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The Dance Repost

The leaves are dancing Like a thousand butterflies The wind is master Seems so long ago that I wrote this...I was so excited back then to think I could write a haiku..I have learned a lot since, this is not a very good one....lol

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Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 3/8/2015 10:07:00 PM

I really like this a lot Barbara. Don't sell it short. I know we are our harshest critics.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/8/2015 12:44:00 PM

nice ..pd

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/7/2015 8:27:00 PM

WHAT?? you think this is not good haiku? Gosh, I love this one and I am pretty critical on haiku written poorly. It may not be perfect but I just love the sound of it!!! So cool, Barbara. I will have to revisit the contest to see how you placed. My silly entry got third. Congrats.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/7/2015 8:27:00 PM

and I am glad to know you enjoy short poems more like I do too!

Skat A

Date: 3/5/2015 10:20:00 PM

Barbara, CONGRATULATIONS, on your Beginnings Matter Win ~SKAT~

Daver Austin

Date: 3/5/2015 8:58:00 AM

Yes, and in perfect 575. Love the thousand butterflies as leaves. In the summer I often have wonderful thoughts on the leaves in the breeze. Love, daver

Mark Trichet

Date: 3/5/2015 12:46:00 AM

Excited to see everyones first poems here Barbara. This paints a perfect Haiku. Congrats

Jan Allison

Date: 3/4/2015 2:31:00 PM

dropping back with my congrats:-) Hugs jan xx

Viv Wigley

Date: 3/4/2015 1:07:00 AM

I beg to differ, Barbara. It positively flutters. Lovely haiku. Mister Viv x

Paul Callus

Date: 3/3/2015 4:03:00 PM

Do not downgrade yourself, Barbara; to me this is a lovely haiku in which the visual and movement take central stage. Well done! hugs // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 3/3/2015 1:32:00 AM

Great haiku indeed Barbara !

Joseph May

Date: 3/2/2015 6:50:00 PM

wonderful haiku ...nice imagery...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/2/2015 6:14:00 PM

Hmmm, I beg to differ with you, Barbara. This is a lot better than the average one I see here at Soup. I quite like it!

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 3/2/2015 1:37:00 PM

Dear LNC, I beg to differ. To me this is the perfect haiku! It creates a delightful image of nature that makes me smile. I don't like to study haiku. I just like to read ones that catch my attention and this is certainly one of those! Love you, Carolyn

Jan Allison

Date: 3/2/2015 1:12:00 PM

I look back on my early poems and think how they could be improved BUT writing has been a huge learning curve and I am flying high and having the time of my life writing - I think your poems is delightful! Hugs jan xx