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The Hunt

The hunt for quails had begun. Two old men sat on a bench on the main street. A shot rang out of the stillness of the countryside. Below one old man, weak-sighted but the sound of hearing, raised his head towards the ridge. "He missed! Surely the fool has missed!" he said. Up the street, two youths approached, both carried a double-barrelled repeater. Both had empty bags. The two young men stopped in front of them. "Oliver would have hit any bird even with half-blind eyes," the taller one said. "And you, Bert? Come with us tomorrow?" Laughing, they continued their way. "Of course, rest assured we are indeed men! I lost count of the number of quails I caught!" "We are men! You know what, we’ll go hunting too." Two heads, one white, one bald, nodded in unison. “We’ll meet early at six tomorrow.” They agreed. The town hall clock rang out every hour. Six o’clock struck. Nature slept on. Below, in an alley, two old men dreamt. Damn fools! They moaned in their sleep. Why can’t they shoot straight?

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Date: 8/11/2025 12:22:00 PM
Well, you can tell a tale as good as any storyteller. I am still wondering though about the old men going hunting did they or did they not? Thanks for sharing this one with us. Sara K
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Victor Buhagiar
Date: 8/11/2025 12:35:00 PM
No, they were too old and continued to sleep.
Date: 8/11/2025 4:44:00 AM
Dearest Victor,What a vivid and charming slice of life — I could almost hear the clock chime and see the mischief in the old men’s eyes. You capture the humor, camaraderie, and gentle irony of age so well. ..Hugs
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Date: 8/11/2025 1:13:00 AM
Great story. Being a vegan myself, I hope they miss every time and that every hunter misses the time of hunting! Entertaining story!
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Date: 8/10/2025 9:54:00 PM
Enjoyed your humor, Victor
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Date: 8/10/2025 4:11:00 PM
an entertaining story, Victor. The contrast between you and old age is a brilliant touch. have a great week ahead, Sara
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Date: 8/10/2025 3:26:00 PM
lol, really enjoy your sense of humor, coupled with your gift for telling tales of old :) your pen is gold !
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Date: 8/10/2025 12:16:00 PM
I enjoyed reading your fun/wonderful "The Hunt" write/story. Great Ending... Have a blessed/wonderful day writing away.........
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Date: 8/10/2025 12:11:00 PM
Love it! Great poetry, Victor. Best regards! :) john
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Date: 8/10/2025 11:37:00 AM
Haha! Victor this was most amazing! Brought a chuckle from my lips! I have always loved your writing! ;)
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Date: 8/10/2025 11:27:00 AM
A humorous last line!
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Date: 8/10/2025 9:47:00 AM
I enjoyed this dreamy narrative of the young and the old interacting, Victor. Your stories never fail to delight! :)
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Date: 8/10/2025 5:51:00 AM
As people grow older, they always have a tendency to recount the adventurous deeds performed in their younger days. Now such acts remain only in their dreams. Lovely narration.
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Date: 8/10/2025 4:04:00 AM
feels like a fun little snapshot of small-town life and friendly teasing between generations. The way the old and young guys joke around shows a nice bond and shared love for hunting. It’s easy to picture the scene and smile!
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Date: 8/10/2025 4:03:00 AM
You are a wonderful story teller Victor, this is a gem! hugs jan xx
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Date: 8/10/2025 2:47:00 AM
A magnificent poem that contrasts youth's courage with age's peaceful insight. It shows the vanity of youthful bravado in the pursuit versus the weary groans of old men
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Date: 8/10/2025 2:23:00 AM
- ... a flashback to when they were young and could do most things ... great writing, Victor :) - hugs
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