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Tanka Xvii

pine-coned bough bobs and bounces off tile roof makes childhood memories-- summer days with Sister bouncing on yard trampoline

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Mark Koplin

Date: 8/21/2022 5:18:00 AM

Excellent poem, I remember dragging that trampoline around the yard so I could mow under it and then watch the kids jump on it for hours.

Carol Louise Moon
Date: 8/22/2022 2:32:00 PM

Thanks for the compliment. Yes, trampolines are fun!

Bill Baker

Date: 3/15/2022 9:40:00 PM

We never know what unusual things will bring back memories of our childhood, Carol. A nice Tanka has brought back some of mine. Thanks for sharing your poetry with us, Bill

Carol Louise Moon
Date: 3/17/2022 3:26:00 AM

Thank you, Bill. So glad you like my Tanka. Carol Louise

Bj Legros Kelley

Date: 2/16/2022 11:06:00 AM

Sweet! Very sweet comparison :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/13/2022 9:04:00 PM

i like how you drew a comparison between these two things. Very nice.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 2/11/2022 10:05:00 AM

What a lovely walk back into childhood joy with your sister Carol Louise. It's funny how such simple experiences as pine boughs brushing against the roof can bring back to life such joy filled summer moments! Really enjoyed your tanka. Blessings! Glad you are back on the soup.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 2/11/2022 8:51:00 AM

Ooh…this is great! Love where your mind goes as sounds play in the playground of your mind!

Harry Horsman

Date: 1/26/2022 8:37:00 PM

Excellent, love the memories and the visual.

Carol Louise Moon
Date: 1/28/2022 7:33:00 AM

Thanks, Harry. Thanks for stopping by.