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The Mark

Note: Someone who is a "mark" is an easy target. Her purse and heart she opened wide, But neither love nor luck were kind. A scoundrel took her for his bride. Her purse and heart she opened wide. He stole her money and her pride. She lost so much she lost her mind. Her purse and heart she opened wide. But neither love nor luck were kind. (For Sara's Zeugma Contest. Examples of Zeugma are "Her purse and heart she opened wide," "He stole her money and her pride," and "She lost so much she lost her mind"

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 10/2/2014 6:15:00 AM

Andrea, Thank you so much for participating in my contest..I enjoyed reading your entry..It is very clever in all areas..I am sorry about being so long in saying congrats but due to the circumstances I guess you understand..Sara

Brenda Meier-Hans

Date: 9/22/2014 10:30:00 AM

Very sad story Andrea but great Zeugma, Triolet. Congratulations on your win.

Jack Horne

Date: 8/24/2014 11:01:00 AM

love this clever but sad zeugma, my friend - sure to be a winner

Monterey Sirak

Date: 8/24/2014 7:03:00 AM

Very creative! You told an expansive story in limited lines. You make me wish I could write in these forms.

Daver Austin

Date: 8/23/2014 12:33:00 PM

Maybe you know the answer - why can't we get our poems viewed the way we layed them out? Love, daver

Robert Johnson

Date: 8/22/2014 8:22:00 PM

Tis a shame they play this game. Where those of us get hurt. You try to fly and soar so high, and end up in the dirt. I feel bad that she was had and taken for a ride. By this cad who made her sad, who she wished, I'm sure had died. Hello Andrea, hope all's well. Peace. :)

David Mohn

Date: 8/22/2014 7:27:00 PM

Just great Andrea, I think you have this nailed...thanks for the comments on mine as well

Paul Callus

Date: 8/22/2014 12:16:00 PM

A 7 top rating for you and the write, Andrea. Excellent rendition of a Triolet where the flow is so evident. This is a sure winner. // paul

Paul Callus
Date: 9/22/2014 2:38:00 PM

...and back with congratulations, Andrea!! a winner it is!!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/22/2014 8:07:00 AM

I am impressed how hou have mastered so many forms. A very entertaining piece.

Ilene Bauer

Date: 8/21/2014 7:24:00 PM

andrea - i'm constantly amazed by your brilliance! i love this very creative example of it...

Tim Smith

Date: 8/21/2014 2:20:00 PM

Great Zeugama my friend ....love the story as well...hugs

John Lawless

Date: 8/21/2014 12:00:00 PM

Nicely done triolet Andrea. Luckily he didn't steal her pen.

Daver Austin

Date: 8/21/2014 11:51:00 AM

Revealing the con man. Way to go! Love, daver

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 8/21/2014 11:26:00 AM

Very good! Im still not sure about what Ive written..afraid to post it..haha. Hope all is well with you...your work is always outstanding. BG

Debra Squyres

Date: 8/21/2014 11:05:00 AM

Your word choice fits and flows well with the title and thought. Nicely done !!!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/21/2014 11:00:00 AM

Wow that's lovely Andrea! Surely a winner! Good luck dear!

Jan Allison

Date: 8/21/2014 9:41:00 AM

this will be at the top of the podium Andrea a very clever write:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Earl Schumacker

Date: 8/21/2014 9:39:00 AM

Good morning Andrea, You have a very clear crisp message here in a concise writing. I hope you win the contest. Have a pleasant day. Take care. Earl

Frederic Parker

Date: 8/21/2014 9:25:00 AM

I think I saw this scoundrel on America's most Wanted..you have a good one here it should do well, my poetic friend behind the Foster Grants..good luck

Eileen Manassian

Date: 8/21/2014 9:24:00 AM

I don't know what Zeugma is, Hon, but you sure got a winner here! LOVED IT! ;) You rock, Andrea! You surely do! HUGSSSSS

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 8/21/2014 9:23:00 AM

It reminds me of the beauty and the beast, Andrea.