Moose Bax Poet Free verse

Take Me Where?

Take me home

Where the sunsets are golden
And God’s gossamer curtains ripple between the mountain tops

Where the seas are clear as the sky above
And the waters tickle the shoreline

Take me home

Where the food is simple
And tastes all the better

Where the cabs run for cheap
And smell a little funny

Take me home

Where childhood was magical
And to this day feels like a dream

Where make-believe was the truth 
And the future did not exist


Take me home

Where the nights never end
And laughter is our language

Where I drown in myself
And moonlight shines behind my eyes

Take me home…
I’ve lost my way

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Adeleke Adeite January 8, 2010 at 9:38 AM Congrats on your wonderful poem making it through the first round, keep your powerful pen writing… excellent you! Your friend in poetry Adeleke

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen January 5, 2010 at 7:42 AM Congratulations Maahood, You have made it through the first round of judging for Poetrysoup October 13, 2009 poetry contest with your nostalgic poem, "Take Me Where". Home is in your heart. I hope you have found your way. The poem is wonderful. 2009 was a successful year of poetry for you. I come, now, wishing you continued success in your writing endeavors throughout 2010 and for many years to come. God be with you. Lovingly, Dane Ann

Carol Sunshine Brown December 22, 2009 at 10:20 AM Congratulations on being a first round survivor and the best to you in the finals Mahmood. I wish you the best in your writing endeavors in 2010 whatever they may be. Love, Carol

Elaine George December 21, 2009 at 9:40 PM Very beautiful and heart-wrenching. Congratulations on making it through the first round and best wishes on advancing to the final round. Love, Lainie

P Sheart December 21, 2009 at 8:17 AM Congrats on your poem winning the first round of PS contest!! Very well deserved, enjoyed reading your wonderful poetry. Here’s wishing you a very Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year!! May 2010 be your best year ever! Love Light Patty

Carolyn Devonshire December 20, 2009 at 2:38 PM Congratulations on moving to the next round with this great poem, Mamood! Wishing you joy and happiness in the New Year, love, Carolyn

James Fraser December 20, 2009 at 9:29 AM Many congratulations on reaching the second round with your fine poem >> James

Janette Fisher December 3, 2009 at 12:05 PM Many congrats on your piece being featured this week. Rgds Janette

Carol Sunshine Brown December 1, 2009 at 4:47 AM Congratulations on your excellent poem being featured this week Mahmood. May you have many more. Love, Carol

James Fraser November 30, 2009 at 12:01 PM Many congratulations on your poem being featured Mahmood >> James

John Freeman November 30, 2009 at 9:49 AM Mahmood, Congratulations on your feature this week. Sincerely, Moses

Anthony Nutter November 30, 2009 at 5:50 AM Excellente write. Congratulations on having your poem featured this week. A. W. www.freewebs.com/abcedit

Farah Chamma November 28, 2009 at 3:30 AM That's one great write... well home is closer than you think it is =) Where the cabs smell funny..I'm guessing..here? Take good care Mahmood Always, Farah

Denis Joe July 26, 2009 at 3:16 PM I like this because it has been paced out really well. The repetition of 'Take me home' is a gamble, it could have made the poem sound sickly, but I find it is intelligently used. I imagine this is a great poem to read out at an open mic. I am not sure about the last line though it seems that the reader has been taken somewhere and then is knocked down by a negative feeling. I think that the poem shines with positive feeling up until that line. I don't know. See what you think.

Barbara Gorelick July 24, 2009 at 5:22 PM this is quite a remarkable poem. Its going to my favorites..It speaks to me in many ways. BG