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The Crash After Sugar - a Small Analysis of Sadness

I have no metaphoric explanation for how I feel If I try to summon something to mind, I find an empty paper bag that held sweets, with bits of sugar at the corners Slightly crinkled, the sugar remnants bothersome It seems to be from 1985 but I don't know why I can only perhaps my way forward Or perhaps my way backwards - but I'm tired of that It's all guesswork on faded memories anyhow Looking for the call and response in a non existent feeling Emptiness, with sugar remnants Some residual sugar on an otherwise empty paper bag It should be disposed of, not analysed Kept in mind 38 years, for recall Just in case Like all things you would have thrown away then, that take on a mystical quality when rediscovered The ordinary, made powerful, by the passage of time I can almost feel the paper in my hand Note the difference from when neatly folded, full of sweets to now The scientifically explainable reaction to sugar clear Yet the inexplicable emotional space I inhabit in this moment out of my grasp What a strange pursuit, to occupy my time Looking for the answers in passing thoughts and paper bags I really should get a hobby

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Valsa George

Date: 4/18/2023 2:09:00 AM

Each time, I feel you are plagued by some doubt before posting a poem. People who are the genius type are susceptible to such feelings. I can avow, you are a first rate poet of the stream of consciousness genre of writing. I concur with what Paul and Wendy have expressed below.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/18/2023 4:15:00 AM

Page 2 haha! Thank you so much for your kind words and assessments. I'm recognising more and more why I have the thought processes I do and they are linked to specific experiences, mostly a very long time ago. I don't think I am a genius but I do have thoughts processes that differ from others and sometimes very emotion and empathy driven, as well as extreme introspection (!) :)

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/18/2023 4:11:00 AM

Some strong statements in there Valsa - I was going to refute outright your genius type statement, so googled it. Taken in its more simple form and not that I'll crack codes etc. there may be something in that. I might look into it. I used to feel criticised when anyone said something I'd done was 'stream of consciousness' but I'm a bit easier with it now as I see how therapeutic it can be.

Paul Willason

Date: 4/17/2023 11:34:00 PM

Don't succumb to the demons of doubt, jump in and ride your words wherever they take you and in this case somewhere totally engaging and alive. You are the only one there on the inside of yourself so you conduct the journey. Take care and dive into your next poem...

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/18/2023 4:17:00 AM

Thank you Paul, I sometimes imagine striking up these conversations (i.e. poems) just normally and observing the look of terror on the recipients face! However, I can take liberties with poetry and who knows, maybe that's where these thoughts were meant to be. Thanks for your kind words

Speaks Volumes

Date: 4/17/2023 12:33:00 PM

An interesting piece DD. I always get elation after eating sugar. Its a euphoric feeling. I am guessing you mean the crash after the high? You are a brilliant poet. Only YOU can tell the world how you feel. It is because you are coming down and have lost the satisfaction the sugar gave you or is it because you want more like a craving?

Di11y Da11y
Date: 4/17/2023 12:39:00 PM

Who knows, maybe I can track down a 10p 1985 mix up and relive it? Haha thanks for your support Wen