Stormy

I waded with a cross through sea beds bone-dry now of torrential rains from last night's summer storm my arms carrying the boat to treeless banks And heard whispers , an angelic song amen-rowing from distant shores drowned by thunder-shouts of repentance from a rainstorm world that could end no sooner than tomorrow, bleeding the shore... Our town world did not end yet, but it could be near as the fork from a raging gale became a drowning plate gushing into bones, scabs of children... dead. What force came to the Sea of Noah after the third , fourth day ended in pain? Today, I ask,where shall i cast my nets when the light of calm wipes out, shuts down? SKAT's Deep And Dark Contest
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A  Avatar
May 3, 2015 at 10:31 PM
Nette, Congratulations on your win. Thanks for the support. SKAT
Kilmer Avatar
June 13, 2014 at 8:40 PM
Nice one Nette! I am in awe...~Kilmer
Deschler Avatar
May 26, 2014 at 6:22 PM
This poem is stunning, Nette! An absolutely beautiful write, with great depth and emotional expression. Congratulations on your well deserved win!
Eastman Avatar
May 25, 2014 at 5:29 PM
Definitely creative and inspired! Congratulations on your win.
May Avatar
May 23, 2014 at 7:41 AM
An exquisite gem...Congrats on your win Nette
George   Avatar
May 23, 2014 at 5:11 AM
Emoting very deep and profound feeling, Nette. Many congrat's on your WELL DESERVED FIRST PLACE. Lainie
Roberts Avatar
May 23, 2014 at 12:51 AM
Congratulations. Nette .....Seren
A. Sharma Avatar
May 22, 2014 at 10:19 PM
Nette u r just awesome ! what a spectacular write n surely a great win ! congrats !
Ponce Avatar
May 22, 2014 at 7:03 PM
Nette, the way you have written this made me imagine a musicbox playing and images in sepia are revolving around me and then suddenly there's nothing. One couldn't tell if it was the end of the day, someone's life or a relationship. Congratulations! You always astound me.
Fraser Avatar
May 22, 2014 at 3:26 PM
Having listened to the tune, and now reading your words. I'd be very surprised if it's not rated highly, it's wonderful Princess <*> James :)
Richards Avatar
May 22, 2014 at 2:43 PM
Wow......dear Nette......one would not even have to see the video or hear the music of Craig's challenge...... I can read your poem, and see it unfold, the mood is excellently portrayed ! Great work !!
Allison Avatar
May 22, 2014 at 2:29 PM
Creativity at its best! A well deserved winner. Hugs jan xxx
Sirak Avatar
May 22, 2014 at 6:41 AM
You took 'creative' to a whole new dimension! Your imagery keeps building, elevating to new levels, reaching for a climax, then "in a wisp...shuts off" This one is a favorite!!!
Lamoureux Avatar
May 21, 2014 at 11:23 AM
This is indeed creative. I am impressed.
United Avatar
May 19, 2014 at 11:22 PM
I always feel as if I've just been given a much wanted Christmas gift when I read your poems .
Hamilton Avatar
May 19, 2014 at 5:56 PM
a strong and fantastically powerful pen Nette simply brilliant ty for visiting my page hugs
Dietrich Avatar
May 19, 2014 at 4:08 PM
ooh great abrupt ending, the night shuts off!! and the screech like the harp, I could really envision that too, kind of like when My sister used to practice on her violin! great atmospheric poem, Nette.
Carroll Avatar
May 19, 2014 at 2:12 PM
Both magical and lovely Nette!
Marcum Wong Avatar
May 19, 2014 at 1:27 PM
A truly superb write Nette!
Torres Avatar
May 19, 2014 at 11:35 AM
the stillness of frozen heartbeat causing us breathless in a moment we dropped in your page... With a poem written in sadness and pain....you painted a muse that leads our soul to keep living... (OMG.. di ko na-keri!!) ...ang ganda!!! ...Superb write as always... :O))
Carrillo Avatar
May 19, 2014 at 11:27 AM
A very beautiful poem to read this morning. Thanks for sharing... Lucilla
Kos Avatar
May 19, 2014 at 11:26 AM
I agree with Paul Callus's Review. I like this a lot!!.
Guillermo - Fraser Avatar
May 19, 2014 at 11:20 AM
I love this one the melancholy within the lines combined with music...creates an aura of solemnize thinking and pondering... Straight to my faves.. The rain that comes in the last line is an added ambiance of tears...:)naks naman! Ako'you napabuntonghinga at naisiphayo sa Ganda :)
Kos Avatar
May 19, 2014 at 11:30 AM
WOW! I love Tagalog languag! I'd love to read Francisco Balagtas in Tagalog.
Callus Avatar
May 19, 2014 at 11:14 AM
What can I say Nette! emotively beautiful! You went so deep with this one...great choice of words and phrases. merits a 7 rating :) // paul
Gonza Avatar
May 19, 2014 at 10:38 AM
Your word choice creates a melancholic, sharp cadence--- and the pace of the poem matches with the character's emotions. The end line whips, Nette.One of my faves.
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