Sara Kendrick Poet Ghazal

Notes About The Poem

 

One lonely Ghazal

The Ghazal

I tried writing this verse, and I was not happy
The undertaking cursed, and I was not happy

I tried this way and that, nothing seemed to be right
I scratched out but 'twas worse, and I was not happy

I threw the notebook hard all the way 'cross the yard
All became too averse, and I was not happy 

It became within reach then vanished from my mind
This strange Ghazal jumped cursed, and I was not happy

Baby sees what is  now said upon these blue lines
She was rolled in the hearse, and she is not happy 

My daddy always called me Baby or nearly always..No one else in the family did nor does my husband..

Inspired by the contest: Give Me A Ghazal 
Sponsor: Timothy Hicks
Written: March 12, 2016

♡Like0

Share Poem

---

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Pashang Salehi August 4, 2016 at 5:20 PM Sara, this is really nice... Pashang Salehi August 5, 2016 at 3:38 PM Always... Sara Kendrick August 4, 2016 at 5:27 PM Thanks so much for dropping by..I had fun writing this one..Your presence here was a delight..Sara

Vladislav Raven March 29, 2016 at 5:31 PM Hi Sara, Congratulations on your win in the contest....Vlad.

Jan Allison March 27, 2016 at 2:13 PM many congrats on your win Sara:-) hugs jan xx Sara Kendrick March 27, 2016 at 3:14 PM Thanks for dropping by with congrats..I appreciate the time spent here..Sara

Poet Destroyer A March 27, 2016 at 9:36 AM Congratulations Sara....Luv. Linda Sara Kendrick March 27, 2016 at 3:14 PM Thanks for dropping by with congrats..Sara

James Inman March 27, 2016 at 8:52 AM How frustrating Sara! I hate it when I think of the perfect line but before I write it down it vanishes like smoke on a windy day. Sara Kendrick March 27, 2016 at 3:16 PM Yes, those lines sometimes do a quick trip through my brain..Must not be enough storage for them to stay..LOL..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Brian Davey March 27, 2016 at 2:05 AM LOL great poem and congrats on your win even if you didn't enjoy it! Sara Kendrick March 27, 2016 at 3:17 PM It was difficult to write but I worked through it and I overcame the hardship..I have written these before but can't remember when..Thanks for dropping by..Glad that you got a chuckle..Sara

Timothy Hicks March 27, 2016 at 12:01 AM Congrats on your win, Sarah! Before hosting this contest, I was aware that the ghazal form is not a favorite, and many seem to avoid it, so this tickled my funny bone. Creative switch at the end, changing the refrain slightly. Thanks for the laugh and trying out the form :) Sara Kendrick March 27, 2016 at 3:18 PM Well, Glad that you enjoyed the laugh..I did and maybe I did not change the refrain for maybe the refrain was just not happy..Thanks for the honor of placing in your contest..Sara

Jack Horne March 13, 2016 at 4:31 PM great write, my friend - will have to check out this form Sara Kendrick March 27, 2016 at 3:18 PM I wonder if you checked out this form and wrote one much better than mine??Sara

Meenakshi Raina March 12, 2016 at 9:46 PM Well done Sara! It has all the lines balanced......that makes it a beautiful Ghazal.....good luck for the contest. Sara Kendrick March 27, 2016 at 3:19 PM Thanks for the kind review..I appreciate you dropping by.Sara