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spring streets hiku

topaz rain t u m b l e s across coal-spring streets t r e m b l i n g ~ p u d d l e s of pollen

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Victor Buhagiar

Date: 5/19/2025 8:58:00 AM

My congrats for a poem placed first. Deserved.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/18/2025 4:11:00 PM

Congratulations on your creative winning work. Way to go. Sara K

Paige Hind

Date: 5/18/2025 10:12:00 AM

Yay!! A win!! If they didn't place this, they would have been crazy. LOL <3

Valsa George

Date: 5/18/2025 5:20:00 AM

'Puddles of pollen'.... this sounds other worldly. We are having Topaz rainfall in Kerala now. I can see only muddy puddles where as a poet like you sees puddles of pollen. This is Nature's way of pollination. With spring, these seeds will all germinate. Wonderful haiku. Congratulations on your top win.

Kahlani Steele

Date: 5/17/2025 11:09:00 PM

Hi, Empress! Why does it not surprise me to see you in first place? The imagery you have created with "topaz rain" and "puddles of pollen" is sublime and indicative of your usual Empress flair and undeniable skill with words. This piece is truly inspiring. Congratulations.

Ink Empress
Date: 5/17/2025 11:10:00 PM

Hi dear kahlani! So nice to see you in comments! Please post more often on soup! I love your poetry style! So good to have you here talented soul! I appreciate your kind and thoughtful comment, truly! Sending you light always

Ink Empress

Date: 5/17/2025 10:20:00 PM

Thankful to brian for placing this hiku 1st! Grateful that he understood what i was trying to paint with "puddle of pollen"

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 5/17/2025 9:35:00 PM

An interesting haiku. Rain seems to make pollen allergies worse for me.

Ink Empress
Date: 5/17/2025 10:18:00 PM

Yes they do. And especially those puddles ugh! Appreciate your decent and kind and generous comment. Sending you light always dear hilda

Justin Bordner

Date: 5/17/2025 7:12:00 PM

Petals in a puddle of tepid onyx rain do resemble the pattern of a pretty summer dress...J.A.B.

Paige Hind

Date: 5/17/2025 4:57:00 PM

Gorgeous. "streets trembling in rain"- what a metaphor, I can see it, wow, Ink <3 keep up the haikus, they are really, really good

Ink Empress
Date: 5/17/2025 10:17:00 PM

Thank you sweet paige! You are so kind always! Sending you light

Zyrool Gifford

Date: 5/17/2025 4:33:00 PM

Hello Ink, this so wonderful, loved the way you laid it out, so creative. Wishing you a wonderful weekend my friend.

Ink Empress
Date: 5/17/2025 10:15:00 PM

Always appreciate your kindness .. thank you so much. I like kind souls. Sending you light always

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/17/2025 4:06:00 PM

Amazing how the pollen can float like that isn't it. I like this one. I have been outside a good bit yesterday and today with the end results of having trouble breathing and runny nose at the same time. I should have stayed inside. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Sara K

Ink Empress
Date: 5/17/2025 10:14:00 PM

Ah everyones catching that i hear. Thank you dear sara. Drink some hot tea . Ginger tea is the best. Sending you light always

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/17/2025 3:09:00 PM

You always do these so cool, Ink. You with your golden Hiku pen.

Ink Empress
Date: 5/17/2025 10:13:00 PM

You are the best ! Haha

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 5/17/2025 2:54:00 PM

hmmm I don't like pollen but I do love the rain, splish splash, :)

Ink Empress
Date: 5/17/2025 10:13:00 PM

Tomsz response is funny! We dont like pollen yes but what to do this is what we get sometimes. Lolol

Tom Woody
Date: 5/17/2025 4:18:00 PM

Bawk bawk

Constance La France

Date: 5/17/2025 2:53:00 PM

Ink, so beautifully penned, blessings ~

Ink Empress
Date: 5/17/2025 10:12:00 PM

Thank you dear constance, so nice to see you in comments. Hope you are doing well! Sending you light always

Lin Lane

Date: 5/17/2025 10:10:00 AM

Having a tease when I responded to Aura's comment, I have to concede your skill at writing this form, Ink.

Ink Empress
Date: 5/17/2025 10:17:00 AM

Haha i just saw dear linnersz, my sis used to love writing haikus she says she is bored of haikus now. N doesnt understand why im postin so many now haha. I know you were teasing. I hope brian loved my effort: goodnight linnersz.

Lioness Onpaper

Date: 5/17/2025 10:02:00 AM

Ooo topaz rain!!! Wonderful haiku papi !! Puddles of pollen … love the alliterations aeee

Robert James Liguori

Date: 5/17/2025 10:01:00 AM

This is the greatest hiku ever written!!! So interesting how you brought rain to life. I often wonder what inspires you.

Ink Empress
Date: 5/17/2025 10:03:00 PM

Dear Robert, thank you! What inspired me to write this was a spring storm in somewhere yesterday which i saw on news! Unfortunately floods arent all pretty! But sure some prefer to read a puddle of buttlerflies!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 5/17/2025 9:24:00 AM

Love seeing you write in Haiku style. I enjoyed reading your wonderful write. Have a wonderful day/week writing away...........

Ink Empress
Date: 5/17/2025 10:02:00 PM

Thank you dear paula! Some people should learn to be sweet from souls like you! You are so kind! Appreciate your support

The Aura Rhymes

Date: 5/17/2025 9:13:00 AM

What’s going on ? Why are you writing haikus ?

Lin Lane
Date: 5/17/2025 9:24:00 AM

I’m with you, Aura. I don’t like that hiccup form. ;-)

Ink Empress
Date: 5/17/2025 9:18:00 AM

Lolol u shud too!!! Dahlin