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Stillborn

As I closed my door and lay down to sleep, A poem came and violently knocked at my door. Being quite late, I put a rein on my desire to admit it in Even in my sleep I could hear the faint sound of a knock. In the wee hours of the morn, as I sat up to house it, Only scattered phrases and broken lines floated around. A crazy excitement made me trap them in ink. But nothing worthwhile showed up on the writing pad. I found I had only violated the virginity of the paper. After hours of spasmodic labor pain What came out was a stillborn with no heart beats. It lay limp before me and all excitement died down It's still body, I found had closely resembled me. Something of me was there stamped on it. How could I who had parented it, Callously discard it in a dustbin? So, I carefully stashed it away in a secret place. Where no one’s prying eyes would ever fall over it! April. 6. 2023 ~ Placed Third~ Free Submission Poetry Contest Sponsor- Sotto Poet

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Date: 4/10/2023 11:25:00 AM
There are so many elements about your poetry, dear Valsa, that I like. The overall form of the poem demonstrates creative thought. Many congratulations on your win! I really enjoy how many metaphors there are in this poem.
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Date: 4/9/2023 6:24:00 AM
I have a book where i begin all my poems and this book is carried everywhere I go there are many stillborn poems as you creatively described in it, which need a quiet mind and a pounding heart to be completed. I enjoyed your read incredibly Valsa dear friend. Thank you for the inspiration you spread. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 4/8/2023 2:05:00 AM
- A wonderful poem, Valsa :) - Congratulations on your win :) - hugs
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Date: 4/8/2023 1:17:00 AM
I see this has won, congratulations, Valsa, great metaphor:)
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Date: 4/7/2023 11:45:00 PM
Back with congratulations my friend.
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Date: 4/7/2023 10:38:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Valsa! I love the analogy in this poem.
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Date: 4/7/2023 3:25:00 PM
If you have this much thought into stillborn of a poem, wow, how lucky are your kids to have you as their mother, : ). Love it my dear friend,
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Date: 4/6/2023 1:11:00 PM
Dear Valsa, How wonderful to name a poem that doesn't survive 'Stillborn!' My wastebasket is full...Yet, sometimes, when I like an idea, I'll keep it, forget it, then happen upon it sometime later and see it with different eyes. I'm sure you do, too. Creation is strange. :)
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Date: 4/6/2023 11:43:00 AM
So many things to love about your poem dear Valsa. The shape of the whole poem is imaginative. Comparing an unwanted poem to a still born is something I think many poets can relate to. Too much effort goes into producing it and giving it birth, but it has no soul no heartbeat. What a wonderful description! I admire this poem so very much. Every best wish Valsa.
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Date: 4/6/2023 11:16:00 AM
A lovely write. Love It. Have a blessed day.............
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Date: 4/6/2023 10:29:00 AM
There would be a time and place when you will revive it, giving it a new form and meaning. There is life in every word that stems from the heart--as your poem clearly depicts, Valsa.
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