John Gondolf Poet Pantoum

The Chance Meeting

As searching eyes met from across the room
while mingling at the spring celebration;
her soft, tender smile caused my heart to zoom;
her body language was pure flirtation.

While mingling at the spring celebration
I slowly made my way across the floor;
her body language was pure flirtation;
her sparkling green eyes I could not ignore.

I slowly made my way across the floor;
she coyly told me Debbie was her name.
her sparkling green eyes I could not ignore;
in my dazed soul she ignited a flame.

She coyly told me Debbie was her name; 
her soft, tender smile caused my heart to zoom.
In my dazed soul she ignited a flame
as searching eyes met from across the room.

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Rhoda Tripp November 29, 2017 at 10:14 PM This looks like a difficult form to make come together. You, however, make it look simple. Great write! John Gondolf November 30, 2017 at 4:50 AM Rhoda, thanks for your comments. Writing this form is a bit like piecing together a jigsaw puzzle...sometimes the pieces fit and sometimes they don’t.

Andrea Dietrich November 25, 2017 at 7:40 PM Back with my congrats on this awesome pantoum. John Gondolf November 27, 2017 at 8:20 PM Thank you, Andrea, your comments are appreciated.

Constance La France October 30, 2017 at 9:45 AM John, congratulations on your win in my contest with this lovely, love poem. Well done ! John Gondolf October 30, 2017 at 11:43 AM Constance, thank you for my placement. John

Alexis Y. October 29, 2017 at 9:19 AM Hi John, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your placement in the contest:-) Alexis John Gondolf October 29, 2017 at 9:24 AM Thank you my friend :)

Cheryl Hoffman October 28, 2017 at 6:45 PM This nostalgic write reminds me of that song "I only Have Eyes For You" sung by Art Garfunkel; a wonderful write for the contest John; good luck in it!~Che :) John Gondolf October 28, 2017 at 7:27 PM Thank you, Cheryl. Yes that was a great song; actually Garfunkel’s recording was a cover. It was originally recorded in the 50’s by the Flamingos (probably before your time).

Becca Teagan October 27, 2017 at 4:36 PM Nice! Perfect for the contest, a memory worth writing about. The Pantoum form is really nice, with the repeating lines. well done! John Gondolf October 27, 2017 at 4:45 PM Thank you for your kind compliments, Becca, I'm glad you enjoyed it; and thank you for visiting me this afternoon. John

Connie Marcum Wong October 27, 2017 at 1:17 PM A really lovely Pantoum John. This form is not an easy one to write, but you have it mastered beautifully! : ) John Gondolf October 27, 2017 at 1:25 PM Thank you, Connie, I appreciate your words of encouragement. John

Richard Lamoureux October 25, 2017 at 1:03 PM A sweet innocent piece. John Gondolf October 25, 2017 at 1:31 PM Thanks for your kind words, Richard, and thanks for the visit.

Susan Ashley October 24, 2017 at 9:03 PM Oh such beautiful and romantic reverie in your lovely pantoum John. Your passionate poem brought a smile to my face. Enjoyed! Good luck in the contest!! John Gondolf October 25, 2017 at 6:09 AM Susan, thank you for your kind comments, I'm glad you enjoyed! John

Andrea Dietrich October 24, 2017 at 6:00 PM Wow, John. You could be describing the way I met my husband. I was a green eyed woman staring at him as he danced with another girl. We were both 19 and married a year later, and that other girl was out of the picture once I egged Joe on with my long gaze!!! John Gondolf October 24, 2017 at 8:08 PM Awe, I’m such a sucker for a romantic story. I had no idea my poem was discribing you and Joe :-) Debbie was actually my barber, she cut my hair for 5 years before we started dating.

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty October 24, 2017 at 11:00 AM Enjoyed your poem, John.Regards. John Gondolf October 24, 2017 at 11:23 AM Thank you, Rajat, glad you enjoyed it.

Alexis Y. October 24, 2017 at 10:34 AM Hi John, I really enjoyed your romantic and well written Pantoum. You caused the reader to experience meeting someone for the first time all over again. Thanks for sharing such a beautiful memory. I wish you the best of luck in the contest in the contest:-) Alexis John Gondolf October 24, 2017 at 11:22 AM Hi Alexis, glad you enjoyed this one as well. Actually this is not how Debbie and I actually met...she was my barber...not nearly as romantic as my poem :) John