with class. which is something i could barely ever do. I love the feeling of true love , __IS eternity__ always~ LINDA Richard Lamoureux September 7, 2013 at 2:18 PM What a great comment Linda. Thanks so much.

Eileen Manassian September 7, 2013 at 12:24 PM Great job, Richard...You described the painting well...

Harry Horsman September 7, 2013 at 9:59 AM wow this is good poetry, love this form also,, would make a brilliant visual scene, lots of passion here, enjoyed... Richard Lamoureux September 7, 2013 at 11:49 AM Thanks Harry, it was a difficult style to tell this story with. I however enjoyed the challange. It is for Isaiah's contest.