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The Final Push - Brevity Contest

I lay on the bed puffing and panting Couldn’t get comfortable no matter how hard I tried I twisted and turned, oh how my stomach ached When will this pain be over - I can hardly take any more With one last push …… I got the zipper of my new jeans done up! Brevity Contest – Sponsor Casarah Nance 07~07~15

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/15/2015 1:38:00 AM

Jan, Congratulations ~LINDA~

Jan Allison
Date: 7/15/2015 4:30:00 AM

Thanks Linda:-) Hugs Jan x

Skat A

Date: 7/14/2015 12:04:00 AM

Jan, Congratulations on your sweet win. Love SKAT

Jan Allison
Date: 7/14/2015 4:21:00 AM

Thanks Skat:-) Hugs Jan x

Olusegun Arowolo

Date: 7/13/2015 5:23:00 PM

Brilliant piece, Jan.Congrats on your well deserved win in this contest.kudos yo you great friend and poet.And thanks for your comments on my works

Jan Allison
Date: 7/13/2015 5:24:00 PM

thanks for dropping by with your lovely comment:-) hugs Jan xx

Lycia Harding

Date: 7/13/2015 4:23:00 PM

Hahaha! Were you in my dressing room this morning?? Love it, Jan. Congrats on your win. xoxo

Jan Allison
Date: 7/13/2015 4:27:00 PM

lol Hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos

Date: 7/13/2015 3:43:00 PM

Congratulations! Number Won! Cheers!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/13/2015 4:03:00 PM

I'm so glad Cas liked it Judy the win has made my day brighter:-) hugs Jan xx

Abdul Malik

Date: 7/13/2015 1:25:00 PM

Now this is what I call 'Brevity with a twist". You should be on the top!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/13/2015 1:28:00 PM

I was so delighted Cas liked it Abdul:-) hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/13/2015 12:17:00 PM

Congratulations on your first place in this contest Jan! I knew it would be a top winner.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/13/2015 12:32:00 PM

Thanks Connie I am so glad Cas liked it:-) hugs jan xx

Kp Nunez

Date: 7/13/2015 11:30:00 AM

Yes! An awesome win! Congrats, Jan! hugs!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/13/2015 11:42:00 AM

Thanks so much Kim:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 7/13/2015 9:43:00 AM

Awesome win, hugs eve

Jan Allison
Date: 7/13/2015 11:42:00 AM

Thanks so much Eve I had fun with this one:-) hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance

Date: 7/13/2015 8:38:00 AM

oh so hilarious! I laughed out loud when I read this entry! Grats on first place ;-)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/13/2015 11:41:00 AM

Oh wow thanks Cas you have made my day:-) hugs Jan xx

Viv Wigley

Date: 7/12/2015 9:26:00 PM

Its a girl! Who writes great poetry! Viv x

Jan Allison
Date: 7/13/2015 3:05:00 AM

aww thanks Mr Viv ***blushes*** I'm far from a girl but thanks for the kind words:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 7/8/2015 5:20:00 PM

Enjoyed your final twist, Jan:) Initially a few ideas passed through my mind!! gl in the contest. hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 7/8/2015 5:27:00 PM

Cas wanted a twist so i hope she likes my take on the theme:-) hugs jan xx

James Fraser

Date: 7/8/2015 2:16:00 PM

Not a challenge I've endured, but I guess many have. Good luck in the contest Jan, hugs//James xx

Jan Allison
Date: 7/8/2015 2:18:00 PM

Thanks for your continued support James I hope cas likes the twist at the end:-) hugs jan xx

Kp Nunez

Date: 7/8/2015 7:31:00 AM

hahaah! too cute...the first line was kind of hot...then second line got me wondering ...3rd line got me sympathizing...4th and 5th lines...wow! I'm witcha! lol! I know Cas would love this... hugs!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/8/2015 7:34:00 AM

Thanks Kim - I hope Cas likes the twist at the end:-) Hugs Jan xx

Njeri Hunjeri

Date: 7/7/2015 8:14:00 PM

Lol, the end got me. Good one. All the best in the contest. N thank u so much for helping me the other day. I will always remember that.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/8/2015 1:42:00 AM

Thanks Njeri and my pleasure to help:-) hugs Jan xx

Judy Konos

Date: 7/7/2015 6:50:00 PM

Been there done that but never actually succeeded in getting that zipper all the way up to the top! One KQQL scenario here....Bravo!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/8/2015 1:40:00 AM

Thanks Judy:-) Hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 7/7/2015 6:47:00 PM

You really had me wondering what you were doing a 7 hugs eve

Jan Allison
Date: 7/8/2015 1:40:00 AM

Thanks Eve Cas wanted a twist i hope I pulled it off lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Jerry T Curtis

Date: 7/7/2015 6:37:00 PM

This for sure is the 8th wonder of the word, lol

Jan Allison
Date: 7/7/2015 6:46:00 PM

ha ha ha:-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 7/7/2015 6:31:00 PM

Jan, ha ha, this is so funny, been there, those darn skinny jeans, wonderful 7 and thanks for visiting my poems, Gods Love. . . and Spiritual Awareness

Jan Allison
Date: 7/7/2015 6:33:00 PM

Thanks for dropping by I just hope it is what Cas is looking for:-) hugs jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 7/7/2015 5:48:00 PM

Jan, this is good one. lt ain't so easy putting on your favorite jeans. Believe me I know lol. Good luck in the contest:-)Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 7/7/2015 5:51:00 PM

I have a pair of jeans that are over 25 years old - they are too big for me at the moment:-( hugs Jan xx

John Lawless

Date: 7/7/2015 5:39:00 PM

Good one Jan....ain't easy giving up on those favorite jeans..

Jan Allison
Date: 7/7/2015 5:41:00 PM

It's not an issue I have John just had to go with the flow of my pen and this is the result lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Frederic Parker

Date: 7/7/2015 5:02:00 PM

Comes a time when one has to decide to buy a bigger size..

Jan Allison
Date: 7/7/2015 5:09:00 PM

I'm actually continuing to lose weight with stress in my life Frederic so I do not have this issue myself:-( hugs Jan xx