The Bubble Burster

In my days of innocence, a man- more a fantasy of flesh and blood- came unexpectedly along and stepped inside my little bubble. At last we had our moment. His mouth on mine, pillow soft, moved strangely out of synche with my own lips, and this was the pin that burst my bubble. for PD's Contest: free verse poem. (15 max lines)
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Davis Avatar
March 29, 2014 at 9:08 AM
Andrea Such a passionate, romantic, innocent, and lovely write. The "innocence" of that kiss can do all kinds of things to someone. Thanks for the great comment on my Yellow Treat poem. No I didn't enter the Yellow contest. I didn't have a poem for that one at the time. Hugs
Omara Avatar
May 11, 2013 at 10:37 PM
Beautifully cute and delicately suggestive. Nice poem. - Red
Duncan Avatar
March 29, 2013 at 11:49 AM
very nice write, and you won with it. That says it all ;} thanks for reading Rabbit Hole, the guy "Mark" did about 30 challenges. So I'll post the others sooner or later ;}
Jordan Avatar
March 21, 2013 at 10:11 PM
An out-of-sync-kiss will do it every time. Congratulations on your win! Jack
Macfarlane Avatar
March 21, 2013 at 2:13 PM
Creative write Andrea....love the analogy between our hopes being a bubble. Many bubbles pop before we find the one that won't. Awesome title as well. Congrats on your big win! Hugs
Seal Avatar
March 21, 2013 at 6:27 AM
So many things can burst that bubble but the kiss is a clincher. Congratulations on your win. Take care, Regards Richard
Jones Avatar
March 20, 2013 at 7:42 AM
Congratulations Andrea on your most deserved win....Donna
Dillard Avatar
March 19, 2013 at 7:33 PM
Thanks for the tender moment. Loved it! RAY
Gasun Avatar
March 19, 2013 at 6:58 PM
My hearty congratulations on your win my dear friend Andrea! Cheers! Thank you also for sharing this gem of yours! love and big hugs, Leonora
Liwayway Avatar
March 19, 2013 at 9:15 AM
hmmm a romantic kiss...very creative!! super congratulations my friend Andrea on your grand win!! you deserved it..big hug from me, Maria :)
Rutherford Avatar
March 19, 2013 at 8:31 AM
Congratulations on your win Andrea . That first kiss is dud or wonderful. xxAnne
Bauer Avatar
March 19, 2013 at 8:28 AM
wonderful! such an offbeat and creative use of "busting one's bubble" - love it!
Hunter Avatar
March 19, 2013 at 6:57 AM
Nevermind the limerick comment. I got my poems mixed up.
Hunter Avatar
March 19, 2013 at 5:57 AM
POP! Great win Andrea! I don't even remember entering this one...but I guess I put a limerick in...hmmmm
Eastman Avatar
March 18, 2013 at 9:39 PM
An interesting write. Congratulations on your win.
Sister Avatar
March 18, 2013 at 8:50 PM
Congrats on your poem and first place
A   Avatar
March 18, 2013 at 6:40 PM
Hello Andrea, another nice winning poem... congrats~ PD
A   Avatar
October 21, 2011 at 8:14 AM
,Good morning,~ Andrea ~ how are you this wonderful Friday :-) morning... As for me, I'm missing everyone I know here on the soup PLUS more..((glad they are back)).Stopping by to read a couple of poems, after being shut out for them awful few days..ENJOYED YOUR POEM, thank you for sharing! Take care and have yourself a wonderful Friday~ ;-) Always,..p.d.
Macmillan Avatar
September 10, 2011 at 7:21 AM
I love this. In the first stanza, it would seem the man would break the bond, then in the second stanza you reveal it was not entirely his doing, a mismatched union. This resonates with truth, that even when it is no ones fault, sometimes love just isn't enough, that square and round don't fit. Esquire below me made me nod my head. I love reading the comment made to me (I thought) posted as the exact same reply to 12 other poets. Oops, who said that? Still, soup rocks ... as does your poem
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September 10, 2011 at 1:15 AM
I enjoyed reading your amazing poetry today andrea and wish you the best in the contest. Love, SIKE... I actually read this poem ...and I don't copy and paste comments Hee Hee....I hope you get the joke within this comment. You are pretty clever...so I am sure you will.
Babcock Avatar
September 9, 2011 at 2:30 PM
A witty write on this one. love phyl
Culverhouse Avatar
September 9, 2011 at 10:33 AM
funny write...enjoyed reading!! TGIF
Horne Avatar
September 9, 2011 at 10:17 AM
LOL, witty nostalgic write
Johnson Avatar
September 8, 2011 at 6:48 PM
Look, but don't touch in reality. But in our dreams there's much to see. The bubble pops when alas, we kiss. It's a shame, the romance that we have to miss.
Sweetheart Avatar
September 8, 2011 at 4:34 PM
honesty in this piece of a burst bubble when our dreams and expectations of being with someone turn out sour.. hate that luv.. but made for great words for contest.. Debbie should luv it..good luck Andrea...
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