Andrea Dietrich Poet Free verse

The Cartridge

A horde of mordacious words the old man fired at her
as if he were a wizened wizard
trying to elicit from her some shocked indignation.

Already shackled (of her free own will) to self-discipline, she replied:
You are like a gun which has aimed itself at me.
Don’t loiter near me even a trifle bit longer,
for you are shooting blanks,
and the cartridge I hold is wisdom’s truth.


Written April 5, 2017 for John Hamilton's Eight-Word Poetry Challenge
Words required:
1. CARTRIDGE 2. ELICIT 3. MORDACIOUS 4. HORDE 5. SHACKLED 6. TRIFLE  7.  WIZENED 8. LOITER

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Debbie Duncan April 10, 2017 at 6:26 PM I like the way you wrote :)

John Hamilton April 9, 2017 at 1:37 PM Nice use of the words, thanks for a great entry, nice win!

John Michaels April 9, 2017 at 2:24 AM Very clever write, Andrea! I liked the shackled / free will line, especially. Well done and congratulations on your win!

Joseph May April 8, 2017 at 7:33 PM Congrats on your win Andrea

Lynn Marie April 8, 2017 at 7:01 PM Even I can see the challenge this contest presented yet your talent and beautiful poetic mind have wondrously crafted a seamless piece with a tale that is fascinating. The last line is awesome. Amazing writing Andrea :-) it is a great pleasure to read. lynnxxx

Jean Murray April 6, 2017 at 4:19 AM You are certainly not shooting blanks Andrea. Good luck in the contest.

Elizabeth Kinch April 6, 2017 at 2:15 AM This is surely a winner. Cleverly done, great ending. I've been pondering over these words for the contest but it's too difficult for me .....you've made it look easy Andrea. :)

Anne-Marie Coreggia April 5, 2017 at 10:58 PM Brilliantly done. This flows effortlessly and I must say that your clever final shot didn't miss its mark :) Amitiés

Arthur Vaso April 5, 2017 at 9:11 PM When I read the title, I was worry my printer ran out of ink! Liked what you did with this! Your ink is just fine!!!

John Lawless April 5, 2017 at 8:42 PM ...and as my mother always told me "The truth only hurts when it's supposed to."

Ilene Bauer April 5, 2017 at 8:16 PM andrea - you've done a fantastic job with these words. brilliant!

Tim Smith April 5, 2017 at 8:00 PM Loved the metaphor in this Andrea. A difficult challenge you handled with ease.

Bruce Adams April 5, 2017 at 7:38 PM A wonderfully poem Andrea. Awesome job using those 8 words ! Any cartridge YOU have would be the cartridge of wisdom !