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No. 1306 Poetry Contest, Brian Strand Sponsor 5/1/2024

A little over a year ago, I tripped over a crack in the sidewalk in front of our house. The fall resulted in a badly torn rotator cuff that ended in surgery. After surgery, I was given some pretty hard-core pain medications that resulted in some bizarre, surreal dreams. This poem is a recounting of one of those dreams. I'm sure Jung would have a field day analyzing this dream.
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dozens of switches emerge from the walls like square faces, illuminating smiles with a single touch at the tip of their noses; leaves of plants like green creatures' palms, waiting to slap me, or shake hands with me; cactus-thorns waiting to pierce my fingers, and taste my red blood with their green gelatine beneath my affectionate, tender touch; the parrots peek at me through the cage's bars with their beady surveillance-camera eyes, with deafening twitters which make my heart evade out of its own ribcage, and explode my brain in thousands of echoes, reverberating through my veins; the abat-jours hide the light beneath umbrellas emerging in the darkness, like mushrooms after the rain, breaking the moss, and the moist orange foliage in a forest frightened with wind, shaking branches like skeletons unearthed from cemeteries; like the dead claiming the life: the little life that shrinks around my sparrow heart; the mythological gods with their ghostly shadows reflected in the sky-blue glass-walls, stretch to catch the sunbeams, and walk out of their pedestals; parading naked in the common—naked white silhouettes: walking beings with no being of their own, except in my mind which attributes them magic.

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Date: 4/30/2024 8:19:00 PM
Hearty Congratulations dear Sara on your well deserved trophy win. This poem is outstanding with the surreal scenario you have so beautifully and powerfully captured. "the mythological gods with their ghostly shadows reflected in the sky-blue glass-walls, stretch to catch the sunbeams, and walk out of their pedestals" Love this. So delighted to see you being placed on a pedestal with your beautiful poetry!
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Date: 4/30/2024 8:28:00 AM
Congratulations on your win! You really captured a dream. I will leave its analysis to others.
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Date: 4/29/2024 1:29:00 PM
Dear Sara, enchanting poetess, your fantastical imagery captures the surreal scenarios of pain-med induced dreams with golden poetic finesse. I especially adored "leaves of plants like green creatures' palms,/waiting to slap me, or shake hands with me" and "orange foliage/in a forest frightened with wind, shaking branches/like skeletons unearthed from cemeteries" - this whole piece vibrates with vibrant surreal splendor! Congratulations on your trophy win in Tom's contest. Warmest wishes my sweet poetry friend, your amazing talent shines like the noon-time sun.. ~Susan
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Susan Ashley
Date: 4/29/2024 5:13:00 PM
Hi Tom, thank you! I just calls ‘em like I sees ‘em :) ~Suze
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Tom Woody
Date: 4/29/2024 4:00:00 PM
You're so gracious!
Date: 4/29/2024 10:48:00 AM
I knew this would be a winner, congrats on your big win Sara, delighted for you :)
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Date: 4/28/2024 7:58:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. That's a great poem. Thanks for taking us on your trip. I like the square-faced time switches, they sound cute. It sounds like some of the plants, are friendly, but not others - and stay away from those cacti!
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/29/2024 4:26:00 AM
thanks for stopping by, David. Your comments were clever and much appreciated. I agree. Those cacti are ferocious! have a pleasant Monday, Sara
Date: 4/28/2024 1:57:00 PM
Amazing dreams... we all have crazy dreams I believe, but medicine can cause even crazier dreams. Love this. Congrats on the top win. God bless you always, love to you and thank you so for all your kindness, Gina
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/28/2024 6:20:00 PM
you're right, Gina...we all occasionally have bizarre dreams. Thanks for your congratulatory words and your blessings this evening. I appreciate you more than I have the words to say. I'm one of your biggest fans! have a fabulous evening, hugs, Sara
Date: 4/28/2024 1:09:00 PM
Some meds can play havoc with the mind and those dreams really freak you out. Congratulations to you on your trophy win Sara. Tom
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/28/2024 6:21:00 PM
thanks for stopping by, Tom. I appreciate your congratulatory words. It's my first 'trophy win,' so I'm pretty excited. Have a great evening, Sara
Date: 4/28/2024 12:49:00 PM
Hi Sarah. Congrats on your first place win. It's always so cool to see who wrote what after judging is over. I have been previously entranced by your awesome poetry but you really went all out here. And the fact that it has reality as it's surreal foundation makes it even cooler. Nice!
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/28/2024 6:22:00 PM
thanks, Tom, for sponsoring the contest and for your congratulatory words. Grateful for my 1st place win...glad you saw that 'reality' as the surreal foundation....Thank you! have a great evening, Sara
Date: 4/26/2024 7:39:00 PM
Interesting, really out there...very interesting, my mind was on a soar with this one
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/27/2024 5:30:00 AM
I agree, Paige...it was 'out there' for me too...grateful for your visit and for you going 'out there' with me :-) Enjoy your day, Sara
Date: 4/26/2024 4:23:00 PM
So struggling moments. I can put on those shoes my friend. But in the end you are giving us your story to read about, that means you are there. That how much it counts.. Love you / María
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/26/2024 4:53:00 PM
I appreciate your kind and insightful comments, dear Maria. Yes, in the end, I had this story to share plus I grew as a person during the extensive healing process. Wishing you a pleasant evening, hugs, Sara
Date: 4/26/2024 4:10:00 PM
lol, that is pretty vibrant scenes you encountered Sara, This reminds me of the time I had my daughter a c section, I saw talking celery sticks when I was waking up, lol, really enjoyed this though I'm sad to know you got hurt, hope it healed nicely by now, love
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/26/2024 4:52:00 PM
thanks for sharing your own surreal dream...talking celery sticks...that's kind of funny. Glad you enjoyed my poem. Yes, all healed and my arm/shoulder are 100%! I appreciate your visits always. hugs and prayers, Sara
Date: 4/26/2024 3:40:00 PM
I can hear those parrots, Sara! … shaking branches like skeletons unearthed from cemeteries…Surreal indeed!
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/26/2024 4:51:00 PM
thanks, Kim, for your light hearted comments...yes, the dream was more than surreal...a nightmare! I appreciate you stopping by. Have a great evening, hugs, Sara
Date: 4/26/2024 12:02:00 PM
Captivity, observation, and the difference between truth and delusion appear to be the key themes of this magnificent poetry, dear Sara. Along with meeting mythological gods, interacting with caged parrots, and the dawning of a new day are all part of it. The ideas of confinement and surveillance are well conveyed via your use of symbolic language and striking images. Words like "surveillance-camera eyes," "explode my brain," and "skeletons unearthed from cemeteries" evoke feelings of anxiety and tension. The poem becomes even more intricate with the inclusion of allusions to legendary gods and the likening of abat-jours to mushrooms.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/26/2024 4:50:00 PM
grateful for your visit, dear Sotto, and for your in depth read of my 'bizarre' nightmare poem. You've captured it perfectly along with some of the dream's hidden meaning. After surgery I wore this arm immobilizer 24/7 and did feel like a caged bird. I felt confined for weeks on end. The Percocet sure didn't help my mind but subdued the intense pain. Anyway, I'm grateful you took so much time to read through my poem. Have a wonderful weekend ahead, your poetess friend in Texas, Sara
Date: 4/26/2024 9:59:00 AM
Nice hallucinatory journey into nightmare and twilight zone. Great write with creativity.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/26/2024 4:47:00 PM
I appreciate your visit, Jay, and for your remarks...you're right--the dream was Twilight Zonish...! Wishing you a pleasant evening, Sara
Date: 4/26/2024 9:41:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your nightmare/twilight zone write with a great picture. So sorry about your fall/surgery/meds. You got a great write out of it. Have a wonderful/blessed ~ day/weekend writing away.....................
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/26/2024 4:46:00 PM
thanks for your visit and your lovely remarks, Paula. Yes, many good things came out of the fall and the surgery. I learned many lessons and grew closer to God in the process. Wishing you a blessed evening, Sara
Date: 4/26/2024 7:10:00 AM
Oh my, Sara. Once was more than enough for this nightmare to have invaded your sleep. That's the kind you'd never choose to remember, but you did a fantastic job of describing the horror of those hallucinogens.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/26/2024 4:45:00 PM
your right, once was enough. I think I remembered it because I don't normally dream in such a surrealistic manner...it was the Percocet talking. Anyway, I appreciate your visit and your remarks. Have a splendid weekend, Sara
Date: 4/26/2024 5:46:00 AM
Would not even attempt interpretation...but simply find the hallucinatory journey fascinating and wonderfully described. Rimbaud would be jealous. The visionary quality of the image making is spellbinding....there is something alluring in such flights into another reality.
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Sara Etgen-Baker
Date: 4/26/2024 4:43:00 PM
thanks for visiting, Paul. I agree..strange dream that not even I could interpret...such a weird consequence of taking Percocet after surgery. I agree, there is something fascinating and alluring about surrealism. Have a splendid evening, Sara

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