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Growing up just outside the CHI I would spy Always wondering what lied inside Waiting for my turn to slide Then I got the call homie Bob had died While chasing a sack inside No time to say goodbye I cant lie I cried while I was high Putting on my tie to see him lie Smoked till I was fried my tears finally dried Now I'm back on stride On my way to find where they hide So they can all die that's my way to say bye
First time in the CHI what a sin Getting redemption for my kin with a grin I knew I would win Then everything started to spin As the bullets sprayed against the tin Hoping I killed the twin Now I'm always sipping gin with an unlocked pin And the lights dim feeling sad for him As I wake not knowing my fate there's a sudden quake Am I to late what a mistake Just need to focus on whats at stake And not flake like the rest of these fakes Do it for my families sake No time to wait cant hesitate Don't want to be late Need to escape the state of hate That's sealing my fate Wishing I would have kept a clean slate
3/14/2017

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Date: 7/3/2017 3:51:00 AM
What John said is true! It would have done much better if the format went with the rhyme
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Date: 3/16/2017 2:38:00 PM
Where's Big Pun when you need him? :p
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White Wolf
Date: 7/3/2017 3:49:00 AM
You're a rip-snorter /|\
Date: 3/16/2017 9:13:00 AM
Sounds like a fine rap Jeremy, can imagine Jay Z rappin this out! Better to format this more like a rhyme then it is easier to read, would place higher that way. Nice placement!
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