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The Depth and Breadth of Quiet

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I told no one I'd seen the night— how tension breached a sunset start, how sea had swallowed all the light. I told no one the world is glass—a whale is art, this frame of sky its ancient right, it plays each game the same—by heart. Still moment's pulse too wide to try resuscitation, CPR— now all that's left to gain, insight I told no one. (5)

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/27/2025 5:27:00 AM

Especially love that first verse..the breach and swallowing of light! I had the great joy of seeing a humpback whale breach! It was unexpected and I was screaming with excitement. I think that was a first time kind of heart-throbbing thrill! Congrats on POTD!

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/27/2025 12:51:00 PM

That's so interesting, Kim. Thank you for sharing that memory. This picture is about as close as I've ever come to getting near a whale though. I loved how serene and smooth it all feels and then the whale nosing in to be a part of it.

thriveni c mysore

Date: 6/24/2025 10:38:00 PM

'I told no one'- ah that is a killer line dear poet. You say the gentle blending of day into night to be a tension- amazing thought, unwavering nature from the start of time is caught as ' it plays each game the same-by heart' and you finish off with mundane pain, down to physical level where many things are better unexpressed so 'I told no one' takes us to another level. Amazing write dear poet. +FAV. Congratulations on POTD, glad I didn't miss this. Cheers!!!

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/25/2025 9:41:00 AM

I love that you saw the structure of what I was doing!! I wish a fave a comment :) You have a good eye, Thriveni. I appreciate your kindness too. But if you ever have any critical feedback about something that you think isn't working, please know I'm open to hearing that too. Have a great day :)

Paige Hind

Date: 6/24/2025 6:18:00 PM

Amazing write. Congrats to you!! A fav-

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/25/2025 9:43:00 AM

Thanks, Paige and Gershon. When I'm feeling blue I like to come back and read nice comments to pull me out of it. I'll be revisiting these again :) I sincerely appreciate you taking the time to read my work>

Gershon Wolf
Date: 6/24/2025 6:25:00 PM

I second Paige's words. Bulls-eye, Jaymee. And congrats!

Brandy Nicole

Date: 6/24/2025 2:07:00 PM

' how sea had swallowed all the light. ' Such a deep, yet mesmerizing thought. A great metaphor. When emotions emerge and moments become overwhelming, it can certainly feel like darkness is surrounding us. Congratulations Jaymee, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. Hugs, Brandy

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/25/2025 5:35:00 PM

Thanks for such a close read, Brandy. I started out with the whale swallowing the light but then the whale wanted to be in the second stanza instead. I'm happy with how it turned out and I'm so pleased you liked it.

Abdullah Alhemaidy

Date: 6/24/2025 1:34:00 PM

Hi poetess Jaymee Thomas :-) Nice read! favorite line: now all that's left to gain, insight. Congratulations on your well POTD, have a nice day!

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/25/2025 5:43:00 PM

Thanks, Abdullah. That's my favorite line too. I was going for a double meaning of insight and all that's within one's sight during a picturesque scene. Thanks again for taking the time to read my work.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 6/24/2025 12:27:00 PM

Congratulations on your POTD win. What a creative/wonderful write. Love the ending, yes ~ "I told no one." Have a blessed day with your wonderful win..................

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/25/2025 5:47:00 PM

Thanks so much, Paula. I hope you are doing well. I liked the idea of the speaker having experienced something profound but still unable to share the enlightenment. The tension between experiencing the ineffable and being unable or unwilling to tell others intrigued me. Thanks for the taking the time to read my piece and comment.

John Lawless

Date: 6/24/2025 12:13:00 PM

This Depth and Breadth of Quiet speaks very loudly in the silence of the moment. Nicely done Jaymee...a slow down...back up...savor each aspect of this...quiet.

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/25/2025 5:38:00 PM

Thanks, John. Your description mimics the writing of it too. It started as a whale swallowing the sun at sunrise but then I had to consider whether this was a daybreak or day's end scene. I like the way it ended up and enjoyed the process of a new form. I appreciate you taking the time to comment.

Jim Slaughter

Date: 6/24/2025 10:25:00 AM

...a whale is art...Love it, Jaymee. Congrats on POTD, as well.

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/25/2025 5:40:00 PM

Thanks, Jim. That whale took a few turns in each stanza during its creation. I appreciate that you took the time to read my work and comment. Have a great day.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 6/24/2025 9:04:00 AM

- Congratulations on your p.o.t.d., Jaymee ... enjoy :) - hugs

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/24/2025 10:23:00 AM

Thanks, Anne-Lise. I'm not too proud to admit that it feels nice. I appreciate you taking the time to comment.

I Am Anaya

Date: 6/24/2025 8:09:00 AM

I told no one is a suspenseful delight A desperate search for the truth perhaps Best roundel yet (They are addictive)There's sorrow here Favorite line is "the world is glass—a whale is art this frame of sky its ancient right" Unique is your game Congratulations on poem of day Jaymee ~ I see you've entered few of these prompts Bol to you~

I Am Anaya
Date: 6/26/2025 11:29:00 AM

I saw them in concert, does that count?

Keith D Trestrail
Date: 6/25/2025 12:03:00 AM

Any relation to Will.I.am?

I Am Anaya
Date: 6/24/2025 2:27:00 PM

simply...like Papaya! Nice variation of Jaime, Jaimee, Jaimie, Jayme, ta ra Jaymee

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/24/2025 10:27:00 AM

Oh my word, this whole time I've registered your name as Anya in my head. I am so sorry. How do you pronounce I Am Anaya?

I Am Anaya
Date: 6/24/2025 10:23:00 AM

I Am Anaya (ha ha) xo

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/24/2025 10:18:00 AM

Thanks, Anya. It's good to see you--it's been a while. I openly receive that energy of 'unique' being my game--I strive for it if I'm being completely honest. I think we all do in some way. Thanks again for reading my work.

Anne Winter

Date: 6/24/2025 7:23:00 AM

Dear Jaymee, Congratulations on POTD! Enjoy your special day :)

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/24/2025 10:15:00 AM

Thanks, Anne. It's a new form to me and I kind of loved the tricky little syllable allotment of it.

Tom Woody

Date: 6/24/2025 6:22:00 AM

Hey look who's getting featured for a day! Nice. It's about time your unique voice gets exposed to a larger audience. Enjoy

Tom Woody
Date: 6/24/2025 10:34:00 AM

I saw it! Very cute-ish

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/24/2025 10:14:00 AM

Jeez I feel like I've talked to you more this week (via comments) than my best friend lol. Which is to say, thanks again for your honesty about my work (I wrote a "bears are nice to each other" roundel after you comment-shamed me lol) and thank you for the way you encourage other poets so regularly. Hope you have a great week.

Beryl Edmonds

Date: 6/24/2025 12:42:00 AM

Congratulations Jaymee on receiving the honour of poem of the day. A remarkable write it is, enjoy the accolade…Beryl

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/24/2025 10:09:00 AM

Thanks, Beryl. It does feel like an honor, and I have a lot of gratitude about it. I appreciate you taking the time to read my work and comment.

Karen Jones

Date: 6/24/2025 12:34:00 AM

Congratulations on your potd! Enjoy your day in the sun!

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/24/2025 10:05:00 AM

Thanks, Karen. What a wonderful surprise this was today. I'm not sure it was my best one, but I won't argue with the algorithm that picks them xD

Saivi Kurian

Date: 6/22/2025 7:48:00 PM

Hello Jaymee, Your poem is a quiet marvel. its imagery is vivid and dreamlike, and the refrain "I told no one" lingers like a secret too heavy to speak. There's a gentle depth to its sorrow and awe that makes it truly memorable :)

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/24/2025 10:03:00 AM

Thanks, Saivi. I appreciate you taking the time to comment and read my work.

Hiba Junaid

Date: 6/22/2025 2:30:00 PM

This poem is unique, beautiful and fascinating. It reads like a memory - hazy at the edges, but dreamy and soothing, almost, but not quite. It's a hard balance to master, but you have achieved it here. A very good read. Faved. Be Blessed always, Hiba :)

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/22/2025 2:42:00 PM

Wow, Hiba. I just went to your page, and I was blown away. You're very talented and now I feel even more flattered by your comment. Thank you so much for taking the time read my work and comment.