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Take Me Where?

Take me home Where the sunsets are golden And God’s gossamer curtains ripple between the mountain tops Where the seas are clear as the sky above And the waters tickle the shoreline Take me home Where the food is simple And tastes all the better Where the cabs run for cheap And smell a little funny Take me home Where childhood was magical And to this day feels like a dream Where make-believe was the truth And the future did not exist Take me home Where the nights never end And laughter is our language Where I drown in myself And moonlight shines behind my eyes Take me home… I’ve lost my way

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Adeleke Adeite

Date: 1/8/2010 9:38:00 AM

Congrats on your wonderful poem making it through the first round, keep your powerful pen writing… excellent you! Your friend in poetry Adeleke

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 1/5/2010 7:42:00 AM

Congratulations Maahood, You have made it through the first round of judging for Poetrysoup October 13, 2009 poetry contest with your nostalgic poem, "Take Me Where". Home is in your heart. I hope you have found your way. The poem is wonderful. 2009 was a successful year of poetry for you. I come, now, wishing you continued success in your writing endeavors throughout 2010 and for many years to come. God be with you. Lovingly, Dane Ann

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 12/22/2009 10:20:00 AM

Congratulations on being a first round survivor and the best to you in the finals Mahmood. I wish you the best in your writing endeavors in 2010 whatever they may be. Love, Carol

Elaine George

Date: 12/21/2009 9:40:00 PM

Very beautiful and heart-wrenching. Congratulations on making it through the first round and best wishes on advancing to the final round. Love, Lainie

P Sheart

Date: 12/21/2009 8:17:00 AM

Congrats on your poem winning the first round of PS contest!! Very well deserved, enjoyed reading your wonderful poetry. Here’s wishing you a very Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year!! May 2010 be your best year ever! Love Light Patty

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 12/20/2009 2:38:00 PM

Congratulations on moving to the next round with this great poem, Mamood! Wishing you joy and happiness in the New Year, love, Carolyn

James Fraser

Date: 12/20/2009 9:29:00 AM

Many congratulations on reaching the second round with your fine poem >> James

Janette Fisher

Date: 12/3/2009 12:05:00 PM

Many congrats on your piece being featured this week. Rgds Janette

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 12/1/2009 4:47:00 AM

Congratulations on your excellent poem being featured this week Mahmood. May you have many more. Love, Carol

James Fraser

Date: 11/30/2009 12:01:00 PM

Many congratulations on your poem being featured Mahmood >> James

John Freeman

Date: 11/30/2009 9:49:00 AM

Mahmood, Congratulations on your feature this week. Sincerely, Moses

Anthony Nutter

Date: 11/30/2009 5:50:00 AM

Excellente write. Congratulations on having your poem featured this week. A. W. www.freewebs.com/abcedit

Farah Chamma

Date: 11/28/2009 3:30:00 AM

That's one great write... well home is closer than you think it is =) Where the cabs smell funny..I'm guessing..here? Take good care Mahmood Always, Farah

Denis Joe

Date: 7/26/2009 3:16:00 PM

I like this because it has been paced out really well. The repetition of 'Take me home' is a gamble, it could have made the poem sound sickly, but I find it is intelligently used. I imagine this is a great poem to read out at an open mic. I am not sure about the last line though it seems that the reader has been taken somewhere and then is knocked down by a negative feeling. I think that the poem shines with positive feeling up until that line. I don't know. See what you think.

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 7/24/2009 5:22:00 PM

this is quite a remarkable poem. Its going to my favorites..It speaks to me in many ways. BG