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The Bubble Burster

In my days of innocence, a man- more a fantasy of flesh and blood- came unexpectedly along and stepped inside my little bubble. At last we had our moment. His mouth on mine, pillow soft, moved strangely out of synche with my own lips, and this was the pin that burst my bubble. for PD's Contest: free verse poem. (15 max lines)

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Robin Davis

Date: 3/29/2014 9:08:00 AM

Andrea Such a passionate, romantic, innocent, and lovely write. The "innocence" of that kiss can do all kinds of things to someone. Thanks for the great comment on my Yellow Treat poem. No I didn't enter the Yellow contest. I didn't have a poem for that one at the time. Hugs

Red Omara

Date: 5/11/2013 10:37:00 PM

Beautifully cute and delicately suggestive. Nice poem. - Red

Debbie Duncan

Date: 3/29/2013 11:49:00 AM

very nice write, and you won with it. That says it all ;} thanks for reading Rabbit Hole, the guy "Mark" did about 30 challenges. So I'll post the others sooner or later ;}

Jack Jordan

Date: 3/21/2013 10:11:00 PM

An out-of-sync-kiss will do it every time. Congratulations on your win! Jack

Cecilia Macfarlane

Date: 3/21/2013 2:13:00 PM

Creative write Andrea....love the analogy between our hopes being a bubble. Many bubbles pop before we find the one that won't. Awesome title as well. Congrats on your big win! Hugs

Richard D Seal

Date: 3/21/2013 6:27:00 AM

So many things can burst that bubble but the kiss is a clincher. Congratulations on your win. Take care, Regards Richard

Donna Jones

Date: 3/20/2013 7:42:00 AM

Congratulations Andrea on your most deserved win....Donna

Ray Dillard

Date: 3/19/2013 7:33:00 PM

Thanks for the tender moment. Loved it! RAY

Len Gasun

Date: 3/19/2013 6:58:00 PM

My hearty congratulations on your win my dear friend Andrea! Cheers! Thank you also for sharing this gem of yours! love and big hugs, Leonora

Bukang Liwayway

Date: 3/19/2013 9:15:00 AM

hmmm a romantic kiss...very creative!! super congratulations my friend Andrea on your grand win!! you deserved it..big hug from me, Maria :)

Anne Rutherford

Date: 3/19/2013 8:31:00 AM

Congratulations on your win Andrea . That first kiss is dud or wonderful. xxAnne

Ilene Bauer

Date: 3/19/2013 8:28:00 AM

wonderful! such an offbeat and creative use of "busting one's bubble" - love it!

Painted Hunter

Date: 3/19/2013 6:57:00 AM

Nevermind the limerick comment. I got my poems mixed up.

Painted Hunter

Date: 3/19/2013 5:57:00 AM

POP! Great win Andrea! I don't even remember entering this one...but I guess I put a limerick in...hmmmm

Carol Eastman

Date: 3/18/2013 9:39:00 PM

An interesting write. Congratulations on your win.

Hidden Sister

Date: 3/18/2013 8:50:00 PM

Congrats on your poem and first place

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/18/2013 6:40:00 PM

Hello Andrea, another nice winning poem... congrats~ PD

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 10/21/2011 8:14:00 AM

,Good morning,~ Andrea ~ how are you this wonderful Friday :-) morning... As for me, I'm missing everyone I know here on the soup PLUS more..((glad they are back)).Stopping by to read a couple of poems, after being shut out for them awful few days..ENJOYED YOUR POEM, thank you for sharing! Take care and have yourself a wonderful Friday~ ;-) Always,..p.d.

Cyndi Macmillan

Date: 9/10/2011 7:21:00 AM

I love this. In the first stanza, it would seem the man would break the bond, then in the second stanza you reveal it was not entirely his doing, a mismatched union. This resonates with truth, that even when it is no ones fault, sometimes love just isn't enough, that square and round don't fit. Esquire below me made me nod my head. I love reading the comment made to me (I thought) posted as the exact same reply to 12 other poets. Oops, who said that? Still, soup rocks ... as does your poem

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 9/10/2011 1:15:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your amazing poetry today andrea and wish you the best in the contest. Love, SIKE... I actually read this poem ...and I don't copy and paste comments Hee Hee....I hope you get the joke within this comment. You are pretty clever...so I am sure you will.

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 9/9/2011 2:30:00 PM

A witty write on this one. love phyl

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 9/9/2011 10:33:00 AM

funny write...enjoyed reading!! TGIF

Jack Horne

Date: 9/9/2011 10:17:00 AM

LOL, witty nostalgic write

Robert Johnson

Date: 9/8/2011 6:48:00 PM

Look, but don't touch in reality. But in our dreams there's much to see. The bubble pops when alas, we kiss. It's a shame, the romance that we have to miss.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 9/8/2011 4:34:00 PM

honesty in this piece of a burst bubble when our dreams and expectations of being with someone turn out sour.. hate that luv.. but made for great words for contest.. Debbie should luv it..good luck Andrea...