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May 8, 2025

Premiere Contest: The Prismatic Self
Sponsor: Daniel Henry Rodgers

note: edited after posting but before contest closed



 

I am a dare-dreamer, a mask wearer a soul bare-r (but not always my own); a word-weaver. I pull at thoughts like strings. Strings of cobwebs and cirrus, frayed dungarees and threadbare memories until I warp and weft strings of thoughts into poems. Sometimes I get caught in my own knots— I cut myself loose of those naughty strings. I hold onto kite strings… oh, and rainbows strings. They connect my soles to the realm of my soul, but at times, I lose sight of my kites in the gale. Was I irresponsible with responsibility for my strings? I think thoughts need to get lost in clouds and wind; lost in clouds and wind to find the eye-of-the-storm where I rescue kites and make a poetry page my stage and my arena. I twine strings into a heavyweight rope. Fasten it to four corners of the contest page. I enter, incognito, with Apollo imagery and Dionysus metaphor; a masked prize-fighter filled with creative pangst. I grin for wins in poesy masquerade parades but when I fail, strings break off of my drama mask. Revealed but unrecognized, am I just a fractured rainbow? My inner balcony critic reprimands: “sunlight through raindrops must be flawless to create flawless strings of prismatic color”! Alas, lack of refraction left white words non prismatic. I restring my tragedy mask; the ego sphere of a versateer. I create poetry because I love to pluck things; pluck things like harp strings and heartstrings. If I no longer make readers cry, will bleat cred be lost? Don’t think I won’t pluck nightshade petals, fly wings and cello strings to make you feel my tormentia! I’ll quiver the lips of lost-in-loss verse. Coax your soul to sip the pale ale of sorrow —as scents of strawberries scald your skin. I’m not unhappy to gratify your senses. I loop a maverick string whirl it and throw— lasso a funhouse mirror and rein it in. Imagination dances on stilts in looney glass gaze. I use my muse strings to hang mirrors and I ask; who’s the puppeteer and who’s the marionette— the poet or the reader? Footnote: Pangst: the emotional state of combined pain and angst Versateer: one who blends reality and imagination to create poetry Tormentia: an internal state of combined torment and fantasia Bleat cred: acceptance and respect for the creative expression of lamentation *incorporated quote: by poet

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Date: 5/26/2025 12:41:00 PM
Oops. Can't read and comment yet. I am one of the judges. But knowing your expertise, I bet all the judges will enjoy this
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Date: 5/25/2025 10:00:00 AM
What an excellent idea and thought process for this contest.. For me your poem is a metapoetic performance, a reflection on what it means to create, to fail, and to be seen or unseen as an artist. It’s rich with metaphors, emotionally layered, and imaginatively constructed. Whether the poet is puppeteer or marionette, the reader is unquestionably drawn into the dance.
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Date: 5/24/2025 11:10:00 PM
Dear Susan, you are indeed a master of metaphors and a word weaver. I am always in awe of a few like you on our site who talk in metaphors. I can state things in facts, never in metaphors and am envious of those who are capable of that special gift. "Sometimes I get caught in my own knots—" I feel it happens to you very rarely. One thing, I am sure, you capture the reader's attention with your poetic prowess and subjugate their hearts as a queen.Dear Susan, let your fancies fly high like a kite with the string held in tact within your grip. The question hurled at the end gives much room for thought. Excellent poetry dear sweet friend.
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Date: 5/24/2025 9:37:00 PM
I enjoyed reading This masterpiece, Susan! Thank you for sharing. Have a nice day.
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Date: 5/26/2025 8:51:00 AM
Dear Evelyn, wonderful poet, I'm so glad to know you enjoyed my poem. I'm humbled by your beautiful response to my verse. Thank you for sharing your precious thoughts with me. I appreciate you. Warmest wishes, dear poet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 5/24/2025 8:16:00 AM
Your poetry is not a string of cobwebs but a web of fine pearls and diamonds. I am always at awe reading your poems. What splendid metaphors, an encomium of excellent poetry, such praiseworthy metaphors throughout the poem. Your poetry reaches great height.
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Date: 5/26/2025 8:55:00 AM
Dear Victor, it's a delight to find your wonderful poetic presence gracing my poem's page. Your precious thoughts are held in my deepest appreciation. I am humbled by your response to my poem, your words dress my verse in more beauty than it deserves, but I embrace your kindness fully. Thank you, my dear poet friend, your thoughts are prized! Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Date: 5/11/2025 7:29:00 AM
wowza man....from strings of cobwebs to hearts as mirrors.......len
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Date: 5/26/2025 8:48:00 AM
Dear Len, your gracious visit and 'wowza' thoughts are truly appreciated :) Thank you for your kindness, my poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 5/10/2025 6:40:00 PM
Nice editing, it was already wonderful. A glimpse of you I am sure readers will relate to. <3
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Date: 5/26/2025 8:47:00 AM
Dear Paige, soulful poet, thank you for your return visit and kind reassurance. I'm so happy to know you found my poem to be wonderful. Your precious thoughts mean the world to me. Warmest wishes my sweet poet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 5/10/2025 4:41:00 PM
Stanza five says it all. We write for the tear, or the chuckle (occasionally a belly laugh) or the applause or even (gasp!) for a trophy win in a peer sponsored contest. I would suggest that if a poet isn't trying to evoke a response best to stay home. Your last line is intriguing. Who made who? Good one Suze
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Date: 5/26/2025 8:45:00 AM
Dear Tom, yes, I completely agree with your thoughts here. Thank you for your gracious visit and wonderful insights. I write and share for all those reasons you stated above. When I write for my self, I keep it to myself. Glad you found my last line intriguing... :) Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Suze
Date: 5/9/2025 1:58:00 PM
Hello Susan, this is an exceptional beautiful and amazing write. A great read.Best wishes for the contest. Sending Blessings your way, my poet friend.
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Date: 5/26/2025 8:39:00 AM
Dear Zyrool, I truly appreciate your gracious visit. Thank you for sharing your uplifting thoughts with me. Your beautiful poetry is only outshined by your kindness. Warmest wishes my poet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 5/9/2025 3:07:00 AM
A poetess of many a dimension humbly and artistically wording her thoughts without forcing them.. elevating with Her her readers to her level of understanding and Beauty! Telling her avid readers, as you have decrypted my world of creation we are ONE! My dear friend Susan, a standing ovation for all that you have poured of WONDER on you page and in our souls! A tremendous delight and insight reading you! God bless you. My warmest wishes. Love and hugs.
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Date: 5/26/2025 8:36:00 AM
(part two) Dearest Besma, my soulful poetry sister, your poetic voice, whether expressed on your esteemed poetic pages, or gratefully found in this modest poet’s comment box, is profound, beautiful, resonant and always deeply respected and truly cherished. My avid reader, I am deeply moved by the thoughts you have so tenderly placed here and I am ever an avid admirer of the wonders of your heart, soul and poetry. Thank you, sweet Besma, for the gift of your friendship. You bring a special enchantment wherever you weave your words into beauty. Warmest wishes, my inspiring poet friend and sister.. ~Susan
Date: 5/9/2025 3:06:00 AM
Sometimes we need to get lost in many a web, a maze to touch a truth, to clearly see and awaringly think and come to terms with innerstanding.. then we can find the way, the path that leads to the one we are, the one who has become and grown.. the one who has been rescued by their own struggles.. We need to feel that fall to earn the rise.. My dear Susan, my soul poetic sister, YOU are your very creation of a journey of your own, a life, a poetry, a wonder of your own! You profoundly touch readers worlds by your words who have themselves reached and touched the depths of realities, fantasies, truths, insights.. Your closing pondering lines of volumes!
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Date: 5/26/2025 8:27:00 AM
Dearest Besma, it's truly wonderful to see you! My sweet poetry sis, your presence here casts a golden glow upon my humble verse, enriching them beyond what my mere words could ever hope to do. I adore your thoughts so beautifully expressed, especially "one who has been rescued by their own struggles" and "We need to feel that fall to earn the rise". Indeed, you are a poetess of great insight, courage and empathy. I have always felt your poetic presence to be palpable and powerful. (part 1)
Date: 5/9/2025 1:23:00 AM
- "I create poetry because I love to pluck things" ... and you do it with skill, Susan :) - An excellent poem :) - Have a lovely weekend :) - hugs
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Date: 5/24/2025 8:28:00 AM
Dear Anne-Lise, thank you for your gracious visit and gratifying response to my poem. I am touched by your kind words. I hope you are having a wonderful weekend. Warmest wishes, my poet friend.. ~Susan
Date: 5/8/2025 12:08:00 PM
Wowza man....."....my own knots...clouds ...tragedy...(but!)....not unhappy.... marionette....".....len
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Date: 5/24/2025 8:26:00 AM
Dear Len, thank you for your gracious visit and wonderful "Wowza!" Your response to my poem is uplifting, my poet friend. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
Date: 5/8/2025 11:42:00 AM
Wow, wow. I love all your unique metaphors. You really do have control of our "strings" and make us reading, happen. Gorgeous, gifted work. Enjoyed - <3
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Date: 5/20/2025 11:53:00 AM
Dear Paige, please accept my apologies for my delayed response to your amazing comments. Life is crazy these days. Your poetic presence and kindness is uplifting and truly appreciated. Thank you, my poet friend, your hearts shines! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

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