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The sea beckons. The air is heavy with heat, the sun fries the streets shrivels up trees and I feel parched. Tired I trudge towards the waterfront. Still the sea beckons. Sweat runs down my face, wets my unshaved face, dampens my collar, as I plod towards the pebble lined sea shore. The small waves glimmer, winking in hot rays, inviting me to cool myself. Insistently the sea beckons. Summer is at its worst. I hobble down towards the beach, pull down my clothes and stand in the sun's emissions wearing my swimsuit. Constantly the sea beckons. I trudge towards the water's edge, jump in and then come out quickly, yelping. I feel a jelly fish sting, it burns red across my thigh. Disillusioned I tramp back home. The sea beckons no more. 21 August 2021 Placed 1 'Writing Prompt, Oceans or Seas -' Contest Info Sponsor Constance La France

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Indiana Shaw

Date: 8/27/2021 11:49:00 AM

Talk about putting sea salt on a wound, Victor, dear me . . . : /

Constance La France

Date: 8/27/2021 6:21:00 AM

Victor, beautiful, and congratulations on your win in my Writing Prompt - Oceans and Seas, I love the image of course ~ peace and tranquility _Constance

Sotto Poet

Date: 8/25/2021 5:45:00 PM

Back with many Congrats, Victor, enjoy your deserved honor my, friend.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 8/25/2021 5:44:00 PM

Congratulations Victor, award winning material :)

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 8/25/2021 1:18:00 PM

What a sharp, sore ending to an already aggravated excruciatingly hot day, we are waiting in trepidation to see what our summer and storms bring our way this year! Well penned Victor, Jennifer

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 8/25/2021 12:36:00 PM

Adorable! I haven't ever had that experience thankfully, Congrats and God bless you, Love, Gina

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 8/24/2021 5:13:00 PM

What a surprise ending it was Victor, the sea does beckon when the sun rays are too hot. Enjoyed the read… Belle

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/24/2021 8:15:00 AM

I like the contract and surprise aspect to your contest entry. Reads like a good contender to me. Thanks for the visit to my page with get well wishes. We are still mending. A long slow process. Sara

Jennifer Fenn

Date: 8/23/2021 9:17:00 PM

Oh wow Victor! Your poem made me feel beckoned by the sea, and feel the surprise sting! AAAHHH! Well penned!

Joanna Daniel

Date: 8/23/2021 7:50:00 AM

Ah! I feel the sting of the poem, Victor, well written with the repetition of the line "the sea beckons me":)

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 8/22/2021 3:12:00 PM

I have been lulled by your charming poem Victor, may the sea own no more jelly fish and may the contest grant you a winning wish. :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/22/2021 12:38:00 PM

yes, that sting will put a damper on your desire to be in the sea, that is for sure, Victor!!

Sotto Poet

Date: 8/22/2021 12:04:00 PM

This masterpiece is an incredible poem that pulls the reader to the water's edge, and it feels as if I can hear the waves. I've learned that you're not going to make the same mistake two times in a row, Victor.

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 8/22/2021 9:53:00 AM

I didn't see that surprise ending coming! Luckily there are other ways to cool off. An excellent poem, with the usual superb imagery. Evelyn

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/22/2021 8:09:00 AM

- Love the ending ... great written, Victor :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Vijay Pandit

Date: 8/22/2021 5:58:00 AM

I hear the beckoning sea in this descriptive piece that takes the reader to water's edge. Beautifully done, as always, Victor.

Delice Arleen Skelly

Date: 8/22/2021 3:29:00 AM

Nothing could be worse, jellyfish is a lovely name that conjures up an image of a mean aggressive sea creature...Delice

Tom Cunningham

Date: 8/22/2021 12:01:00 AM

You fool the reader into thinking a fun day at the beach lies ahead then ouch lol. Well written Victor and good luck. Tom

Mohamed Omar

Date: 8/21/2021 11:41:00 PM

I feel helpless to honor such a beautiful master piece . Well and beyond

Eve Roper

Date: 8/21/2021 11:02:00 PM

You have done such a magnificent job in describing how the bod feels in this hot weather. The cool air of the ocean is inviting.