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Tears of a Marionette

There’s three puppets here, You and him are on the stage; I am in the box. · I am in the box, Tangled up in my own strings: Waiting for my turn. · Waiting for my turn, I know, I won’t have that chance: Darn this puppeteer! · Darn this puppeteer, Pulling your strings far from me: While you enjoy your show. · While you enjoy your show, My wooden heart snaps for you: Splintering my soul. “4-Minutes” For Matt Caliri’s Write Now! Contest

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Date: 9/5/2009 11:24:00 AM
It Only Took You 4 Minutes... Gosh, Darn... I'm Afraid.. He! He! He! Very Good Poem... MoonBee
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Date: 9/1/2009 10:59:00 AM
Super poem Raul, i can picture the poor puppet in a heap, strings like spaghetti, All the very best in Matt's contest>>James
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Date: 9/1/2009 6:57:00 AM
love it!!! great wording to, just excellent.
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Date: 9/1/2009 6:35:00 AM
Nicely written, great imagery, I hate a tangled line of string!
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Date: 9/1/2009 5:31:00 AM
~~~Exceptional~~~ Thank you for sharing your poetry with us today Raul. Wishing you the best always in your writing endeavors and in the contest. Thank you for your kind comments today.Love, Carol
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Date: 8/31/2009 8:40:00 PM
interesting use of puppet imagery. I can see you in the box tangled up in strings and the two other puppets would be the would be lover with her newfound love. Now I wonder about the puppeteer...who pulls the strings. Who calls the shots. I guess we all have varying answers to that. Very nice poem Raul. Makes me think...-Yoni
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Date: 8/31/2009 8:14:00 PM
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Date: 8/31/2009 8:13:00 PM
This is wonderful Raul! and in 4 minutes?>? Awesome! You are truely gifted!
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Date: 8/31/2009 7:18:00 PM
What a creative write Raul........writing right of off the cuff without hesitation. well done my friend well done. .....or do like it medium perhaps rare :-) j/k
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Date: 8/31/2009 5:17:00 PM
Awesome poetry My friend,.. All the best to you in your quest !!! james
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Date: 8/31/2009 3:58:00 PM
Wow! You wrote this in 4 minutes. I am amazed. I really like the last stanza. Nice flow. Thank you for your kind comments. Good luck in the contest. Karen
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Date: 8/31/2009 2:40:00 PM
Love the thought and imagination that went into this one. Keep writing. Sara
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Date: 8/31/2009 2:24:00 PM
i love this one of yours and its going to my favs cos its so sweet yet so sad......again sweet write--and in just four minutes--bravo--charma
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Date: 8/31/2009 2:15:00 PM
Very good piece and all in four minutes...best wishes in the contest.
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Date: 8/31/2009 1:13:00 PM
Lopez said this is gangsta GOOD WRITE!!!!
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