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And in my dream- I am in a garden, with many winding paths and flowers bright; in the shadow of leaves a bird takes flight, my dress is pink and my lips are crimson; and my heart and soul are ever broken. Sweet is the flutter of rainbow butterflies, so pretty the purple asters and red roses; a sweet, lazy yellow pansy quietly dozes, through a green canopy are blue skies; oh, I've sent my love letters with no replies. The roaring and splashing of a waterfall, a dripping that never ever stops; I sink to a stone with falling teardrops, a letter in my hand does a slow fall; we regret to . . . I feel empty and small. _______________________ January 20, 2018 Poetry/Rhyme/The Garden Copyright Protected, ID 18-9837-90-01 All Rights Reserved. Written Under Pseudonym.

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Date: 1/23/2018 7:22:00 AM
Sadness seeps in with tiny doses that reach a climax in the final line...but so beautiful both in imagery and deliverance. Love the accompanying gif, too. Regards // paul
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Date: 1/25/2018 11:50:00 AM
Paul, thank you. It was my hope that the last line would be a stunner and so its great to know it is !
Date: 1/20/2018 2:34:00 PM
beautiful & so sad, my friend x
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Date: 1/25/2018 11:51:00 AM
Jack, thank you. well you know me, I must get my sadness into my poems !
Date: 1/20/2018 12:35:00 PM
Such is the pain of loss you so elegantly expressed, best wishes in the contest...
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Date: 1/25/2018 11:52:00 AM
Charlie, thank you. Happy you liked my poem !
Date: 1/20/2018 11:24:00 AM
Eloquently penned, this one. A dream to read.
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Date: 1/25/2018 11:52:00 AM
Rhoda, thank you. I like that word eloquently. Happy you like my Dream Poetry !
Date: 1/20/2018 7:00:00 AM
I enjoyed reading this poem..it flows beautifully with feelings.
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Date: 1/25/2018 11:54:00 AM
Vijay, thank you. Feelings I have an abundance of !
Date: 1/20/2018 2:29:00 AM
Such a wicked poem. Full of brightness and beauty and then that little twist of darkness in the final moment, the black current underneath. It makes the person standing invisible next to you in your story, want to pick the fallen note up off the ground and continue reading the full message. This poem reminds me of Christina Henry's re-imagined version of "Alice". But it's all yours, unique.
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Date: 1/25/2018 11:56:00 AM
Leanne, thank you. I like that word unique, happy you liked the twist at the end. I thought only giving a few words of the letter would be powerful !

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