Still Life

Still life A beautiful gardenia in a glistening cut glass vase Captured of a time before when the light was perfect, the fragrance sweet and the petals soft as vanilla pudding ~ still life Our love was that of dreams, picture perfect Captured in a photograph, placed in a heart shaped ornate silver frame displayed proudly on the mantle ~ still love Days pass and petals lie scattered on the floor in random patterns wilted and curled, pale and drab, a brown stem in stagnant water, the vase stained, glistening no more ~ no life Months later, shards of glass lie, scattered on the floor an empty broken frame rests face down in the ashes of the photo, torn to shreds and burned ~ no love 6/29/17 For the “Broken” poetry contest Sponsored by: Lewis Raynes

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Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 7/6/2017 2:36:00 AM

Wow, this is great Chris. The photo, the painting, the analogy and the move from still love (life) to no life. I like this. Congratulations on your win, Kai

Chris Green
Date: 7/6/2017 10:27:00 AM

Thank so very much Kai, I am happy you enjoyed this one.

John Hamilton

Date: 7/5/2017 9:12:00 AM

Wonderful write Chris, congrats on a fine placement in the contest!

Chris Green
Date: 7/5/2017 10:13:00 AM

Thanks so very much John.

Heidi Sands

Date: 7/4/2017 10:20:00 PM

Congratulations Chris :)

Chris Green
Date: 7/5/2017 8:36:00 AM

Thanks so much Heidi.

Lewis Raynes

Date: 7/4/2017 10:05:00 PM

Loved reading this a few times over and picking up different takes on it each time, congratulations on your placement Chris

Chris Green
Date: 7/5/2017 8:35:00 AM

Thanks so very much Lewis. I am thrilled you liked it.

Darren White

Date: 6/30/2017 3:40:00 AM

still life - still love - no life - no love.... I love it how it is built up, The "still" in its double meaning has a large impact in the last two stanzas, where is died in all its forms. Extended metaphor, beautifully worked out, talented friend :)

Chris Green
Date: 6/30/2017 8:14:00 AM

Thanks so very much Darren. I appreciate your kindness always.

John Hamilton

Date: 6/29/2017 2:24:00 PM

This is special, wonderful use of the metaphor death of a flower, death of a relationship, very powerful writing, like everyone else, I think this will do well!

Chris Green
Date: 6/29/2017 2:29:00 PM

Thanks so much John. I am glad you liked this one.

Lenna Walker

Date: 6/29/2017 2:16:00 PM

Creatively expressed Chris !! I really like how you ended each verse. A wonderful entry for the contest :) GOOD LUCK my friend :)

Chris Green
Date: 6/29/2017 2:28:00 PM

Thanks so very much Lenna. I appreciate this coming from a talented poet like you. It really means a lot to me.

Alexis Y.

Date: 6/29/2017 2:11:00 PM

Hi Chris, I enjoyed what you did with the contest theme. Good content and metaphors. It looks like a winner to me. Excellent job:-) Alexis

Chris Green
Date: 6/29/2017 2:28:00 PM

Hey there my friend, thank you so much for your visit and kind words. I always smile when you stop by Alexis.

Charlie Smith

Date: 6/29/2017 2:03:00 PM

Great compliment of metaphors Chris so very well done, should be a winner...

Chris Green
Date: 6/29/2017 2:27:00 PM

Thanks so much Charlie.

Heidi Sands

Date: 6/29/2017 1:18:00 PM

Wow, this so clearly portrays what once was love, lost and broken apart. I would think this will do well in the contest! :)

Chris Green
Date: 6/29/2017 1:24:00 PM

Thanks so much Heidi. I originally wrote this with the two stanza endings actually separating the stanzas but then I read the contest rules (phew)...24 line max so I just tacked them on at the end. :)

Mike Gentile

Date: 6/29/2017 11:56:00 AM

Chris, a vivid illustration of what happens to most of us at some time or another. I enjoyed it. Good Luck!

Chris Green
Date: 6/29/2017 12:17:00 PM

Thanks so much Mike. I know I have been there

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/29/2017 11:29:00 AM

A winner! A romantic poem knocking down boundaries! Saving this lovely poem! GL Chris!

Chris Green
Date: 6/29/2017 12:17:00 PM

Thank you Kim. I am happy you liked this one