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This poem is written to describe how an individual with Borderline Personality disorder sometimes feel, when they go through splitting. When they see everything in black or white or good or bad and form a defense mechanism called splitting, leaving them exhausted from extreme emotional fluctuations, unable to grasp reality. BPD can sometimes be formed due to early childhood abandoment or abuse. The poem here describes how they feel like everything is fading during splitting. 

 

Sometimes my soul resembles distant horizons, like burning stars abandoned between dusk and dawn. When the sky hangs as heavy as my hazy heart, I search for a sign from heaven to soothe the somber sequences of nature blanketing mountains of misery, as the spectrum of colors is full of deception. Maybe the universe illustrates splitting sunsets within my murky thoughts, As I'm oblivious to the rhythm of riveting songs of spring. I sing tunes of autumn, orchestrated in black and white, grey refrains remain locked as an encrypted mystery of winter land, within esoteric hieroglyphics blowing as tornadoes of hurt. I am envious of the sound of comforting rain, and clouds carrying chaos- weeping reveries of angst. But what if these translucent tears and the anxiety I try to hide, fall like mists of haunting memories, to follow the moon-glade, ruffling along sterling ripples, unravelling jasmine compassion across rivers of scattered gems, would I then feel the light of love, synchronize a eucalyptus lullaby that sketches amethyst amulets through midnight fears, to embrace these fragile dandelion wishes, behind metaphorical fields of periwinkle flowers. My dreams are fading, whilst darkness whirls in unending circles. I am barely breathing, as the silhouette of a pale sapphire shatters into a sea of sadness. For you have cast a shadow upon the sun within my mind, and all that's left in this eclipsed realm is the petrichor scent of healing, amidst the dying petals in my balcony, that mimic flames of life and betrayals. Maybe, it is from the aftermath of storms, we flourish rainbow roses soaked in redolent incense- roaming through an opaque canvas of clarity.

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Date: 1/6/2024 1:41:00 PM
You placed again..Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Date: 1/6/2024 7:14:00 AM
Ink, CONGRATS on your well-deserved win with this profoundly effective piece! Janice
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Date: 1/6/2024 6:09:00 AM
Back with hearty congratulations on your well-earned contest placement dear Ink.
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Date: 10/9/2023 2:35:00 PM
Ink, excellent writing and congratulations on your win in my contest, I love your quote, Constance
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Date: 9/26/2023 1:50:00 PM
Beautiful writing. I wish you healing. Your words take me to another place.
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Date: 9/25/2023 10:00:00 PM
I am hearing about this twisted mental state for the first time. I am sure many others too are equally ignorant. How effectively you have illustrated the trauma of such a victim. You deserve gratitude from all of us for articulating such a mental state in such powerful verse.... Their sky is streaked with "clouds carrying chaos- weeping reveries of angst." ! All that is left in their lives is "the petrichor scent of healing".How beautifully you have connected 'clouds weeping reveries of angst' with 'the petrichor scent of healing'. Kudos, gifted poet ! .
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Date: 9/26/2023 12:08:00 AM
Wow your feedback blew me away and left me in awe! So sincere and so kind you are, means so much coming from a talented soul like u, thank you so much always for your warm poetic presence
Date: 9/25/2023 2:32:00 PM
Blindness really speaks for itself your words create a vision beautifully painted In Words
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Date: 9/26/2023 12:06:00 AM
Thank you so much liam for your support
Date: 9/25/2023 2:23:00 PM
No experience with BPD but your piece has opened these eyes. Tragic. :o/
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Date: 9/26/2023 12:06:00 AM
Thank you so much for reading and for leaving your thoughts, truly grateful
Date: 9/25/2023 2:07:00 PM
I am ignorant of the issues around BPD but this paints a vivid picture. I know a beautiful yet turbulent poem when I read one though. All our human experiences can be poetic as sometimes it's the poet's vocation to articulate the indescribable. Very lovely :)
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Date: 9/26/2023 12:06:00 AM
Ah thank you sam, you are so kind and so supportive, im forever grateful for your generous feedback
Date: 9/25/2023 8:01:00 AM
- A horrible disease with all these mental ailments that are mostly associated with some form of black or white mode... excellently written, Ink - Important topic to focus on - GL in the contest :) - hugs
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Date: 9/25/2023 9:52:00 AM
Thank you so much for reading and for leaving your thoughts. Im always grateful for your support
Date: 9/25/2023 7:52:00 AM
I know a few people who suffer from BPD and many people are unaware of this condition. You have written a real emotive poem to describe the condition. It is always good when a poet uses poetry to raise awareness.. You poem is full of poetic lines and metaphors to describe the condition and how one can feel.. i am not sure many people are aware of splitting and the effects it has.. I can feel the angst in your words and how one just wants peace but remains misunderstood.. Good luck win contest.
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Date: 9/25/2023 9:53:00 AM
Yes i know you’ve also written few poems about bpd and also I remember writing together too. You have an empathetic mind, and very emotionally intelligent to fee for others. Appreciate your support thank u
Date: 9/25/2023 7:45:00 AM
Ink--this is such a profound, insightful, and well-constructed poem. I was taken aback as I read each verse putting myself in the shoes of someone with BPD. While teaching, I occasionally taught a student with BPD. I just felt for them as I could see their struggle, their roaming through the opaque of clarity that you mention. These dear souls were dealing not only with adolescence & puberty but their disorder. I just don't have the words to describe how your poem impacted me. Well done!
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Date: 9/25/2023 9:55:00 AM
Oh yes most teenagers going through bpd go through so much like suicidal thoughts self isolation etc its very sad, and I appreciate you sharing and reading really and feelng this poem. Grateful
Date: 9/25/2023 6:50:00 AM
Dear friend, Ink. Your magical brush effortlessly brought to life a stunning and enchanting world filled with whimsy and beauty. The imagery in your poem is so vivid and your poetic talent is so evident. Through your words, you give a voice to those who are experiencing the struggles of Bipolar. I read this gem two times and each time I read it, I discover new emotional nuances and intricacies that captivate me. This is a Fave for meI wish you the best of luck in the contest.
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Date: 9/25/2023 10:00:00 AM
Thank you so much for always being so kind and supportive truly grateful for your generous feedback. And well wishes
Date: 9/25/2023 6:24:00 AM
Another poem spotlighting a mental challenge some face. Bipolar would seem related, though perhaps not quite the same. Your last stanza highlights the sad dilemma, wanting clarity but getting darkness. I don't know how you do the job you do. You must have a ton of empathy
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Date: 9/25/2023 10:03:00 AM
I appreciate your support truly always and yes i am an empath. Theres highs n lows of being one and bipolar is very different to bpd but often many confused those two etc. thank u for reading . Always grateful
Date: 9/25/2023 5:33:00 AM
What can I say , I’m impressed …
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Date: 9/25/2023 10:03:00 AM
Awwwn you are too sweet
Date: 9/25/2023 5:12:00 AM
For you have cast a shadow upon the sun within my mind, and all that's left in this eclipsed realm is the petrichor scent of healing, amidst the dying petals in my balcony---A FAVE for your impressive vocabulary throughout, Ink. And your poem gives voice to those suffering from BPD. Thanks for the note at the top-- it enhances the meaning of your poem.
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Date: 9/25/2023 10:04:00 AM
Always grateful for your poetic presence and support you have been nothing but kind thank you so much for that
Date: 9/25/2023 4:53:00 AM
"as the spectrum of colors is full of deception" Ahh, ink there are so many amazing lines here that deeply convey the grief stricken emotions of 'splitting sunsets' and turmoil.. Sigh, I can truly feel the pain of these words and the ache that one goes when suffering with bipolar personality disorder.. When everything appears black or white, lacking a sense of stability and almost everything seems to trigger. You've impeccably poured feelings in these metaphorical descriptions & am in awe truly
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Date: 9/25/2023 10:05:00 AM
awwn thank you so much for always being so supportive and kind i appreciate it always u are so mindful and very soulful are your comments .. grateful
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Date: 9/25/2023 4:55:00 AM
"within esoteric hieroglyphics blowing as tornadoes of hurt. I am envious of the sound of comforting rain, and clouds carrying chaos-weeping reveries of angst" Simply brilliant! And that fourth stanza with so many imageries yet heartfelt depth.. "For you have cast a shadow upon the sun within my mind" Phenomenally done, best of luck for the contest!
Date: 9/25/2023 4:31:00 AM
Oooo strong start!! Sometimes my soul resembles distant horizon…abandoned between dusk and dawn… mmm maybe the universe illustrates splitting sunsets writhing murky thoughts,ooooo just absolute treat for the eyes and the imagery..eucalyptus lullaby that sketches amethyst amulets through midnight fears,.. I mean cmooon . The depth of the emotions that run through this sets a tone .. pure beauty..
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Date: 9/25/2023 10:05:00 AM
Ah papi thank u so much for reading
Date: 9/25/2023 3:39:00 AM
Deep. So many emotional layers to this poem that each time I read it I see something new. Well done and hugs you are not alone.
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Date: 9/25/2023 10:06:00 AM
Thank u so much truly

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