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The Last of the Last

If this was the last- sip of booze that I tasted Perhaps, before bedtime I'd not be wasted If this was the last- cigarette I inhaled I'd say I did well, so many times I've failed If this was the last- of the words that I cuss My conversations would linger, there would be more to discuss If this was the last- of the demons, I faced I'd finally not fear all the ones that I've chased If this was the last- of my lasts by far I'd never again say... "I left my damn cigarettes at the bar"

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Date: 9/16/2023 9:53:00 AM
Social life. Life is rife with struggle. Your real Charlie, and this is what real life is, both external and internal and it's exhausting, tormenting realities of just trying to get by in this life. Great philosophy, humorous twist! Great entry! xhugs
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Date: 9/16/2023 8:18:00 AM
Very clever take on the theme, Charles. I like the way you delivered your message---how we want get rid of some of our habits--and you did in a fun way infusing nuggets of wisdom.
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Date: 9/16/2023 8:15:00 AM
As Richard so aptly said, reminds me of Bukowski... This poem makes its point quite succinctly. and the last verse is very funny. God bless you.
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Date: 9/16/2023 6:52:00 AM
Charlie, we each face our own unique battles in this journey we call life. This heartfelt message is filled with genuine sincerity. Your poetic verses effortlessly intertwine, creating a harmonious symphony of words. Best wishes for this contest,
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Date: 9/16/2023 6:07:00 AM
This write is quite evocative and vulnerable with the expression of incessant trying yet never treated easily by life. Love the lines and the unique flow of your lines, quite intriguing and wonderfully written and truly, that last line adds a brilliant element.. Best of luck for the contest!
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Date: 9/16/2023 1:50:00 AM
Its never easy… what an honest and sincere write this is. Absolutely loved it. And that last line is brilliant. I love how you’ve written for the prompt. Your rhymes are excellent and flow is amazing. Goodluck for the contest
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Date: 9/16/2023 1:48:00 AM
I loved this poem. The last line made me laugh. I needed that.
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Date: 9/15/2023 9:22:00 PM
We all have our challenges, Charlie. You put yours to bed in a very poetic way ... Through your poetry. I liked it. Bill
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Date: 9/15/2023 11:11:00 AM
Last line is funny! Good entry.
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Date: 9/14/2023 6:12:00 PM
Reminds me of Bukowski. I like the mood of this piece.
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Charles Messina
Date: 9/14/2023 6:45:00 PM
Hey Richard, great to see you back, my friend. Yes, come to think of it, it does remind of Bukowski! Thanks for stopping by!

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