The Ghost of My Lonely

Abandoned in the fifties after the war
A freight elevator stuck between floors
Obsolete machinery, splintered old chairs
In a warehouse in Newark, New Jersey somewhere

Dead air presses down, stifling and thick
Something still dwells behind one of those bricks
Curled up in a ball, it waits for me there
In a warehouse in Newark, New Jersey somewhere

A musty gray vapor that whispers my name
It seeps through the wall and creeps to my brain
It sighs and it groans as my soul is laid bare
In a warehouse in Newark, New Jersey somewhere

It mumbles and moans and drones of ancient tombs
Of claustrophobic closets and dim, hollow rooms
I cry out for help, echoes answer my prayer
In a warehouse in Newark, New Jersey somewhere

The ghost of my lonely, my lost and alone
My hopeless and helpless, my can't go back home
It's looking at me now with a dull, vacant stare
In a warehouse in Newark, New Jersey somewhere
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012

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Canerdy Avatar
September 26, 2017 at 11:23 PM
Tim, this WINNING poem is REALLY gripping and skillfully-written! Janice
Sinha-Roy Avatar
September 26, 2017 at 11:04 PM
Congratulations, Tim on your placement. This is a wonderful poem.
Medders Tobechi Avatar
September 26, 2017 at 6:28 PM
Congratulations on your win. Old buildings, abandoned hospitals, all have an eerie feel about them. You can sense it from the outside. I think maybe you refer to the homeless runaways in your poem even. This is a very good write and I like the repeating of the line.
La France Avatar
September 26, 2017 at 4:35 PM
Tim, a wonderful and sort of creepy write, congratulations on your win !!
Lawless Avatar
September 26, 2017 at 4:05 PM
Dammit Tim....this had me looking over my shoulder.....The repeated line is like an unseen door slamming behind the reader.....hastening his eyes to read quickly.....and get out fast.
Johnson-Saunders Avatar
February 25, 2017 at 12:55 AM
An amazing write, Tim...I got chills when reading it! Congrats on this win. I haven't seen around here or on FB. I hope you're doing well. Hugs, Rhonda
Dietrich Avatar
February 23, 2017 at 7:23 PM
Tim here I am again, maybe third time since you posted this golden oldie. Congrats again, dear friend and I hope you are doing well.
Krampe Avatar
February 22, 2017 at 6:42 PM
Creepy and scary, and with the repeated line has the feeling of an old ballad. Congrats on your placement, Tim.
Vinson Avatar
February 22, 2017 at 4:10 PM
Really well done, Tim - a smooth and powerful setting of mood.
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September 18, 2016 at 1:45 AM
Tim, Congratulations on your sweet win. Thank you so much for the support. Stop by my blog "CERTIFYING OLD AGE (and a baby)" if you'd like. Always & Forever..... LINDA
Kalicharan Avatar
September 17, 2016 at 1:08 AM
This caught my attention because of its form. I've never heard of it but it seems like something I'd like to try. Thank you.. Jenni
Kimathi Avatar
June 8, 2016 at 8:17 AM
Greetings Tim. Congrats for your well deserved first placement in the contest, with this awesome piece!! ;-)
Stebbings Avatar
June 7, 2016 at 12:54 PM
Congratulations, Tim, on your top place with your very atmospheric piece. Barry
Marschall Avatar
June 7, 2016 at 10:22 AM
Congratulations Tim! Great write!
Smith Avatar
June 7, 2016 at 8:40 AM
Congratulations Tim, great piece...
Lamoureux Avatar
June 7, 2016 at 7:26 AM
Congratulations on your top spot Tim.
Marcum Wong Avatar
June 7, 2016 at 5:49 AM
This is superb Tim! Congratulations on your first place deserving win! #7 ; )
Rodrigues Avatar
June 6, 2016 at 11:09 PM
Congratulations! Enjoyed!
Bradfield Avatar
June 6, 2016 at 10:05 PM
Great write and congratulations!! Larry
Nance Avatar
June 6, 2016 at 9:36 PM
I had a feeling I read this before, the creepy sensation that covered me while I read was still as fresh as the first time. This is a fantastic write, thank you for entering it! ;)
Johnson Avatar
June 6, 2016 at 7:36 PM
Great writing and a great win. Congratulations.
Deschler Avatar
December 6, 2015 at 9:40 PM
I remember this from one of my previous contests and it was good to see it on the winner's list once again. This deserves to be there, Tim... I love atmospheric poems like this. The rhyming and rhythm of the poem is just excellent! Congrats on a great win!
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November 16, 2015 at 9:14 PM
Hi Tim, you are so sweet. Happy to be on the same winning list. Congratulations. Love SKAT
Richards Avatar
November 16, 2015 at 12:36 PM
I would place this as a number one !! Excellent!! New or older poem.......it deserves to be read again
Cheema Avatar
November 16, 2015 at 10:19 AM
Congrats Tim on the ghost of your lonely self in a warehouse in Newark or wherever!
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