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The Path

An aging couple strolled down a leaf-strewn path side by side on crisp fall days and jogged down their path in the spring. Life was peaceful. She never tired of talking about their long life together, the kids, grandkids . . . . Now he strolls along hand-in-hand with a young woman. They laugh and kiss under a cloudless blue sky and bright yellow sun, oblivious to everything and everyone around them. Watching from a bench nearby, a deserted, devastated woman--invisible now, it seems— wrings her hands and cries silently. Blue of sky and yellow of sun seem to blur into garish green teardrops. August 30, 2018, entered in Brian Strand's End August 2018 Standard Contest September 28, 2018, entered in John Hamilton's Free Verse Contest

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Susan Ashley

Date: 10/3/2018 9:01:00 PM

Your poem conveys this immense and tortured heartache with sad beauty and heartbreaking imagery, especially stunning in your last two lines - ingenious! Congratulations on your wonderful win, Janice. ~Susan

John Hamilton

Date: 10/1/2018 11:29:00 AM

A sad story that is all too often true, well written Janice, congrats on a fine win

Janice Canerdy
Date: 10/1/2018 3:46:00 PM

John, thank you so much for sponsoring the contest and for placing my poem! Janice

Joseph May

Date: 9/1/2018 3:05:00 PM

A sad tale of infidelity, Congrats on your win Janice..

Janice Canerdy
Date: 9/1/2018 3:13:00 PM

Thanks so much, Joseph! Janice

Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/1/2018 8:20:00 AM

Back with congrats on your top win, Janice.

Janice Canerdy
Date: 9/1/2018 9:03:00 AM

Thanks so much, Vijay! Janice

Mike Gentile

Date: 8/31/2018 8:20:00 AM

A very moving write, Janice and such a sad commentary on life for some. I thought it excellent!! Happy Friday xxoo

Janice Canerdy
Date: 8/31/2018 8:37:00 AM

Thanks so much, Mike! Janice

Virginia Waters

Date: 8/31/2018 1:26:00 AM

powerful write -best wishes

Janice Canerdy
Date: 8/31/2018 8:37:00 AM

Thanks so much, Virginia! Janice

Caycay Jennings

Date: 8/31/2018 12:14:00 AM

Oh, my - the drama, the sadness, the betrayal - Janice, my emotions have yet to land from your poem. All I know right now is all it evoked in me feels either red or blue! Oh, my Poetry hugs ... (oh, that cussing-words betrayer of a man) CayCay

Janice Canerdy
Date: 8/31/2018 8:40:00 AM

CayCay, THANK YOU so much!! Janice

Vijay Pandit

Date: 8/30/2018 5:00:00 PM

This does happen a lot..you gave a voice to her devastated life..and a meaning to her teardrops..best for a win, Janice.

Janice Canerdy
Date: 8/30/2018 5:58:00 PM

Vijay, thank you so much! Janice

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 8/30/2018 3:33:00 PM

Hello Janice, ah! A wonderful poem. A bit sad. Because she is watching her love with another woman. no wonder she is crying. have a nice evening my friend.

Janice Canerdy
Date: 8/30/2018 3:35:00 PM

Thanks so much, Darlene! Janice

Chris Green

Date: 8/30/2018 2:24:00 PM

Wow!!! Talk about sad, this one rips my heart right out of my chest. I can feel her loneliness and emptiness Janice. You did a great job with this. Much luck in the contest

Janice Canerdy
Date: 8/30/2018 3:36:00 PM

Thank you so much, Chris! Janice