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My older brothers told me tales about a red-eyed ghost. They said, “We simply chased it off.” You should’ve heard them boast! One night I saw my curtains move and then--two bright red eyes. A coldness swept across my bed. I felt the terror rise. I pled, “Please go away. You’ve proven you know how to haunt! Go visit my brave brothers. You’ll just hear them jeer and taunt!” My brothers’ hair has been cold-gray since they were in their teens. We three are sure it wasn’t caused by something in their genes! Date: October 27, 2020 Contest Title: 8 Lines of Spooky Rhyme Sponsor: Tania Kitchin

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Date: 11/6/2020 11:22:00 AM
- Congratulations on your great win in this spooky contest, Janice :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 11/6/2020 11:42:00 AM
Thanks so much, Anne-Lise. Janice
Date: 11/6/2020 10:35:00 AM
Nicely told, Janice, congrats on your win. // Barry
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 11/6/2020 11:43:00 AM
Thanks so much, Barry. Janice
Date: 11/6/2020 10:34:00 AM
Janice, congratulations on your win in Tania's 8 lines of Spooky contest, with this chilling poem_ Constance
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Date: 11/6/2020 11:43:00 AM
Thanks so much, Constance. Janice
Date: 11/6/2020 12:51:00 AM
Congrats Janice....on an excellent poem of a red eyed ghost....my brothers would turn their eyelids upside down to make them red....this so resonated with me :)
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 11/6/2020 4:53:00 AM
Oh, I remember guys at school used to do that when I was a kid! It looked painful to me. Thanks so much, Carol! Janice
Date: 11/5/2020 2:10:00 PM
Congratulations Janice, loved the tale of the red eyed ghost, scary for sure with a fantastic, hilarious last line... Belle
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Date: 11/5/2020 2:30:00 PM
Thanks a million, Belle! Janice
Date: 11/5/2020 1:31:00 PM
Janice, congratulations on your first placement with your spooky tale, loved the twist of humor at the end!
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 11/5/2020 2:08:00 PM
Tania, this win has REALLY made my day! THANK YOU, and thanks for sponsoring. Janice
Date: 11/5/2020 12:43:00 PM
Goose bumps - Janice! This is spooky and hair raising! Congratulations on your first place win!
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 11/5/2020 2:08:00 PM
Thanks so much, Sam. Janice
Date: 11/3/2020 5:02:00 PM
G’day Janice … halloween is certainly the time to bring out the scary pen and put shivers down our spines - thank you Janice - Lindsay
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Date: 11/3/2020 5:08:00 PM
Thanks so much, Lindsay. Janice
Date: 11/2/2020 5:56:00 PM
Scary Janice, great tale, love it.
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 11/2/2020 7:59:00 PM
Thanks so much, Harry. Janice
Date: 11/1/2020 8:59:00 AM
this is a GREAT tale!!! One of the best I have read!
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 11/1/2020 12:56:00 PM
Thanks a million, Andrea! Janice
Date: 10/29/2020 4:20:00 PM
Nice ghost story Janice, best wishes in the contest..
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 10/29/2020 8:25:00 PM
Thanks so much, Joseph. Janice
Date: 10/29/2020 9:45:00 AM
Spooky indeed!
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 10/29/2020 10:46:00 AM
Thanks, Kim. Janice
Date: 10/27/2020 5:05:00 PM
Great story, Janice!! You really moved it well to get all that told in just eight lines. ~ I hope Tania 'goblins' it up! :) gw
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 10/27/2020 7:35:00 PM
I hope so too, Gershon. Thanks so much. Janice
Date: 10/27/2020 12:49:00 PM
Perhaps they saw me as my eyes are always red the morning after .....Aloha! Rico
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 10/27/2020 2:38:00 PM
That must be it!
Date: 10/27/2020 11:24:00 AM
Lol, Ive heard of folks hair turning white after a shock. Good luck in the contest Janice Tom
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Date: 10/27/2020 2:39:00 PM
Thanks so much, Tom. Janice
Date: 10/27/2020 10:59:00 AM
- Scary ... but, also exciting :) - Best wishes in the contest, Janice :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 10/27/2020 2:40:00 PM
Thanks so much, Anne-Lise. Janice
Date: 10/27/2020 10:50:00 AM
Hi Janice: I love poetry with great rhyme and rhythm, and this bouncy cadence is a joy. I hope you don't mind me mentioning you have inadvertently omitted the letter 'a' from the word 'are' in the last line. Kindest regards - Bill
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 10/27/2020 2:41:00 PM
Bill, thank you so much for your kind words and for the head's up on the typo! Janice
Date: 10/27/2020 9:02:00 AM
Woah this is spooky and that image very scary!!!
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Janice Canerdy
Date: 10/27/2020 2:41:00 PM
Thanks so much, S.O. Janice