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The Last Train

She was standing on the station waiting for the express train It would be her last journey, wouldn’t see her folks again Her head it was swimming with dark and angry thoughts Of her husband’s betrayal and all the pain he’d brought The signals indicated the express train would come She jumped off the platform, her time on earth was done Her family were torn apart and couldn’t understand why This loving wife and mother was so desperate to die This tale is oh so tragic, people thought their marriage was fine But her journey with her husband had reached the end of the line Jan Allison 15th May 2014 I've simply no idea where this dark poem appeared from Jan ***

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Jt Nyx

Date: 5/21/2014 4:25:00 PM

A very good poem, witch such a bitter end. I do like the creativity in your verse. I too, find myself just writing things that come to me. Thank you for sharing and look forward to seeing more from you :) Take care jess

Jan Allison
Date: 6/9/2014 4:47:00 PM

Thanks for dropping by with your comment. Hugs Jan xx

Vera Duggan

Date: 5/16/2014 8:05:00 PM

Great write Jan, suicide is not the way to go but I can understand why they do it, it is a crushing blow when a marriage splits up, you have put it down so well considering it came out of the dark, take care my friend....Vera...............

Jan Allison
Date: 5/17/2014 12:57:00 AM

Hi Vera Goodness knows where this came from I was eating my breakfast and wham here it is. Hugs as ever my friend Jan xxx

Darren Watson

Date: 5/15/2014 10:27:00 PM

This is seriously good Jan .

Jan Allison
Date: 5/16/2014 12:58:00 AM

Thanks Darren - no idea where it came from just a bit deep and dark for my normal write. Hugs Jan xxx

Al Johnson

Date: 5/15/2014 12:36:00 PM

Hi Jan, The Last Train is very nicely written. I enjoyed the realism of the words and the fact that your writing is easily related to, telling a story. Keep up the great work!

Jan Allison
Date: 5/15/2014 12:59:00 PM

thanks Al Hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance

Date: 5/15/2014 6:54:00 AM

Very good, and different, hey ya never know what the muses will give ya, but gotta write it anyway, and this was definatly worth sharing thanks. Hope you have a great day :) smiles

Jan Allison
Date: 5/15/2014 12:59:00 PM

thanks Casarah hugs jan xx

Jenny Brewer

Date: 5/15/2014 5:21:00 AM

Hi hun, I really like this one,nicely written. xx

Jan Allison
Date: 5/15/2014 5:23:00 AM

next poem I post will be humourous Jenny. Hugs as ever Jan xxxx

Robert Pettit

Date: 5/15/2014 5:16:00 AM

This is a really sad poem. Suicide is not a way to escape personal problems.

Jan Allison
Date: 5/15/2014 5:22:00 AM

thanks for the comment Robert I agree with everything you said. Hugs Jan xxx

Tim Smith

Date: 5/15/2014 3:58:00 AM

It is so sad that it comes to this. Emotions are very high and you think life is over...wonderful write Jan.....hugs Tim

Jan Allison
Date: 5/15/2014 4:44:00 AM

Thanks Tim its a bit dark from my normal humourous style - next one i post will be much lighter! Thanks for dropping by as ever my lovely friend. Hugs Jan xxx

Seren Roberts

Date: 5/15/2014 3:35:00 AM

wow Jan thats desperation plus......Well written .....Seren

Jan Allison
Date: 5/15/2014 4:43:00 AM

No idea where it came from was eating my cereal and hey presto - it does somewhat relate to my poem about my friend who has alcohol addiction so maybe that's where it came from. Hugs jan xx