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Still Life

Still life

A beautiful gardenia
in a glistening cut glass vase
Captured of a time before
when the light was perfect,
the fragrance sweet and the petals 
soft as vanilla pudding ~ still life

Our love was that of dreams,
picture perfect 
Captured in a photograph,
placed in a heart shaped
ornate silver frame
displayed proudly on the mantle ~ still love 

Days pass and petals lie 
scattered on the floor
in random patterns
wilted and curled, pale and drab,
a brown stem in stagnant water,
the vase stained, glistening no more ~ no life 

Months later, shards of glass lie, 
scattered on the floor
an empty broken frame rests
face down in the ashes
of the photo, torn to shreds
and burned ~ no love 


6/29/17
For the “Broken” poetry contest
Sponsored by: Lewis Raynes
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Neumann Avatar
July 6, 2017 at 2:36 AM
Wow, this is great Chris. The photo, the painting, the analogy and the move from still love (life) to no life. I like this. Congratulations on your win, Kai
Green Avatar
July 6, 2017 at 10:27 AM
Thank so very much Kai, I am happy you enjoyed this one.
Hamilton Avatar
July 5, 2017 at 9:12 AM
Wonderful write Chris, congrats on a fine placement in the contest!
Green Avatar
July 5, 2017 at 10:13 AM
Thanks so very much John.
Sands Avatar
July 4, 2017 at 10:20 PM
Congratulations Chris :)
Green Avatar
July 5, 2017 at 8:36 AM
Thanks so much Heidi.
Raynes Avatar
July 4, 2017 at 10:05 PM
Loved reading this a few times over and picking up different takes on it each time, congratulations on your placement Chris
Green Avatar
July 5, 2017 at 8:35 AM
Thanks so very much Lewis. I am thrilled you liked it.
White Avatar
June 30, 2017 at 3:40 AM
still life - still love - no life - no love.... I love it how it is built up, The "still" in its double meaning has a large impact in the last two stanzas, where is died in all its forms. Extended metaphor, beautifully worked out, talented friend :)
Green Avatar
June 30, 2017 at 8:14 AM
Thanks so very much Darren. I appreciate your kindness always.
Hamilton Avatar
June 29, 2017 at 2:24 PM
This is special, wonderful use of the metaphor death of a flower, death of a relationship, very powerful writing, like everyone else, I think this will do well!
Green Avatar
June 29, 2017 at 2:29 PM
Thanks so much John. I am glad you liked this one.
Walker Avatar
June 29, 2017 at 2:16 PM
Creatively expressed Chris !! I really like how you ended each verse. A wonderful entry for the contest :) GOOD LUCK my friend :)
Green Avatar
June 29, 2017 at 2:28 PM
Thanks so very much Lenna. I appreciate this coming from a talented poet like you. It really means a lot to me.
Y. Avatar
June 29, 2017 at 2:11 PM
Hi Chris, I enjoyed what you did with the contest theme. Good content and metaphors. It looks like a winner to me. Excellent job:-) Alexis
Green Avatar
June 29, 2017 at 2:28 PM
Hey there my friend, thank you so much for your visit and kind words. I always smile when you stop by Alexis.
Smith Avatar
June 29, 2017 at 2:03 PM
Great compliment of metaphors Chris so very well done, should be a winner...
Green Avatar
June 29, 2017 at 2:27 PM
Thanks so much Charlie.
Sands Avatar
June 29, 2017 at 1:18 PM
Wow, this so clearly portrays what once was love, lost and broken apart. I would think this will do well in the contest! :)
Green Avatar
June 29, 2017 at 1:24 PM
Thanks so much Heidi. I originally wrote this with the two stanza endings actually separating the stanzas but then I read the contest rules (phew)...24 line max so I just tacked them on at the end. :)
Gentile Avatar
June 29, 2017 at 11:56 AM
Chris, a vivid illustration of what happens to most of us at some time or another. I enjoyed it. Good Luck!
Green Avatar
June 29, 2017 at 12:17 PM
Thanks so much Mike. I know I have been there
Rodrigues Avatar
June 29, 2017 at 11:29 AM
A winner! A romantic poem knocking down boundaries! Saving this lovely poem! GL Chris!
Green Avatar
June 29, 2017 at 12:17 PM
Thank you Kim. I am happy you liked this one
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