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Gordon entered his apartment and gasped. How could he have left the place in such a disarray? He phoned Rosie the head of the handmaids. Gordon was never rude but he complained. Seemed the was a widespread fever infection. However, Rosie promised to solve her problems. Soon the bell rang and on the doorstep was the redhead! “I am not the char, but Mother Rosie wanted me to help.” Silently Gordon, cursing destiny, shrugged and led her in. It did not take long to have the apartment in proper shape. He offered her wages due to her, but she refused, Instead, she asked him to take her for a small lunch. “Give the wage to Mother, but from you, I need a favour.” She told him that her name was Emily, and needed him. Next Saturday was her sister’s wedding and she was alone. She was the bridesmaid and had no one to partner her. He was a perfect fit. Was this a curse or fate, wondered Gordon. He could hardly refuse and exchanged mobile phone numbers. The wedding reception was a great success. Emily’s designs Were fabulous. The food was tasty. The guests were happy. The bride and groom opened the dance and like a gentleman, Gordon took Emily in his arms to dance and shuddered. She had the same perfume Sophie used, a clean, fresh vibe, A Chloé Eau de Parfum, neither cheap nor costly. The soft singer sang: “The Last Waltz should last forever.” We danced cheek to cheek, my heart fluttering in love. And without hesitation, I blurted: Prepare your bride’s dress. And kissed her full on her sweet, soft lips. Fate? When fate summons, monarchs must obey, says an old proverb.

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Date: 2/9/2024 5:58:00 AM
Ooh La La, the romantic brush of the lips, the quick step to the altar! Hugs :)
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Date: 2/7/2024 3:17:00 AM
Well, I was right; I somehow knew he would end up with the redhead. It was all in the cards. Thanks for a great story, dear Victor; as always beautifully written, and your attention to detail is superb...Hugs
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Date: 2/6/2024 10:13:00 PM
i love that monarks must obey, this is a touching and intelligent "story", great finishing, bravo poet
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Date: 2/6/2024 9:59:00 PM
Great finish to your tale of destiny, Victor. It's believable to a man that was married, 6 months after meeting his soulmate, (Sara). Asked her to marry me within 2 months of meeting her. 41 years ago. I love a romance poem that ends well. Thanks for sharing yours with us, my friend. Bill
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Date: 2/6/2024 8:41:00 PM
So, he got not only a maid to put back his home in order from disarray, but a bride to keep his home and heart in order.... ! Wonderful imagination..... which hasn't aged at all.
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Date: 2/6/2024 8:40:00 PM
A magical conclusion to an awesome story! I love the way fate arranged for him to meet one who was so like his deceased wife. :)
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Date: 2/6/2024 6:31:00 PM
You have such a creative mind Victor, your ageless, when it comes to poetry. xo
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Date: 2/6/2024 5:56:00 PM
A lovely ending to the story of ‘The Cursed Lake’ Victor, a most enjoyable read. Beryl
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Date: 2/6/2024 5:17:00 PM
a compelling and romantic ending to your story. I'm impressed with your storytelling skills, Victor. Well done, sir...have a great evening, Sara
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Date: 2/6/2024 1:46:00 PM
Ahhh!!! Romantic ending to your other half. Nice to not be left hanging. Thanks for sharing it with us and for dropping by my page. Sara K
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Date: 2/6/2024 12:42:00 PM
Quite a story, Victor and very well told! Love the phrase "prepare your bride's dress." Such an original marriage proposal! Thank you for the expression of such a wide variety of emotions. Blessings!
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Date: 2/6/2024 12:40:00 PM
You really are excellent storyteller dear victor! Brilliant flow to your narrative and glad cursed lake had a second part, and is a bit different from what occurred in first part. As the first left me sad. And second part has so much depth too! Perfect ending! I loved the minor details youv included to giv a more vivid picture of what youv delivered. Especially your mention oh chloe perfume: i used to love chloe. Pleasure reading your work as always: sending you light
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Date: 2/6/2024 11:11:00 AM
Its hard to escape destiny, Glad this had a happy ending, Very nicely penned
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Date: 2/6/2024 10:29:00 AM
I applaud your compulsion to finish a mystery. It was a happy story, or maybe so far.
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Date: 2/6/2024 10:27:00 AM
Your poetic creation, Victor, is truly magnificent. It possesses a captivating allure and exhibits exquisite craftsmanship. The narrative unfolding within it is particularly intriguing, with a compelling twist at the conclusion. It is a poignant tale of love that leaves a lasting impression.
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Date: 2/6/2024 6:26:00 AM
A perfect romantic story for Valentines Day! Enjoyed
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Date: 2/6/2024 6:15:00 AM
What an intriguing story, Victor! I like the turn towards the ending. Sweet story of love.
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Date: 2/6/2024 5:07:00 AM
I read both Victor. Sweet and sad, then sweet again. You should write stories more often. Have a great week
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Date: 2/6/2024 3:53:00 AM
- A sweet ending to your poem, Victor - Maybe the church bells we ring for this new couple in the future... who knows... (only fate can answer:) - A lovely poem, Victor :) - hugs
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Date: 2/6/2024 3:48:00 AM
Woah, what a breathtaking conclusion for your 'cursed lake' poetic saga.. So, eventually destiny chased him and made him stand before his mysterious fate, which unfurled as a beautiful truth for his life.. The involvement of different characters and your storytelling skills are absolutely phenomenal! Also, the wordplay here is captivating, creating a mellifluous flow throughout.. As always, pleasure reading your wonderful poem, dear Victor. Sending you many best wishes and light, a FAV this is!
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