Get Your Premium Membership

tentative steps into the known

an inexplicable lure of cold drawn into treacherous footing a spark of recognition on that sharp inhalation of ice-ridden air the womb forgotten though it enabled recovery for this readiness it begins on first breath so frightening until exhalation then warmth mingles with the universe creating awareness of presence eyes open viewing frozen crystals on spiderwebs shimmering paths careful step after careful step forever conscious ~ our feet may fail us stark barren trees tell a tale momentarily stopping us in our tracks as life is framed in the in-between spaces of twilight lit branches a structure towering above anchored by it's whole self reflected beneath ponds are sealed shut from prying eyes have faith, life goes on out of sight our palms may reveal a window when we lay belly down maybe catch a snowflake an indecipherable message react on instinct as it teases the back of your mind take your body heat insulate it explore reminiscence/preparation both/none ~ maybe stepping outside eyes half closed perhaps to break the dream always to break the dream chances come and go heat sources matter don't stray far though each winter etches on the soul

Copyright © | Year Posted 2023




Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 11/29/2023 2:38:00 PM
A beautiful Winter Sonata D. Your words are a testament to the glory of the season. SV
Login to Reply
Da11y Avatar
Di11y Da11y
Date: 11/29/2023 2:44:00 PM
Thank you SV - it was a challenge writing something for this one. I enjoyed it though x
Date: 11/29/2023 12:05:00 PM
This was do very interesting. I felt a happiness of winter. As well as foreboding. Enjoyable.
Login to Reply
Da11y Avatar
Di11y Da11y
Date: 11/29/2023 2:44:00 PM
There's definitely a bit of both in there, thank you for your comment x
Date: 11/29/2023 4:01:00 AM
Where did this one come from.....brilliant !. Could spend an evening exploring the content and even then there are so many side exits thst delight the mind. This is a poem you just dive into and take in....well done DD
Login to Reply
Da11y Avatar
Di11y Da11y
Date: 11/29/2023 2:50:00 PM
Hurray! Thank you Paul - I did hold onto to this for a whole 4 days before posting it to let it settle a bit. I appreciate you enthusiastic comment, thank you
Date: 11/28/2023 7:12:00 PM
Well worth the wait on this one, the reader can own these thoughts! Multiple reads to savor...
Login to Reply
Da11y Avatar
Di11y Da11y
Date: 11/29/2023 2:51:00 PM
Many thanks Craig :)
Date: 11/28/2023 3:26:00 PM
those 'in between spaces' were great words for the unknown. I especially liked these lines: eyes open viewing frozen crystals on spiderwebs shimmering paths careful step after careful step reminds me of how timidly I can sometimes venturing into the unknown. Well said, Di11y! have a great evening, Sara
Login to Reply
Da11y Avatar
Di11y Da11y
Date: 11/29/2023 2:52:00 PM
There were many beautiful ones today on the walk to school - they really are stunning. Thank you for your kind words x
Date: 11/28/2023 1:14:00 PM
What a creative write/story. Have a blessed day writing away.................
Login to Reply
Da11y Avatar
Di11y Da11y
Date: 11/28/2023 3:05:00 PM
Thank you Paula, appreciated
Date: 11/28/2023 12:31:00 PM
warmth mingles with the universe, in between spaces, some cracking lines among many, I like that you said known instead of unknown D
Login to Reply
Da11y Avatar
Di11y Da11y
Date: 11/28/2023 3:04:00 PM
Ahh knowing... A strange sensation that can't be explained :)

Book: Shattered Sighs