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Tears streaming inside, emotions, trying to hide. Hurt can’t be explained, in words that are plane. Feelings hidden from eye site, fake smile brings delight. Sacrificing self, displace feeling on a shelf. Catering friends needs, as my heart just bleeds. Passion mislead to others, every soul brothers. How long can I stand, on crumbling, dry, barren land? My drained soul in need, can you hear my plea? More demanding needs exhaust, my will to fight lost. Rock bottom now I stand, reaching out for someone’s hand. Time not even friend, three hands tied can’t lend. Darkness consumes, vision blurred, death within occurred. By: Nathan Bane Leccese © All Rights Reserved 08/01/2009

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Date: 4/4/2010 11:35:00 AM
Good use of metaphoric language.. Sara
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Date: 4/2/2010 1:15:00 PM
Thank you Nathan for running the 9/11 contest. I am eager to read them all. I am sure it was hard to decide. Thank you for my 3rd place. I am sorry if you are hurting anywhere near as much as this poem indicates. I hope not. But it was great poetry. Love, Joyce
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Date: 4/2/2010 12:26:00 PM
enjoyed this work, very heart felt.
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Date: 3/31/2010 9:01:00 PM
How can we help? Knowing that you are suffering and being unable to help is sad. Why don't you enter Brian's footle contest. => a 4 syllable poem. Just to let us know you are ok...sort of- Lovingly, Dane Ann
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Date: 3/15/2010 5:13:00 PM
Nathan, This poem has a lot of pain in it. You have been through so much. Heart ache is horrible. STORY: When my cousin's wife divorced him, he suffered greatly, like you seem to be suffering. My grandmother/his aunt, made a trite statement that helped him. Here it is. She was in her 90's. She asked him, "What do you do if your hamster dies? He responded, "Get a new hamster." EXACTLY! After that, he was able to get on with his life and found a wonderful wife =very happy. Prayers 4U
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Date: 3/10/2010 5:12:00 AM
Nathan, Your contest was mind and heart rending. It was emotionally painful to write for it. It must have been horrendous to read the many entries. SUGGESTION: post a contest update explaining that the pain, tears and re-living fears when judging the 9-11 poems was impossible to bear. Your contest to honor 9-11, shows great patriotism, but horrid memories- WE UNDERSTAND!!! We miss you. Poetry Soup is a loving place. Don't stay away. We want you back. Smiles with Love, Dane Ann
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Date: 2/10/2010 4:29:00 PM
Dear Nathan, Hope all is Well for YOU and YOURS I noticed YOU have not choose any one for YOUR Contest " 9 11 " I pray YOUR Health is Fine Thank-YOU for YOUR Inspiration ALWAYS YOUR Liege...HG
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Date: 12/24/2009 11:41:00 PM
Hi, are you? We miss you at PoetrySoup. Have a Merry Christmas and a Happy, prosperous New Year. Kindest Regards, Andrew.
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Date: 12/14/2009 8:44:00 PM
Hello Nathan, nice to see you back. Your poem is powerful and haunting. I hope everything is all right. I find writing helps to release feelings of sadness ... so write it Nathan, write it for us, or for yourself, whatever it is, and release it...
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Date: 12/8/2009 8:26:00 AM
Where are you, Nathan? How are you? Please write more. Lovingly, Dane Ann (soup mail)
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Date: 12/8/2009 5:50:00 AM
Beautiful writing here, Nathan ... been quite awhile since you've posted here at PoetrySoup. Hope you had a wonderful Thanksgiving and the holidays ahead are blessed for you and yours ... hope to see more of your writing in 2010 ... smile ...
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Date: 11/29/2009 1:39:00 PM
Oh NO! This poem has beautiful flow, but it's so sad. Remember, better days do come eventually. Sometimes we have to go through a lot first though. In the end, our minds might slip a little. LOL But our souls grow! And for that reason, tears and strugles are worth the pain. Advice: Be TRUE to YOURSELF!!! Love yourself and others. Then, happiness will find you.... Get up off of the bottom! You don't belong there. Smiles and love from a fellow poetess to you. Nice write. Dane Ann
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Date: 9/22/2009 11:36:00 AM
Wonderful poem Nathan, a delight to read>>James
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Date: 9/21/2009 10:20:00 AM
Thank you for sharing your excellent poetry with us Nathan. As always I wish you the best in your future writing endeavors whatever they may be. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/21/2009 8:39:00 AM
One feels the despair in these words....well done !~ Carrie
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Date: 9/21/2009 6:13:00 AM
Poised poem. Pls notice on crumbling, barren mauve land?=7 cylab; without a word it's 6cyl. Looking forward to reading more of your choka poems.
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Date: 9/21/2009 1:53:00 AM
Powerful choka Nathan, How long can I stand, on crumbling, barren land?" "Darkness consumes, vision blurred, death within occurred". I like these line...Raul
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