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Imagism Poetry Contest

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Sailors Rusty and Oz cruise back from the steely shores of the Bahamas, underway and navigating to Key West. Tired from the ship’s routine, duties, and three long months away. There is a full moon, and the stars shine like diamonds in the black sky. Underneath a full silver moon there on an open sea Her golden locks flowing down, drapes her back endlessly. Flawless, in perfect harmony with the water. Propelling herself up from under darkened hues of emerald green. Plunging down, one with the ocean. Her mermaid tail glistening colors of violet and crimson. She swims towards the ship, the ship’s port holes lit brightly shine through, she catches sight of me. We lock eyes, her cobalt blue eyes I would get closer to see. Whether a dream or imagination, a raft I’ll take, make my way to her. Knowing not if she’ll flee, I s l o w l y lean over. We kiss. Mermaid shmermade, Oz you’re drunk. Mythical half-female, half-fish creatures They only exist in seafaring lore. Like you, I too saw a mermaid, she wasn’t made up. A real sea cow as a matter of fact. Cared nothing of vanity, nothing like they are made out to be. Manatees are slow-moving aquatic mammals, with human-like eyes, bulbous faces and paddle-like tails Pay attention to detail, and not to Circe, you see my friend, you kissed a manatee!

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Date: 1/31/2024 11:43:00 AM
I love every bit of this! The prelude, the mermaid: Her golden locks flowing down, drapes her back endlessly…Wow! The humor: Mermaid shmermade, Oz you’re drunk...the profound description of: “I too so a mermaid, a real sea cow, and it’s inevitable end! You should get POTD for such a write! Fave for me!
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I Am Anaya
Date: 1/31/2024 3:20:00 PM
Ha, I'm delighted Kim! I trust your thoughts. Haha it has humor alright. Wow, Kimmy you really made my night!! Thank you so much for the fave. Hugs and laughter ~Anaya
Date: 1/30/2024 8:31:00 AM
Such a delightful poem full of sea imagery ! The mermaid and the manatee.... all sound so interesting and you have narrated the tale in such a way that it draws the reader's full attention from start to the finish. Did you write the poem looking at the image or searched and chose the image so befitting to your description? I must say that you have exercised your power of imagination to the fullest, dear Anaya. There is always variety for your poems.
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Date: 1/31/2024 3:24:00 PM
The idea of a sailor and a mermaid first! It took forever to find the image, but isn't it always the perfect one when you do find it? I love being prompted by a photo, painting etc. Thank you sweet Valsa, for noticing. I will always appreciate your reviews, you are magnanimous! :)
Date: 1/29/2024 3:31:00 PM
This is such a captivating story right from the start dear Anaya - you have certainly pulled the reader in. I love the precise, sharp imagery, ‘full silver moon’ ‘ golden locks’ hues of emerald green’ ‘ violet and crimson’. Wonderful use of vivid colour throughout the ‘tale’ (not just the mermaids! :)) I think I would have kissed a manatee as I think they are cute. I cannot take my eyes off that picture as well as it so perfectly captures the poem. Really enjoyed this delightful read.
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Date: 1/31/2024 3:29:00 PM
You have made me proud of my work, I trust you, Christina and your review is just what I needed!..The image is an actual photo that I edited to make it look like a painting, yeah. Thank you, dear Christina! X0
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Christina Bowring
Date: 1/29/2024 3:31:00 PM
Good luck in the contest. Hugs and smiles my friend xx
Date: 1/29/2024 12:47:00 PM
Love the twist here from Mermaid to Shmermade, as the poem takes on a different dimension, now that takes real imagination Anaya, brilliant! Imho a big contender for the contest, cheers David
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Date: 1/29/2024 1:08:00 PM
I was afraid that the start of the transition would come off sounding like a limerick, which by the way you do exquisitely. Thank you! Cheers
Date: 1/29/2024 9:42:00 AM
The poem you have composed exhibits exceptional craftsmanship, adorned with impeccable diction. I am captivated by the vivid imagery portrayed and in awe of your unparalleled creativity, dear Anaya. Your eloquent descriptions possess an enchanting allure, effectively conveying a profound sense of perplexity.
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Date: 1/29/2024 12:40:00 PM
The contest called for poetry that uses clear and direct statements in order to put an exact picture in the reader's head, easily and quickly create visual images that tell the story. As long as it was captivating, I'm thrilled, thank you, SP!
Date: 1/29/2024 6:00:00 AM
Better a manatee than a shark. Fosho. Seriously though I like how you start off with myth and end in reality. Have a great week
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Date: 1/29/2024 9:26:00 AM
Lol. Thank you, Tom! You too
Date: 1/29/2024 2:44:00 AM
I love mermaids and wrote about them. But kissing a manatee is another matter. Very original.
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I Am Anaya
Date: 1/29/2024 9:25:00 AM
Lol. I know I've read your most recent mermaid story, fantastic, Victor! Thank you.
Date: 1/29/2024 12:55:00 AM
Wow my mermaid heart is beaming, and dancing as i read this imaginative storytelling here done in the most eloquent and elegant manner. I love the imagery and your wordplay is so very creative dear anaya. Its always a pleasure reading your work. And the opening lines had a soft touch and drew me right in. And the ending made me smile! How clever are you. I love this! Best wishes for the contest
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I Am Anaya
Date: 1/29/2024 9:24:00 AM
I'm very pleased you find pleasure in my work, Ink as I love yours! Not everyone does like others work, and express their cruel thoughts, it's low-down. I stay away from haters. Like they say: You can't teach OLD dog's new tricks, lol. Thank you! Bless your mermaid heart
Date: 1/28/2024 6:10:00 PM
Gosh, a mermaid or a manatee! This write surely kept my attention captivated throughout and it's the perfect narration exploring storytelling skills so effortlessly.. I'm actually in awe of your artistic capabilities, dear Anaya, your descriptions are so bewitching and I really love how you've expressed that state of bewilderment when one believes to have seen the sea-angel 'mermaid' but if it's a fleeting imagination or a fragment of truth! The ending conveys it all..Best wishes for the contest
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Date: 1/29/2024 9:31:00 AM
It means so much to me that you care enough to point out the importance of what the poem means and what techniques were used. Informative, you are a brilliant young writer, who is just going to get better! Thank you, Hiya ~Namaste`

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