Raul Moreno Poet Choka

Tears of a Marionette

There’s three puppets here,
You and him are on the stage;
I am in the box.
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I am in the box,
Tangled up in my own strings:
Waiting for my turn.
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Waiting for my turn,
I know, I won’t have that chance:
Darn this puppeteer!
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Darn this puppeteer,
Pulling your strings far from me:
While you enjoy your show.
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While you enjoy your show,
My wooden heart snaps for you:
Splintering my soul.




“4-Minutes”
For Matt Caliri’s Write Now! Contest

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Moonbee Canady September 5, 2009 at 11:24 AM It Only Took You 4 Minutes... Gosh, Darn... I'm Afraid.. He! He! He! Very Good Poem... MoonBee

James Fraser September 1, 2009 at 10:59 AM Super poem Raul, i can picture the poor puppet in a heap, strings like spaghetti, All the very best in Matt's contest>>James

Darleen Bilyeu September 1, 2009 at 6:57 AM love it!!! great wording to, just excellent.

Doris Culverhouse September 1, 2009 at 6:35 AM Nicely written, great imagery, I hate a tangled line of string!

Carol Sunshine Brown September 1, 2009 at 5:31 AM ~~~Exceptional~~~ Thank you for sharing your poetry with us today Raul. Wishing you the best always in your writing endeavors and in the contest. Thank you for your kind comments today.Love, Carol

Yoni Dvorkis August 31, 2009 at 8:40 PM interesting use of puppet imagery. I can see you in the box tangled up in strings and the two other puppets would be the would be lover with her newfound love. Now I wonder about the puppeteer...who pulls the strings. Who calls the shots. I guess we all have varying answers to that. Very nice poem Raul. Makes me think...-Yoni

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Trudy Diane Rider August 31, 2009 at 8:13 PM This is wonderful Raul! and in 4 minutes?>? Awesome! You are truely gifted!

Abe Lopez August 31, 2009 at 7:18 PM What a creative write Raul........writing right of off the cuff without hesitation. well done my friend well done. .....or do like it medium perhaps rare :-) j/k

James Peranteau August 31, 2009 at 5:17 PM Awesome poetry My friend,.. All the best to you in your quest !!! james

August 31, 2009 at 3:58 PM Wow! You wrote this in 4 minutes. I am amazed. I really like the last stanza. Nice flow. Thank you for your kind comments. Good luck in the contest. Karen

Sara Kendrick August 31, 2009 at 2:40 PM Love the thought and imagination that went into this one. Keep writing. Sara

Charmaine Chircop August 31, 2009 at 2:24 PM i love this one of yours and its going to my favs cos its so sweet yet so sad......again sweet write--and in just four minutes--bravo--charma

Christopher Higgins August 31, 2009 at 2:15 PM Very good piece and all in four minutes...best wishes in the contest.

Savannah Rose Harper August 31, 2009 at 1:13 PM Lopez said this is gangsta GOOD WRITE!!!!