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If I sleep tonight What can I make of tomorrow As my mind whirrs in and whirrs out But I'm still made time for How do I categorise this mood Perhaps melancholy There's surely been a time and place slip I don't know how I got here Living the dream written down on the folded piece of paper But instead of whooping Sitting in various chairs Contemplating the absence of dreams I need to wake up This perpetual slumber is a future regret How do I open my eyes I'm Snow White In the glass coffin Unable to hear what those gathered are saying Following linear paths doesn't work You've left before you knew you arrived I can stop now Use the idea of cycling round again To wake up I'll slide along again whilst sleeping It's a terrible idea To stay awake In this mood I'll go for less carbs tomorrow Perhaps that'll do the trick

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Date: 4/2/2023 2:39:00 AM
"How do I categorize this mood Perhaps melancholy"..... Indeed there is a tint of melancholy in your words. How beautifully you externalize the mood of the jumbling thoughts of inertia and express the need to wake up. 'Absence of dreams, Snow white in a glass coffin, perpetual slumber.'... all these are very powerful images, conveying much. Deeply touching DD. Your poems are a level apart !
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Date: 4/2/2023 2:44:00 AM
Oh Valsa, so many kind words for my note pad ideas! I'm really honoured to encounter such lovely people on this site. I think the thoughts are tumbling slowly into poetry, which I'm writing before I'm off in a different mood. Thank you for your comment which I take as complimentary despite not quite understanding how it can be so (in the sense of a tumble of ideas being appreciated as worth reading)
Date: 4/1/2023 11:58:00 PM
Are sure that you didn't have a dream or two ? Reminds me of E.A. Poe's poem 'A Dream Within A Dream'. You know its possible to dream that you weren't dreaming.. You are right, A terrible idea to force yourself to stay awake. Your poem was light headed and quite dreamy to me DD, and I enjoyed unravelling it. Well done.
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Date: 4/2/2023 12:20:00 AM
I think there's definitely a beautiful poem in those thoughts that I just can't define or draw out. But then again - they do have sandwich board ranting vibes too :)
Date: 4/1/2023 7:13:00 PM
Quite an exhausting journey your mind has taken, had difficulty keeping up. Awake or asleep make sure you keep the Muse close by to record your words. Enioyed reading.
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Date: 4/1/2023 11:29:00 PM
Thanks Paul - you are very kind about my tumble of thoughts and words :)

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