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The Cartridge

A horde of mordacious words the old man fired at her as if he were a wizened wizard trying to elicit from her some shocked indignation. Already shackled (of her free own will) to self-discipline, she replied: You are like a gun which has aimed itself at me. Don’t loiter near me even a trifle bit longer, for you are shooting blanks, and the cartridge I hold is wisdom’s truth. Written April 5, 2017 for John Hamilton's Eight-Word Poetry Challenge Words required: 1. CARTRIDGE 2. ELICIT 3. MORDACIOUS 4. HORDE 5. SHACKLED 6. TRIFLE 7. WIZENED 8. LOITER

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Date: 4/10/2017 6:26:00 PM
I like the way you wrote :)
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Date: 4/9/2017 1:37:00 PM
Nice use of the words, thanks for a great entry, nice win!
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Date: 4/9/2017 2:24:00 AM
Very clever write, Andrea! I liked the shackled / free will line, especially. Well done and congratulations on your win!
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Date: 4/8/2017 7:33:00 PM
Congrats on your win Andrea
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Date: 4/8/2017 7:01:00 PM
Even I can see the challenge this contest presented yet your talent and beautiful poetic mind have wondrously crafted a seamless piece with a tale that is fascinating. The last line is awesome. Amazing writing Andrea :-) it is a great pleasure to read. lynnxxx
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Date: 4/6/2017 4:19:00 AM
You are certainly not shooting blanks Andrea. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 4/6/2017 2:15:00 AM
This is surely a winner. Cleverly done, great ending. I've been pondering over these words for the contest but it's too difficult for me .....you've made it look easy Andrea. :)
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Date: 4/5/2017 10:58:00 PM
Brilliantly done. This flows effortlessly and I must say that your clever final shot didn't miss its mark :) Amitiés
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Date: 4/5/2017 9:11:00 PM
When I read the title, I was worry my printer ran out of ink! Liked what you did with this! Your ink is just fine!!!
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Date: 4/5/2017 8:42:00 PM
...and as my mother always told me "The truth only hurts when it's supposed to."
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Date: 4/5/2017 8:16:00 PM
andrea - you've done a fantastic job with these words. brilliant!
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Date: 4/5/2017 8:00:00 PM
Loved the metaphor in this Andrea. A difficult challenge you handled with ease.
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Date: 4/5/2017 7:38:00 PM
A wonderfully poem Andrea. Awesome job using those 8 words ! Any cartridge YOU have would be the cartridge of wisdom !
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